唱歌— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Avoid confusing phrases like "while eyes seeing some kind of songs." Instead, directly express your feelings about singing and mention specific artists clearly. Also, try to keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy.

範例: Yes, I like singing because it brings me joy. I especially enjoy singing Western music from artists like The Weeknd and Taylor Swift, who are among my favourites.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question and explain your experience with singing in simple, correct sentences. Avoid unclear phrases like "duesing" and "seeing those song."

範例: No, I have never taken singing lessons. However, I often sing different songs casually for fun, even though I haven't had formal training to improve my voice.

建議: Your answer is quite good but can be improved by making sentences smoother and more connected. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid short, choppy sentences. Also, try to be more specific about your feelings and the purpose of singing.

範例: I want to sing for myself because it helps me express my feelings. Through different songs, I can share the emotions I am experiencing, especially during difficult times, which brings me comfort.

建議: Your answer has good content but is not clearly expressed. Avoid unrelated words like "beer" and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to explain how singing affects happiness in a logical way.

範例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it activates hormones and neurons in the brain, increasing dopamine levels. This makes people feel happier and enjoy their time more.

× Yes I do like singing as it is joyful while eyes seeing some kind of songs.

✓ Yes, I do like singing as it is joyful to see some kinds of songs.

The phrase 'while eyes seeing' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'to' in 'joyful to see'. Also, 'some kind of songs' should be pluralized to 'some kinds of songs' to match the plural noun 'songs'.

× I easily like singing western music which includes music such as From the artist to Weekend.

✓ I easily like singing western music which includes music from artists such as The Weeknd.

The phrase 'From the artist to Weekend' is incorrect. It should be 'from artists such as The Weeknd'. 'The Weeknd' is a proper noun and should be capitalized correctly. Also, 'artist' should be plural to match 'such as'.

× Taylor Swift an other artists who are one of my favorite and I like singing their songs.

✓ Taylor Swift and other artists who are some of my favorites, and I like singing their songs.

The phrase 'an other' should be 'and other'. 'One of my favorite' should be 'some of my favorites' to agree with plural 'artists'.

× No, I haven't learned how to sing but I casually duesing different kind of songs but I haven't taken any kind of music classes so that I can improve my vocal code.

✓ No, I haven't learned how to sing but I casually sing different kinds of songs, and I haven't taken any music classes so that I can improve my vocal skills.

The word 'duesing' is incorrect; it should be 'sing'. 'Different kind of songs' should be pluralized to 'different kinds of songs'. 'Vocal code' is incorrect; the correct term is 'vocal skills'. Also, the sentence structure is improved by adding a comma and conjunction 'and'.

× But I casually seeing those song whichever I. Like to listen an I like.

✓ But I casually listen to those songs which I like to listen to.

The phrase 'casually seeing' is incorrect; it should be 'casually listen to'. 'Those song' should be plural 'those songs'. 'Whichever I like to listen' should be 'which I like to listen to'.

× I want to sing for myself as.

✓ I want to sing for myself because

The sentence ends abruptly with 'as.' It should be completed as 'because' or connected to the next clause for clarity.

× I want to express my feelings through the songs, the different songs that indicate my emotions that I have been going through in the current situation.

✓ I want to express my feelings through songs, different songs that indicate the emotions I have been experiencing in my current situation.

The phrase 'the songs, the different songs' is redundant; 'songs, different songs' is better. 'That I have been going through' is better expressed as 'I have been experiencing'.

× I like expressing those by singing it to myself and listening to different songs as well.

✓ I like expressing those feelings by singing to myself and listening to different songs as well.

The pronoun 'it' is unclear; it should be 'those feelings' to clarify what is being expressed.

× Yes, I do think singing and beer bring happiness to the peoples as it activates your.

✓ Yes, I do think singing and beer bring happiness to people as they activate your

'Peoples' should be 'people'. 'It' is incorrect referring to two subjects; 'they' is correct.

× Hormones and neurons which are essential for the joyfulness an increase the dopamine level of your brain so that your mood become much more happier and you can enjoy your time.

✓ Hormones and neurons, which are essential for joyfulness, increase the dopamine level in your brain so that your mood becomes much happier and you can enjoy your time.

The sentence lacked commas for clarity. 'An increase' should be 'and increase'. 'Become' should be 'becomes' to agree with singular subject 'mood'. 'Much more happier' is redundant; 'much happier' is correct.