巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer shows enthusiasm, but it lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise, and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: I have loved eating chocolate since I was a child. I enjoy various types, such as dark, milk, white, and chocolate chip. However, my favourite is Dubai chocolate because it has a delightful crunchy texture that I really enjoy.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to directly answer the question first, then add specific details using linking words. Also, avoid unnecessary phrases and focus on clarity.

範例: I love chocolate, but because of health reasons, I avoid eating it often. Usually, I enjoy chocolate on weekends when I have time off work. I like to eat it while relaxing in the park and enjoying the scenery, which lifts my mood.

建議: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to answer directly and provide specific reasons with correct grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: I don't remember exactly, but my parents told me that I loved chocolate as a child. However, they limited how much I could eat because too much sugar is unhealthy and can harm my teeth.

建議: Your answer is confusing and lacks coherence. Try to organize your ideas clearly, use linking words, and provide specific reasons why chocolate is popular worldwide.

範例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is widely available and often displayed prominently in stores. Additionally, people commonly give chocolate as gifts on special occasions like birthdays, which adds to its popularity.

建議: Your answer has good content but is repetitive and grammatically incorrect. Try to state your favourite flavour clearly, then explain why you like it using linking words and specific details.

範例: I enjoy many chocolate flavours, such as white, dark, and chocolate chip. However, my favourite is Dubai Kunafa chocolate because it combines rich chocolate with a crunchy texture, which I find very relaxing and enjoyable.

建議: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and examples, using linking words to connect your ideas.

範例: Yes, I believe chocolate makes a great gift. Many people give chocolates on birthdays because they are thoughtful and enjoyable. I also like to bring chocolates to birthday parties and anniversaries as a present.

× I love eating chocolate so much from my childhood since now mostly I can love all of the chocolate like the dark chocolate, normal chocolate, the white chocolate and the chocolate chip chocolate.

✓ I have loved eating chocolate so much since my childhood; now I mostly love all kinds of chocolate like dark chocolate, normal chocolate, white chocolate, and chocolate chip chocolate.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'chocolate' in singular form when referring to different types, which requires plural or 'kinds of' to indicate variety. Also, the tense and sentence structure were awkward; 'have loved' correctly expresses a continuous feeling from childhood to now.

× But the my favorite chocolate is a Dubai chocolate because in this there is a crunch level.

✓ But my favorite chocolate is Dubai chocolate because it has a crunchy texture.

The phrase 'the my favorite' is incorrect; 'my favorite' suffices. Also, 'a Dubai chocolate' is better as 'Dubai chocolate' without an article when referring to a type or brand. 'Crunch level' is awkward; 'crunchy texture' is clearer.

× Well, I also ask that I love chocolate so much but due to my health problem I just avoid to eat the chocolate so much.

✓ Well, I also want to say that I love chocolate so much, but due to my health problems, I just avoid eating chocolate too much.

The phrase 'I also ask that I love' is incorrect; 'I want to say' is appropriate. 'Avoid to eat' is incorrect; 'avoid eating' is the correct verb form after 'avoid'. Also, 'health problem' should be plural if general.

× But mostly I can enjoy the chocolate at the weekend because the weekends I have the offer off from my work so I can go to the park and enjoy the chocolate by enjoying the view.

✓ But mostly I enjoy chocolate on the weekends because I have time off from work, so I can go to the park and enjoy chocolate while enjoying the view.

The preposition 'at the weekend' is acceptable in British English but 'on the weekends' is more common in Canadian English. 'Offer off' is incorrect; 'time off' is correct. Also, 'enjoy the chocolate by enjoying the view' is repetitive; 'enjoy chocolate while enjoying the view' is clearer.

× It's give me a moral.

✓ It gives me morale.

'It's give' is grammatically incorrect; the correct form is 'It gives'. Also, 'a moral' is incorrect in this context; 'morale' (meaning spirit or motivation) is the correct noun.

× Well, I am exactly don't know about this answer but my parents told me that you love the chocolate so much and but my parents don't offer me so much chocolates when I was kids because it's not a good for us to eat as more sweetness and when we was a kid because it's also harmful for my teeth and.

✓ Well, I don't exactly know the answer, but my parents told me that I loved chocolate so much. However, my parents didn't give me many chocolates when I was a kid because it wasn't good for us to eat too much sweetness, and it was also harmful to my teeth.

The sentence has multiple tense and agreement errors. 'I am exactly don't know' is incorrect; 'I don't exactly know' is correct. 'You love' should be 'I loved' to match the subject. 'Don't offer me so much chocolates' should be past tense 'didn't give me many chocolates'. 'When I was kids' should be 'when I was a kid'. 'It's not a good' should be 'it wasn't good'. 'As more sweetness' should be 'too much sweetness'. 'When we was a kid' is incorrect and redundant.

× Chocolates are the most popular things around the world because when you can go to the grocery shops, the chocolates are in the front of you.

✓ Chocolate is one of the most popular things around the world because when you go to grocery shops, chocolate is right in front of you.

'Chocolates' as plural is less common when referring to chocolate in general; 'chocolate' as a mass noun is preferred. 'Are the most popular things' is awkward; 'is one of the most popular things' is better. 'When you can go' is incorrect; 'when you go' is correct. 'In the front of you' should be 'right in front of you'.

× They can also treat it chocolate when you can buy the groceries on the at the high dollar rate and when on the some equations and when your birthday, people can always like to treat you a bird chocolate on your birthday, it's a gift.

✓ People can also treat you to chocolate when you buy groceries at a high price, and on special occasions like your birthday, people often like to give you chocolate as a gift.

The original sentence has many preposition errors: 'treat it chocolate' should be 'treat you to chocolate'; 'on the at the high dollar rate' is incorrect; 'at a high price' is correct; 'on the some equations' is unclear and corrected to 'on special occasions'; 'treat you a bird chocolate' is incorrect and corrected to 'give you chocolate as a gift'.

× They are the most of the flavors which I love the most like the white dark chocolate flavor and the chocolate chip flavor.

✓ There are many flavors that I love, like white chocolate, dark chocolate, and chocolate chip flavors.

'They are the most of the flavors' is incorrect; 'There are many flavors' is correct. Also, 'white dark chocolate flavor' is confusing; separating 'white chocolate' and 'dark chocolate' is clearer.

× But the my favorite flavor is a Dubai Kunafa chocolate flavor because there is is a chocolate is a mixture of the chocolate plus also a crunchy level.

✓ But my favorite flavor is Dubai Kunafa chocolate because it is a mixture of chocolate and has a crunchy texture.

'The my favorite' is incorrect; 'my favorite' is correct. 'A Dubai Kunafa chocolate flavor' is better as 'Dubai Kunafa chocolate'. 'There is is a chocolate is a mixture' is redundant and incorrect; simplified to 'it is a mixture'. 'Crunchy level' is awkward; 'crunchy texture' is better.

× I just love the crunchy level which mean which give me a more relaxment than the other.

✓ I just love the crunchy texture, which means it gives me more relaxation than the others.

'Which mean which give' is incorrect; 'which means it gives' is correct. 'Relaxment' is not a word; 'relaxation' is correct. 'Than the other' should be 'than the others' to compare with multiple items.

× Yeah, of course I think that chocolate is a good things to exchange as a gift because when the people in in your birthday, most of the people can give you the chocolates because it's a good kind of the nature you can give to the people.

✓ Yeah, of course I think that chocolate is a good thing to give as a gift because on your birthday, most people give you chocolates since it's a good kind of gift you can give to people.

'Chocolate is a good things' mixes singular and plural; 'a good thing' is correct. 'When the people in in your birthday' is incorrect; 'on your birthday' is correct. 'Most of the people can give you the chocolates' is better as 'most people give you chocolates'. 'Good kind of the nature' is unclear; 'good kind of gift' is clearer.