巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and long sentences.

範例: Yes, I like eating chocolate. When I was younger, I preferred sweet milk chocolate, but now I enjoy dark chocolate more. In the future, I think I will like chocolates with nuts because they add a nice texture.

建議: Make your answer clearer and more natural by using simpler sentences and linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing and ensure subject-verb agreement.

範例: I usually eat chocolate with my evening tea because the combination is very enjoyable. It helps me relax after a long day at work.

建議: Try to reduce hesitation sounds like 'uh' and organize your answer with clear sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details.

範例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child. My father used to buy me chocolates that contained fruit pieces. For example, the strawberry-flavored ones were very delicious, and I still remember their taste clearly.

建議: Improve coherence by using linking words and complete sentences. Avoid incomplete thoughts and be more specific in your explanation.

範例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it gives people a pleasant feeling when they eat it. Many people enjoy having chocolate with their coffee or tea. Also, there are many chocolate factories around the world producing different varieties.

建議: Make your answer more concise and use linking words to connect ideas. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and plural forms.

範例: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it is sweeter than dark chocolate. I also enjoy chocolates with added flavors like coconut or small fruit pieces because they taste amazing.

建議: Organize your answer with clear sentences and use linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing and be more specific about traditions.

範例: Yes, giving chocolate as a gift is a great idea because many people like different flavors. For example, on special occasions like Valentine's Day, it is traditional to give chocolates to loved ones.

× Yes, currently I like dark chocolates but previously and when I was younger I preferred milk chocolate which was sweeter and I think in the future I would prefer chocolates which have nuts in there.

✓ Yes, currently I like dark chocolate but previously, when I was younger, I preferred milk chocolate which was sweeter, and I think in the future I would prefer chocolate which has nuts in it.

The word 'chocolates' is used incorrectly as a plural noun when referring to chocolate in general. 'Chocolate' as a substance is uncountable and should be singular. Also, 'which have nuts in there' should be 'which has nuts in it' to agree with the singular 'chocolate'. Use singular form for uncountable nouns and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× I usually eat chocolate with my evening tea because accompanying this taste is very exciting for me and give a sense of relaxation and when I come home from my daily work.

✓ I usually eat chocolate with my evening tea because accompanying this taste is very exciting for me and gives me a sense of relaxation when I come home from my daily work.

The sentence lacks proper subject-verb agreement and has awkward structure. 'Give' should be 'gives' to agree with the singular subject 'accompanying this taste'. Also, the phrase 'and when I come home from my daily work' is misplaced and should be integrated properly to improve clarity.

× Yes, when I was a kid, I liked, uh, chocolate, uh, very much. And my father bought, uh, me, uh, chocolates that, uh, contained, uh, fruit parts in, uh, that for now, I can, uh, sharply remember the taste it had.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, I liked chocolate very much. And my father bought me chocolates that contained fruit parts, and I can still sharply remember the taste it had.

The phrase 'fruit parts in' is awkward; it should be 'fruit parts' without 'in'. Also, unnecessary fillers like 'uh' should be removed for clarity. The sentence structure is improved by connecting ideas properly.

× I think a chocolate's popularity is mainly because people sense a great feeling when they eat chocolates and they prefer having them with their coffee or tea. And we see that different factories, chocolate factories around the world.

✓ I think chocolate's popularity is mainly because people feel great when they eat chocolate and prefer having it with their coffee or tea. We also see many chocolate factories around the world.

The phrase 'a chocolate's popularity' is incorrect; 'chocolate's popularity' is better. 'Sense a great feeling' is awkward; 'feel great' is more natural. 'Chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring to the substance. The last sentence is incomplete and needs restructuring.

× I prefer milk chocolates, which are sweeter than a dark chocolate, and I also like chocolate that contain some added flavors such as coconut or small particles of fruits and they taste very amazing.

✓ I prefer milk chocolate, which is sweeter than dark chocolate, and I also like chocolate that contains some added flavors such as coconut or small pieces of fruit, and they taste amazing.

'Milk chocolates' should be 'milk chocolate' as an uncountable noun. 'A dark chocolate' should be 'dark chocolate' without 'a'. 'Chocolate that contain' should be 'chocolate that contains' to agree with singular 'chocolate'. 'Particles of fruits' is better as 'pieces of fruit'.

× Yes, I think that would be a great idea to give someone a piece of chocolate because everyone likes chocolates with different flavors and for example with on a special occasion such as Valentine, it's a traditional that people give chocolates to their lovers.

✓ Yes, I think that would be a great idea to give someone a piece of chocolate because everyone likes chocolates with different flavors, and for example, on a special occasion such as Valentine's Day, it's traditional for people to give chocolates to their loved ones.

The phrase 'with on a special occasion' is incorrect; it should be 'on a special occasion'. 'Valentine' should be 'Valentine's Day'. 'It's a traditional' should be 'it's traditional'. 'Lovers' is better replaced with 'loved ones' for appropriateness.