巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and unclear vocabulary (e.g., 'haikali'). Try to use clearer and more accurate words, and keep your sentences concise and grammatically correct. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating 'I don't like to eat chocolate' twice.

範例: I don't like eating chocolate because it is very sweet and contains a lot of sugar, which I try to avoid.

建議: Your answer is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Use the present perfect tense to talk about experiences up to now, and answer the question directly. For example, say 'I have never eaten chocolate before, so I don't eat it at all.'

範例: I have never eaten chocolate before, so I don't eat it at all.

建議: Your answer has many grammatical errors and unclear vocabulary ('soupers'). Try to use past tense correctly and provide clear reasons. Also, avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise.

範例: When I was a kid, I only ate chocolate once because my mom said it has a lot of sugar and is unhealthy. I didn't like the taste either.

建議: Your answer repeats ideas and has grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your answer with linking words and use correct grammar. Be specific about why chocolate is popular.

範例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because of its unique taste. Additionally, it can be used in many desserts like cookies and cakes, which makes it versatile and loved by many.

建議: Your answer is repetitive and unclear. Try to state your favorite flavor clearly and explain why briefly, using correct grammar and avoiding repetition.

範例: My favorite chocolate flavors are vanilla and strawberry because I love the taste of strawberries, which is my favorite fruit.

建議: Your answer has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct sentence structures and be more concise. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, chocolate is a good gift for children because they usually like it. However, adults may eat less chocolate since they consider it unhealthy.

× I think chocolate was very sweet and they have a lot of haikali, so I don't like to eat chocolate that much.

✓ I think chocolate is very sweet and it has a lot of haikali, so I don't like to eat chocolate that much.

The sentence describes a current opinion, so the present tense 'is' should be used instead of past tense 'was'. Also, 'chocolate' is singular, so 'it has' is correct instead of 'they have'.

× I never ate chocolate before so I don't know how often did I eat.

✓ I have never eaten chocolate before, so I don't know how often I eat it.

The present perfect tense 'have never eaten' is appropriate for experiences up to now. Also, the question form 'did I eat' is incorrect in this statement; it should be the declarative 'I eat'.

× When I was such a kid, I remember that I eat one times only and I'm not always often to eat chocolate because my mom always said that chocolate have a lot of soupers, it's not healthy and it would be making you fat.

✓ When I was a kid, I remember that I ate only once and I didn't often eat chocolate because my mom always said that chocolate has a lot of sugars, it's not healthy and it would make you fat.

Past tense 'ate' is needed for completed actions in the past. 'Have' should be 'has' for singular 'chocolate'. 'Would be making' is incorrect; 'would make' is correct. Also, 'one times' should be 'once'.

× I just eat it one time and I don't like the taste.

✓ I just ate it once and I didn't like the taste.

Since the action happened in the past, past tense 'ate' and 'didn't like' should be used instead of present tense 'eat' and 'don't like'.

× I think because chocolate is very popular around the world. The reason is because chocolate having her special taste and chocolate can make into a lot of food like chocolate cookie or chocolate cake or other food and then with making a different taste.

✓ I think chocolate is very popular around the world because it has a special taste and can be made into many foods like chocolate cookies or chocolate cake, which create different flavors.

'Having' should be 'has' to indicate possession. 'Chocolate can make into' is incorrect; it should be 'can be made into'. 'Her' is incorrect pronoun for chocolate; 'its' or 'it' is correct. Sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× My favorite favorite of chocolate is vanilla flavors and strawberry chocolate 'cause I like I like strawberries to be my my favorite fruit was strawberries, so I like strawberry favorite of chocolate.

✓ My favorite flavors of chocolate are vanilla and strawberry because I like strawberries; they are my favorite fruit, so I like strawberry-flavored chocolate.

Repetition of 'favorite' is unnecessary. 'Flavors' should be plural. Sentence structure is corrected for clarity and grammar. 'Strawberry favorite of chocolate' is corrected to 'strawberry-flavored chocolate'. Also, 'cause' is informal; 'because' is better.

× Yes, I think chocolate can be as a gift to others when that person was a child because I think child will like chocolate a lot.

✓ Yes, I think chocolate can be a gift to others when that person is a child because I think children like chocolate a lot.

'Was' should be 'is' to refer to a general present condition. 'Child' should be plural 'children' to generalize. 'Can be as a gift' is incorrect; 'can be a gift' is correct.

× But for the adults they will less eating chocolate because they say they think that chocolate is not so healthy.

✓ But adults eat less chocolate because they think that chocolate is not very healthy.

'Will less eating' is incorrect; 'eat less' is correct. 'They say they think' is redundant; simplified to 'they think'. 'Not so healthy' is better expressed as 'not very healthy'.