巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural by using complete sentences and avoiding redundancy. Also, clarify your reasons more clearly and avoid incomplete sentences.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it tastes delicious. For example, my father often gives me a chocolate on Saturday nights as a reward when I finish my work.

建議: Your answer provides relevant details but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct verb forms to improve clarity.

範例: I usually eat chocolate when I have some pocket money. However, on Saturdays, my father gives me a chocolate as a treat after I finish my work, which encourages me and makes me enjoy the taste even more.

建議: Your answer is relevant but includes repetition and filler words. Try to avoid repeating words and use more precise vocabulary. Also, structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details.

範例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child. My father used to give me a chocolate on Saturdays as a reward for completing my schoolwork, and I really enjoyed its sweet and light taste.

建議: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer expression and better grammar. Use linking words to connect your points and avoid redundancy. Also, be more specific about why chocolate makes people happy.

範例: In my opinion, chocolate is popular worldwide because its sweet taste brings happiness and comfort to people. Many enjoy eating chocolate as it can lift their mood and create a sense of peace.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Try to describe your favourite flavour more precisely and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, explain why you like it to add depth to your answer.

範例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is vanilla, which has a smooth and creamy taste. I enjoy it because it is mild and relaxing, making me feel peaceful when I eat it.

建議: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using more natural expressions and clearer reasons. Avoid vague phrases and explain how chocolate gifts affect relationships.

範例: Yes, I think giving chocolates as gifts is a great idea because it shows affection and can strengthen relationships. It also brings happiness to people in the community when they receive such thoughtful presents.

× Yes, obviously I love to eat chocolates because.

✓ Yes, obviously I love eating chocolates because.

The verb 'love' is commonly followed by the gerund form '-ing' when expressing enjoyment of an activity. Therefore, 'love eating' is correct instead of 'love to eat'.

× on Saturday nights my father give me one chocolate becau and I am free from my work.

✓ On Saturday nights my father gives me one chocolate because I am free from my work.

The subject 'my father' is third person singular, so the verb should be 'gives' to agree in number and person. Also, 'becau' is incomplete and should be 'because'.

× but on Saturdays my father give me one chocolate as a treat after finished my work.

✓ but on Saturdays my father gives me one chocolate as a treat after I finish my work.

The verb 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with the third person singular subject 'my father'. Also, 'after finished my work' is incorrect; it should be 'after I finish my work' to include the subject and correct tense.

× after finished my work.

✓ after I finished my work.

The phrase needs a subject and the past tense verb 'finished' to correctly indicate the completed action. 'After finished my work' is incomplete and ungrammatical.

× Well, I love to eat chocolates when when I was a kid, my father gave me one chocolate on Saturdays, uh, after I finished my schoolwork as a treat.

✓ Well, I loved eating chocolates when I was a kid; my father gave me one chocolate on Saturdays after I finished my schoolwork as a treat.

Since the time frame is in the past ('when I was a kid'), the verb 'love' should be in past tense 'loved'. Also, 'love to eat' is better as 'loved eating' for natural expression. The repeated 'when' is a mistake and should be removed.

× people enjoy to eat chocolates and makes us happy.

✓ people enjoy eating chocolates and it makes us happy.

The verb 'enjoy' is followed by the gerund form '-ing', so 'enjoy eating' is correct. Also, 'makes' needs a subject 'it' to be grammatically correct.

× the taste of the chocolate give happiness and peacefulness around the community

✓ the taste of the chocolate gives happiness and peacefulness around the community

The subject 'the taste' is third person singular, so the verb should be 'gives' to agree in number.

× people enjoy to eat chocolates and makes us happy.

✓ people enjoy eating chocolates and it makes us happy.

As before, 'enjoy' should be followed by the gerund 'eating'. Also, 'makes' requires a subject, so 'it makes' is correct.

× Well, my favorite flavor of chocolate is vanilla with yellow color and I love to eat.

✓ Well, my favorite flavor of chocolate is vanilla, which is yellow in color, and I love to eat it.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. Adding 'which is yellow in color' clarifies the description, and 'I love to eat it' completes the thought.

× And I also enjoy to eat its taste and get peacefulness from this.

✓ And I also enjoy eating its taste and getting peacefulness from it.

'Enjoy' should be followed by the gerund form '-ing'. Also, 'get' should be 'getting' to maintain parallel structure.

× it is very good to use chocolates as gift to others

✓ it is very good to use chocolates as gifts for others

The phrase 'as gift to others' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'for' when referring to giving gifts to people, and 'gift' should be plural 'gifts' to match 'chocolates'.

× because it increases love between US and makes people happy around the community.

✓ because it increases love between us and makes people happy around the community.

The pronoun 'US' should be lowercase 'us' as it is not used as a proper noun here.