巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains repetition and grammatical errors. Try to give a clear opinion with supporting reasons, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. For example, explain why you don't eat chocolate often and mention specific reasons clearly.

範例: I don't eat chocolate very often because I find it too sweet, and I'm concerned it might increase my blood sugar levels. Also, eating too much chocolate can affect my skin and hair, so I prefer to avoid it.

建議: Your answer is generally clear but could be more concise and fluent. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I rarely eat chocolate; usually, I only have it when my friends give it to me. I don't buy it often because I find it too sweet for my taste.

建議: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical mistakes and some redundancy. Try to use past tense correctly and avoid repeating phrases. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: No, I didn't eat chocolate often as a kid. I usually bought other snacks during my free time at school because chocolate was not my favorite.

建議: Your answer is relevant but could be more structured and fluent. Avoid starting with 'But' and use linking words to connect ideas clearly. Also, be more specific about why chocolate is popular.

範例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because there are many different types to choose from. Additionally, people often give chocolate as gifts to express gratitude to family and loved ones.

建議: Your answer is a bit confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to clearly state your favorite flavor and explain why you like it using correct grammar and vocabulary.

範例: My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate because it is less sweet and has a rich taste. I find it easy to enjoy without feeling overwhelmed by sugar, and it makes me feel refreshed.

建議: Your answer is positive but incomplete and has some grammatical mistakes. Try to complete your thoughts and use correct sentence structures. Also, provide reasons why chocolate makes a good gift.

範例: Yes, definitely. Chocolate is a great gift for special occasions like Christmas or birthdays because it is widely liked and can express appreciation to family and loved ones.

× Actually I don't eat chocolate very often and I don't like or don't hate chocolate.

✓ Actually, I don't eat chocolate very often and I neither like nor hate chocolate.

The phrase 'don't like or don't hate' is incorrect because it improperly uses 'or' to connect two negative statements. The correct correlative conjunction pair is 'neither... nor...' to express that both liking and hating are not true.

× maybe maybe increase sugar in blood and eat eat chocolate so much my bad hair.

✓ maybe it increases sugar in my blood and eating too much chocolate is bad for my hair.

The original sentence lacks proper prepositions and verb forms. 'Increase sugar in blood' should be 'increases sugar in my blood' to specify possession. Also, 'eat eat chocolate so much my bad hair' is unclear; it should be 'eating too much chocolate is bad for my hair' to correctly express cause and effect.

× I rarely eat it, I just eat chocolate when I'm uh, when my friends give me.

✓ I rarely eat it; I just eat chocolate when my friends give it to me.

The phrase 'when my friends give me' is incomplete and missing the object. The correct form is 'when my friends give it to me' to include the object 'it' and the preposition 'to' indicating the recipient.

× And I didn't buy chocolate very often because I find it so sweet for my taste so I don't eat it often.

✓ And I don't buy chocolate very often because I find it too sweet for my taste, so I don't eat it often.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the speaker is talking about current habits, 'didn't buy' should be 'don't buy'. Also, 'so sweet for my taste' should be 'too sweet for my taste' to express excessiveness.

× No I didn't when I was a kid I just bought some snacks to eat when I have free time in free time at school and I never buy bought chocolate to eat because it is not my favorite food to taste so I didn't choose it.

✓ No, I didn't. When I was a kid, I just bought some snacks to eat when I had free time at school, and I never bought chocolate to eat because it was not my favorite food, so I didn't choose it.

The sentence has tense inconsistencies and word order issues. 'I have free time' should be 'I had free time' to match past tense. 'Never buy bought' is incorrect; it should be 'never bought'. Also, 'it is not' should be 'it was not' to maintain past tense consistency.

× But I think because there are various types of chocolate that people can choose to buy or eat it, or maybe they can use the bar chocolate too as a present to give their family or their loved ones to express their gratitude.

✓ I think it's because there are various types of chocolate that people can choose to buy or eat, or maybe they can use chocolate bars as presents to give to their family or loved ones to express their gratitude.

The phrase 'the bar chocolate' is incorrect; it should be 'chocolate bars'. Also, 'to give their family' needs the preposition 'to' to indicate the recipient. The sentence is improved by removing unnecessary words and correcting article usage.

× Well, my favorite flavor of chocolate is chocolate, which is less sweet and sugar and a little bit 'cause it is.

✓ Well, my favorite flavor of chocolate is chocolate that is less sweet and has less sugar, and a little bit bitter because of that.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'Less sweet and sugar' is incorrect; it should be 'less sweet and has less sugar'. The phrase 'a little bit 'cause it is' is unclear and should be expanded to explain the reason, such as 'a little bit bitter because of that'.

× I find it easy to eat and not too sweet, so I think it's delicious and make me feel refreshed.

✓ I find it easy to eat and not too sweet, so I think it's delicious and it makes me feel refreshed.

The verb 'make' should be in the third person singular form 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, adding 'it' before 'makes' clarifies the subject.

× Yes, definitely it is quite great way to use chocolate as a present on special occasions like Christmas or birthday.

✓ Yes, definitely it is quite a great way to use chocolate as a present on special occasions like Christmas or birthdays.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'great way'. Also, 'birthday' should be pluralized to 'birthdays' to refer to the general occasion.

× You can give us to order like family or loved ones to express their.

✓ You can give it to people like family or loved ones to express your feelings.

The phrase 'give us to order like family' is incorrect and unclear. 'Us' should be 'it' referring to chocolate. 'To order' is unnecessary. Also, the sentence is incomplete; adding 'to express your feelings' completes the thought.