唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự tự nhiên và có phần mâu thuẫn, bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Hãy cố gắng trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và giải thích lý do một cách ngắn gọn, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp.

範例: I don't usually enjoy singing because I'm not confident in my voice, but sometimes I like to sing along to my favorite songs for fun.

建議: Câu trả lời thiếu cấu trúc rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp, bạn nên trả lời đầy đủ và mạch lạc hơn, tránh ngắt quãng và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh.

範例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in Grade 3 at primary school.

建議: Câu trả lời không rõ ràng và có lỗi lặp từ, bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp và giải thích thêm lý do để câu trả lời có nội dung phong phú hơn.

範例: I want to sing for my mom because she always supports me and I want to make her happy.

建議: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng có lỗi ngắt quãng và từ sai (ví dụ: 'relieve threat' nên là 'relieve stress'). Bạn nên sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và dùng từ chính xác hơn.

範例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps people express their emotions and relieve stress. For example, when people sing their favorite songs, they often feel more relaxed and joyful. Moreover, singing with others can create a strong sense of connection.

× I always enjoy singing when I'm singing.

✓ I always enjoy singing.

The phrase 'when I'm singing' is redundant because 'enjoy singing' already implies the action. Also, 'I'm singing' is present continuous, which is correct, but unnecessary here. Simplifying the sentence improves clarity.

× Yes, I have learned. How to sing when I was? Grade 3. Of the primary school.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in Grade 3 of primary school.

The original sentence has fragmented structure and incorrect word order. 'Have learned' is acceptable but 'learned' is more natural here. The question 'How to sing when I was?' is incomplete and incorrect. The corrected sentence combines the ideas into a proper past tense statement.

× To be honest, the one I want to sing for is my mom. She she can.

✓ To be honest, the one I want to sing for is my mom because she can appreciate it.

The phrase 'She she can' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. It seems to be a repetition and incomplete thought. The correction clarifies the reason and corrects pronoun usage.

× it allows them to express their emotion and relieve threat.

✓ it allows them to express their emotions and relieve stress.

'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions' because 'their' refers to multiple people. 'Threat' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'stress' which fits the meaning of relieving tension.

× For example, P. When people sing their favorite songs, they often feel more relaxed and joyful.

✓ For example, when people sing their favorite songs, they often feel more relaxed and joyful.

The fragment 'P.' is unclear and disrupts sentence flow. Removing it creates a complete and coherent sentence.

× Singing can also create the sense of. Connection when done with others.

✓ Singing can also create a sense of connection when done with others.

The sentence is broken incorrectly with a period after 'of'. Combining the parts into one sentence corrects the structure and improves readability.