巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct singular/plural forms. For example, instead of repeating 'prefer to eat dark chocolate' twice, combine the ideas into one clear sentence.

範例: I don't usually like eating chocolates because I avoid sweets due to their high sugar content, which is unhealthy for me. However, I prefer dark chocolate since it tastes bitter and is healthier.

建議: Improve sentence structure and clarity by using proper expressions for frequency and linking words. Avoid vague phrases like 'not that much' and be more specific about how often you eat chocolate.

範例: I don't eat chocolate very often; maybe a few times a week. When I do, I usually choose dark chocolate because I am not really a big fan of sweets.

建議: Focus on using correct tense and avoid unnecessary or informal comments. Provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details with linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea.

範例: Yes, I often ate chocolates when I was a kid because I liked sweets a lot. In fact, I used to eat them almost every day during my childhood.

建議: Use clearer sentence structures and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, correct subject-verb agreement and avoid vague phrases like 'everybody like to eat or eat the chocolate'.

範例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because many people enjoy eating it. Additionally, people often eat chocolate to improve their mood, and since many cakes are made with chocolate, it adds to its popularity.

建議: Avoid repeating the word 'chocolate' excessively and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar, such as 'gives me energy' instead of 'gives me a energetic'.

範例: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because I usually avoid sweets. Moreover, eating dark chocolate before going to the gym gives me energy.

建議: Make your answer more concise and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar, such as 'everyone likes to eat chocolates'.

範例: Yes, definitely. Chocolate makes a good gift because everyone enjoys sweets, especially during special occasions when sharing treats is common.

× No, I don't like to eat chocolates because generally I avoid eating sweet because the sugar is not good for my body.

✓ No, I don't like to eat chocolate because generally I avoid eating sweets as sugar is not good for my body.

The word 'chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring to the substance in general. Also, 'sweet' should be plural 'sweets' when referring to sweet foods in general. This is a common singular and plural usage error.

× Uh, but I prefer to eat dark chocolate because they taste bitter and the chocolate is very healthy.

✓ Uh, but I prefer to eat dark chocolate because it tastes bitter and the chocolate is very healthy.

The pronoun 'they' is incorrect for singular 'dark chocolate'; it should be 'it'. Also, the verb 'taste' should be 'tastes' to agree with singular subject. This is a singular and plural agreement issue.

× Also that's why I prefer to eat dark chocolates.

✓ Also, that's why I prefer to eat dark chocolate.

When referring to chocolate in general, use singular 'chocolate' instead of plural 'chocolates'. This is a singular and plural usage issue.

× Not that much but within few days in week because I don't like that much.

✓ Not that much, but a few days a week because I don't like it that much.

The phrase 'within few days in week' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'a few days a week'. Also, 'that much' needs 'it' to be grammatically correct. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and missing pronoun.

× If I have more than yes I prefer to eat dark chocolate but not often, not daily because I'm not a chocolate type person.

✓ If I have more, then yes, I prefer to eat dark chocolate but not often, not daily because I'm not a chocolate type of person.

Added missing commas and the phrase 'chocolate type person' should be 'chocolate type of person'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions.

× Yes, when I'm a kid I often eat chocolates because at childhood I like to eat chocolates and that time I am a fatty person.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid I often ate chocolates because in childhood I liked to eat chocolates and at that time I was a fatty person.

The sentence refers to past events, so past tense verbs 'was', 'ate', and 'liked' should be used instead of present tense. This is a past tense issue.

× Fatty kid. Sorry but uh yes I love to eat chocolate in childhood everyday.

✓ Fatty kid. Sorry, but yes, I loved to eat chocolate every day in childhood.

The phrase 'in childhood everyday' should be 'every day in childhood'. Also, past tense 'loved' is appropriate. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and past tense issue.

× Yes, the chocolate is very popular around the world because everybody like to eat or eat the chocolate and if there is a mood swings they eat chocolate and nowadays cake is also made-up of chocolates that's why people like to eat chocolate.

✓ Yes, chocolate is very popular around the world because everybody likes to eat chocolate and if there are mood swings, they eat chocolate. Nowadays, cakes are also made of chocolate; that's why people like to eat chocolate.

Removed 'the' before 'chocolate' as it is uncountable here. 'Everybody like' should be 'everybody likes' (subject-verb agreement). 'Mood swings' is plural, so 'there is' should be 'there are'. 'Made-up of chocolates' should be 'made of chocolate'. Also, 'cake' should be plural 'cakes' when speaking generally. These are singular/plural, subject-verb agreement, and preposition errors.

× Yes, the chocolate is very popular around the world because everybody like to eat or eat the chocolate and if there is a mood swings they eat chocolate and nowadays cake is also made-up of chocolates that's why people like to eat chocolate.

✓ Yes, chocolate is very popular around the world because everybody likes to eat chocolate and if there are mood swings, they eat chocolate. Nowadays, cakes are also made of chocolate; that's why people like to eat chocolate.

The verb 'like' should be 'likes' to agree with singular subject 'everybody'. This is a third person singular issue.

× Nowadays cake is also made-up of chocolates that's why people like to eat chocolate.

✓ Nowadays, cakes are also made of chocolate; that's why people like to eat chocolate.

The phrase 'made-up of chocolates' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'made of chocolate'. Also, 'cake' should be plural 'cakes' when speaking generally. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and singular/plural issue.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate because I love to eat that chocolate because I avoid sweets before I say that, but that chocolates gives me a energetic when I'm getting in gym before I eat chocolate, chocolate because it gives me energy.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate because I love to eat it. I avoid sweets, as I said before, but that chocolate gives me energy when I go to the gym before I eat chocolate because it gives me energy.

'That chocolates' should be singular 'that chocolate'. 'A energetic' is incorrect; 'energy' is uncountable and does not need 'a'. Also, 'getting in gym' should be 'go to the gym'. These are singular/plural, article, and preposition errors.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate because I love to eat that chocolate because I avoid sweets before I say that, but that chocolates gives me a energetic when I'm getting in gym before I eat chocolate, chocolate because it gives me energy.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate because I love to eat it. I avoid sweets, as I said before, but that chocolate gives me energy when I go to the gym before I eat chocolate because it gives me energy.

The phrase 'getting in gym' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go to the gym'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions.

× Yes, definitely. I believe that to the chocolate used as the gift to other because everybody likes to eat chocolates and at a special occasion we spread sweets because everybody like to eat chocolates and they enjoy that.

✓ Yes, definitely. I believe that chocolate can be used as a gift to others because everybody likes to eat chocolates and on special occasions we share sweets because everybody likes to eat chocolates and they enjoy that.

The phrase 'to the chocolate used as the gift to other' is incorrect. It should be 'chocolate can be used as a gift to others'. Also, 'at a special occasion' should be 'on special occasions'. 'Everybody like' should be 'everybody likes'. These are modal verb usage, preposition, and subject-verb agreement errors.