巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct grammar mistakes, such as 'more faster' should be 'faster' and 'a full of energy' should be 'full of energy'.

範例: I love eating chocolate because it gives me a lot of energy. For example, I usually eat some chocolate at lunch, which helps me feel more energetic and less tired in the afternoon.

建議: Improve sentence fluency by using linking words and correct prepositions. Avoid filler words like 'uh'. For example, say 'in the afternoon' instead of 'after afternoon'.

範例: I eat chocolate every day, especially dark chocolate, because I often feel tired in the afternoon. Therefore, I eat a small piece to boost my energy and be more productive for the rest of the day.

建議: Avoid unnecessary phrases like 'Listen to these questions that honestly'. Use correct tense and smoother sentence structure. For example, say 'when I was a child' instead of 'a little child'.

範例: Honestly, yes. When I was a child, I used to ask my mum for chocolate every day because I loved it very much. My love for chocolate hasn't changed since then.

建議: Improve grammar and coherence by using linking words and avoiding filler words. Clarify your ideas with specific examples and correct plural forms.

範例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because different countries have their own unique types and recipes. For instance, some countries add nuts or fruits, which makes chocolate appealing to many people.

建議: Avoid filler words and improve sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct prepositions, such as 'in Dubai' instead of 'at in Dubai'.

範例: I don't eat many types of chocolate, but I really love strawberry-flavoured chocolate because it smells wonderful. I first tried it two years ago in Dubai, and I would love to try it again.

建議: Use articles correctly and improve sentence structure for clarity. For example, say 'an expensive gift' and use linking words to make your answer more natural.

範例: Yes, I think chocolate can be a good gift, especially if it is an expensive one with attractive packaging. It is a popular choice for friends and family.

× I eat chocolate every day for lunch because after I eat chocolate I have a full of energy.

✓ I eat chocolate every day for lunch because after I eat chocolate I have a lot of energy.

The phrase 'a full of energy' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'a lot of energy' to indicate a large amount of energy.

× Then I can do everything more faster and don't be so tired.

✓ Then I can do everything faster and not be so tired.

The comparative adverb 'faster' should not be preceded by 'more'. Also, 'don't be so tired' is incorrect; it should be 'not be so tired' to express the negative state.

× I eat chocolate every day, especially dark chocolate because I feel tired after afternoon and that's why I eat a small piece of chocolate to get to be more productive and uh, for the rest of the day, additional energy.

✓ I eat chocolate every day, especially dark chocolate, because I feel tired in the afternoon and that's why I eat a small piece of chocolate to be more productive and, uh, have additional energy for the rest of the day.

The preposition 'after afternoon' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in the afternoon'. Also, 'to get to be more productive' is awkward; 'to be more productive' is better. The phrase 'for the rest of the day, additional energy' is reordered to 'have additional energy for the rest of the day' for clarity.

× Listen to these questions that honestly, yes, when I was a little child I asked my mom to give me a chocolate every day, every hour because I love chocolate very much.

✓ To answer honestly, yes, when I was a little child I asked my mom to give me chocolate every day, every hour because I loved chocolate very much.

The phrase 'Listen to these questions that honestly' is incorrect and unclear. It is better to start with 'To answer honestly'. Also, 'a chocolate' should be 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun here. 'Love' in past context should be 'loved'.

× And no, nothing is changed.

✓ And no, nothing has changed.

'Nothing is changed' is incorrect; the present perfect 'has changed' is used to indicate that no change has occurred up to now.

× I think because it's depends not only on the country, it depends on the dish type.

✓ I think it's because it depends not only on the country but also on the type of dish.

The phrase 'it's depends' is incorrect; 'it depends' is correct. Also, 'dish type' is better expressed as 'type of dish'. The conjunction 'but also' is added for correct parallel structure.

× Like in every country we have a different types of chocolate that people, uh, think and, uh, prepare.

✓ Like in every country, we have different types of chocolate that people, uh, think about and, uh, prepare.

The phrase 'a different types' is incorrect because 'types' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'think' should be 'think about' to be grammatically correct.

× I tried this chocolate with strawberry two years ago at in Dubai and now I want to try it again.

✓ I tried this chocolate with strawberry two years ago in Dubai and now I want to try it again.

The phrase 'at in Dubai' is incorrect; only 'in Dubai' is needed.