巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is quite unclear and contains several grammatical errors and awkward phrases, such as "chocolate is raining" and "good exit way to." To improve, try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific reasons or feelings about chocolate. Use simple, correct sentences and avoid redundancy.

範例: Yes, I really like eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and makes me feel happy. I especially enjoy it when I need a quick energy boost. Eating chocolate always cheers me up and brightens my day.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but could be clearer and more concise. Avoid repeating similar ideas and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly, and be specific about frequency.

範例: I don't eat chocolate very often, maybe once or twice a week, because I know it is unhealthy and can cause weight gain. However, I sometimes treat myself when I feel stressed or sad.

建議: Your answer is difficult to understand due to grammar mistakes and unclear phrasing. Try to form complete sentences and clearly explain your past habits and current attitude. Use linking words to organise your ideas logically.

範例: When I was a kid, I ate chocolate quite often, maybe too much, which sometimes made me feel sick. Since then, I have reduced my chocolate intake to stay healthier.

建議: Your answer has some good ideas but is unclear and contains errors like "give them helpless." Try to use correct vocabulary and sentence structures. Provide clear reasons with examples, and use linking words to connect your points.

範例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and can refresh people. It helps them relax and feel better. Also, chocolate is often given as a gift to friends and family, which makes it special.

建議: Your answer is understandable but contains grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct sentence structures and avoid repetition. Give a clear topic sentence and support it with reasons.

範例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is sweet chocolate because I don't like bitter tastes. I find sweet chocolate delicious and enjoyable to eat.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Try to give a full response with clear reasons why chocolate makes a good gift. Use linking words to organise your ideas and avoid pauses or unfinished sentences.

範例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it is popular and many people enjoy it. Also, chocolates often come in beautiful packaging, which makes them suitable presents for friends and family.

× Yes, I think chocolate is raining.

✓ Yes, I think chocolate is amazing.

The word 'raining' is incorrectly used as an adjective here. The student likely intended to express that chocolate is very good or enjoyable. Using 'amazing' correctly describes the quality of chocolate.

× So delicious.

✓ It is so delicious.

The sentence fragment 'So delicious.' lacks a subject and verb, making it incomplete. Adding 'It is' forms a complete sentence.

× maybe my chocolate is added to sugar so it's a bit sweet.

✓ maybe my chocolate has added sugar so it's a bit sweet.

The phrase 'added to sugar' is incorrect; the intended meaning is that sugar is added to the chocolate. Using 'has added sugar' correctly conveys this.

× So I really love to eat it and eat.

✓ So I really love to eat it.

The phrase 'and eat' is redundant and disrupts sentence flow. Removing it improves clarity.

× Every time I eat it I will feel very happy and full energy.

✓ Every time I eat it, I feel very happy and full of energy.

The phrase 'full energy' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'full of energy'. Also, 'will feel' is changed to 'feel' to match habitual action.

× So it's real time.

✓ So it's real.

The phrase 'real time' is incorrect in this context. The student likely meant to say 'real' or 'really good'.

× It's really a good exit way to.

✓ It's really a good way to relax.

The phrase 'exit way to' is incorrect. Possibly the student meant 'way to relax' or 'way to exit stress'.

× Actually though I'm really into eating chocolate, I eat them few times because I know it's really unhealthy to eat chocolate because it will make me fat and put on weight.

✓ Actually, though I'm really into eating chocolate, I eat it a few times because I know it's really unhealthy and it will make me fat and put on weight.

The pronoun 'them' is incorrect for 'chocolate' which is uncountable here; 'it' is correct. Also, 'a few times' needs the article 'a'.

× So I just use it when I really really can't resist myself and feel down.

✓ So I just eat it when I really can't resist myself and feel down.

The verb 'use' is incorrect for eating chocolate; 'eat' is appropriate. Also, 'really really' is redundant.

× When I'm kid, yeah probably I just because eat too much chocolate so I get I got too sick now I really regretful so I now I'm running I eat less chocolate since then and just want to become more healthy keep my.

✓ When I was a kid, I probably ate too much chocolate so I got very sick. Now I really regret it, so I have been eating less chocolate since then and just want to become healthier.

Multiple tense errors: 'I'm kid' should be 'I was a kid'; 'eat' should be 'ate'; 'get I got' is incorrect; 'regretful' should be 'regret it'; 'I'm running' is unclear and replaced with 'I have been'; 'more healthy keep my' is incomplete and corrected to 'become healthier'.

× I think maybe it's a favor because it's really taste so well and it can refresh people and give them helpless, which is really good way to recharge and lit out of steam.

✓ I think maybe it's a favourite because it really tastes so good and it can refresh people and give them happiness, which is a really good way to recharge and let off steam.

'Favor' should be 'favourite'; 'taste so well' should be 'tastes so good'; 'helpless' is incorrect, likely meant 'happiness'; 'lit out of steam' should be 'let off steam'.

× It's really also it's really way to it's a really gift to give praise, give friends or family.

✓ It's also really a good way to give praise and a great gift to give to friends or family.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Corrected to proper conjunctions and sentence structure.

× I like the sweet flavor because I'm bit can stand the bitterness so I prefer choose the sweetness.

✓ I like the sweet flavour because I can't stand the bitterness, so I prefer to choose the sweet one.

'I'm bit can stand' is incorrect; should be 'I can't stand'. Also, 'prefer choose' should be 'prefer to choose'.

× It's really delicious and yummy.

✓ It is really delicious and yummy.

Adding 'It is' completes the sentence structure.

× Yes, because you know, chocolate is so popular in the world so I think it's common to send it to as a present otherwise.

✓ Yes, because you know, chocolate is so popular in the world, so I think it's common to send it as a present.

The phrase 'send it to as a present otherwise' is incorrect and unclear. Removing 'to' and 'otherwise' clarifies the sentence.

× Pause. Its package is so beautiful, so it's really.

✓ Its packaging is so beautiful, so it's really nice.

'Pause.' is unnecessary; 'package' should be 'packaging'; sentence incomplete, so 'really nice' completes the thought.