巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is quite detailed and personal, which is good. However, it could be more concise and structured. Try to start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two supporting details. Avoid redundancy and keep sentences clear and natural.

範例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because I've enjoyed it since I was a child. My family often gave me chocolate, which made me grow even fonder of it over time.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but has some repetition and minor grammar issues. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, be careful with sentence structure to make your answer clearer and more natural.

範例: I used to eat chocolate twice a week as a child, but now I try to eat it less often because I'm more health conscious and want to reduce my sugar intake.

建議: Your answer is relevant and provides specific examples, which is good. However, some phrases are unclear or incorrect, such as 'orange balls and lactose'. Try to clarify and use correct vocabulary. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

範例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child because visitors usually brought me treats like marshmallows or small chocolates, such as orange-flavoured sweets, which were very popular then.

建議: Your answer attempts to explain the popularity of chocolate but contains unclear phrases and some grammatical errors. Avoid vague expressions like 'a sense of chewy' and incomplete sentences. Use clear, simple language and link your ideas logically.

範例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and can improve mood by increasing dopamine levels, which makes people feel happy and relaxed.

建議: Your answer gives a personal reason, which is good, but there are several grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to speak more clearly and use correct expressions. Avoid filler words and keep sentences concise and coherent.

範例: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it has health benefits. For example, it helps reduce my period cramps, so I find it very soothing during that time.

建議: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and fluent. Avoid repeating similar ideas and improve sentence structure. Also, be careful with phrases like 'a separate day during the Valentine' — it would be better to say 'Valentine's Day'.

範例: Yes, chocolate is a popular gift because it symbolizes love and brings happiness. For instance, people often give chocolates on Valentine's Day to express their feelings.

× I've always been a sweet tooth.

✓ I've always had a sweet tooth.

The phrase 'be a sweet tooth' is incorrect because 'sweet tooth' is a noun phrase describing a person's liking for sweets, so the correct verb is 'have'. Therefore, 'I've always had a sweet tooth' is the correct expression.

× Ever since I was a child I loved eating chocolate.

✓ Ever since I was a child, I have loved eating chocolate.

The phrase 'ever since' indicates a period continuing to the present, so the present perfect tense 'have loved' is appropriate instead of simple past 'loved'.

× My uncle, aunt, mom, dad or my even my brother used to bring me chocolate every day because they all knew how fond I was of it.

✓ My uncle, aunt, mom, dad, or even my brother used to bring me chocolate every day because they all knew how fond I was of it.

The phrase 'or my even my brother' is incorrect in word order. The correct order is 'or even my brother'.

× So I eventually I grew up to like chocolate even more.

✓ So eventually, I grew up to like chocolate even more.

The sentence has redundant 'I' after 'So eventually'. Removing the extra 'I' improves sentence structure.

× I ate chocolate twice or twice a week as a child.

✓ I ate chocolate once or twice a week as a child.

The phrase 'twice or twice a week' is incorrect and redundant. The correct quantifier is 'once or twice a week'.

× I used to eat a lot of chocolate, but as I grew up I've been more health conscious and sugar is not too good for your well-being and your health, so I've tried to minimize it.

✓ I used to eat a lot of chocolate, but as I grew up, I've become more health conscious and sugar is not good for your well-being and health, so I've tried to minimize it.

The phrase 'I've been more health conscious' is better expressed as 'I've become more health conscious' to indicate a change over time. Also, 'not too good' is informal and better as 'not good'.

× So I, uh, try to eat chocolate less than before.

✓ So I, uh, try to eat less chocolate than before.

The phrase 'eat chocolate less' is incorrect word order. The correct order is 'eat less chocolate'.

× Yes, every time someone visited me, they used to bring me chocolate, whether it's a big packet of marshmallow or a small chocolate like orange balls.

✓ Yes, every time someone visited me, they used to bring me chocolate, whether it was a big packet of marshmallows or a small chocolate like orange balls.

The pronoun 'it's' is incorrect here because the past tense context requires 'it was'. Also, 'marshmallow' should be plural 'marshmallows'.

× Orange balls and lactose were really famous during my childhood, so I used to eat that a lot.

✓ Orange balls and Lactose were really popular during my childhood, so I used to eat them a lot.

The pronoun 'that' is singular but refers to two items, so 'them' is correct. Also, 'famous' is better replaced with 'popular' for food items.

× Chocolate brings a sense of chewy in everyone.

✓ Chocolate brings a sense of chewiness to everyone.

The adjective 'chewy' is incorrectly used; the noun form 'chewiness' is appropriate here. Also, the preposition 'to' fits better than 'in'.

× Well, scientifically, chocolate increases your dopamine hormone which makes everyone feels good.

✓ Well, scientifically, chocolate increases your dopamine hormone which makes everyone feel good.

The verb after 'makes everyone' should be base form 'feel' not 'feels' because 'makes' causes the base verb to follow.

× And so does it always also good for your.

✓ And so, is it always also good for you?

The original sentence is ungrammatical and incomplete. Rephrasing as a question 'is it always also good for you?' makes sense in context.

× I've always got bad period cramps, so whenever I, uh, dark chocolate, it seems to suit down my pain.

✓ I've always had bad period cramps, so whenever I eat dark chocolate, it seems to ease my pain.

'Got' should be 'had' for standard English. The verb 'eat' is missing after 'whenever I'. 'Suit down' is incorrect; 'ease' or 'reduce' is appropriate.

× It uh, can be used as a pain really for during my heart menstruation time.

✓ It can be used as a pain reliever during my period.

The phrase 'pain really for during my heart menstruation time' is incorrect and unclear. 'Pain reliever during my period' is the correct expression.

× So I like dark chocolates.

✓ So I like dark chocolate.

'Chocolate' as a general food item is uncountable and should be singular here.

× Yes, chocolate is a sign of love.

✓ Yes, chocolate is a symbol of love.

While 'sign' is not grammatically wrong, 'symbol' is a more appropriate word to express the meaning intended.

× It brings joy to people.

✓ It brings joy to people.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× It is used when you want to express your love.

✓ It is used when you want to express your love.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× As you know, a separate day during the Valentine is also categorized for the chocolate day, so you know how important the chocolate is.

✓ As you know, a separate day during Valentine's Day is also dedicated to chocolate, so you know how important chocolate is.

'Valentine' should be 'Valentine's Day'. 'Categorized for the chocolate day' is incorrect; 'dedicated to chocolate' is correct. Also, 'the chocolate' is unnecessary before 'is'.