巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 중복된 표현과 불필요한 망설임이 있습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하고, 감정을 표현할 때 구체적인 이유를 덧붙이는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and helps me feel happier and less stressed.

建議: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 질문에 직접적으로 답하고, 이유를 명확하게 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I used to eat chocolate often when I was young, but now I rarely eat it because I want to stay healthy and avoid unnecessary expenses.

建議: 과거 시제 사용이 부적절하고, 문장이 반복적이며 자연스럽지 않습니다. 과거 시제를 정확히 사용하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because I enjoyed sweet foods and they made my daily life happier.

建議: 답변이 불명확하고 중복된 표현이 많으며, 논리적 연결이 부족합니다. 이유를 명확히 하고, 연결어를 사용하여 답변을 구조화하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it is affordable and has a unique taste that many people enjoy.

建議: 문장이 중복되고 어색하며, 비교 표현이 부적절합니다. 문장을 간결하게 만들고, 비교할 때 적절한 표현을 사용하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: My favourite flavour is dark milk chocolate because it tastes better than other types.

建議: 답변이 모호하고 연결어 사용이 부족합니다. 의견을 명확히 하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I think chocolate can be a good gift, but it depends on the person's preference because some people like it while others don't.

× I absolutely love eating. I like to eating chocolate because it's really, umm, delicious and uh, I ate them, uh, I feel more happy and satisfying and all stressed out, so I like.

✓ I absolutely love eating. I like eating chocolate because it's really, umm, delicious and uh, when I eat it, uh, I feel happier and more satisfied and less stressed out, so I like it.

The phrase 'like to eating' is incorrect; after 'like', the verb should be in the '-ing' form without 'to'. Also, 'I ate them' is past tense and does not fit the context; it should be 'when I eat it' to indicate habitual action. 'More happy' should be 'happier' as it is a comparative adjective. 'Satisfying' is an adjective but here 'more satisfied' (feeling) is appropriate. 'All stressed out' is informal and unclear; 'less stressed out' fits better to express relief.

× I ate them, uh, I feel more happy and satisfying and all stressed out, so I like.

✓ I ate it, uh, I feel happier and more satisfied and less stressed out, so I like it.

The pronoun 'them' is plural but 'chocolate' is uncountable or singular here, so 'it' is correct. Also, 'more happy' should be 'happier' and 'satisfying' should be 'more satisfied' to correctly express feelings.

× Umm, when I was young, I ate chocolate a lot of times, but I grew, I I've grown grown up. I don't eat them because it, it cost the bar, it cost some obligation. Also, I don't need.

✓ Umm, when I was young, I ate chocolate many times, but I have grown up. I don't eat it now because it costs a lot, and I don't need it.

'A lot of times' is better expressed as 'many times'. 'I grew, I I've grown grown up' is redundant and incorrect; 'I have grown up' is correct present perfect tense. 'It cost the bar, it cost some obligation' is unclear; 'it costs a lot' is clearer. 'I don't need' is incomplete; 'I don't need it' is correct.

× I don't eat them because it, it cost the bar, it cost some obligation.

✓ I don't eat it because it costs a lot.

'Them' is plural but 'chocolate' is uncountable or singular here, so 'it' is correct. 'Cost' should be in present tense 'costs' to agree with singular subject 'it'.

× Yes, I often eat chocolate because it is very delicious. I I like delicious food when I was young because it makes me feel happy daily life, so I want to eat many chocolates.

✓ Yes, I often ate chocolate because it was very delicious. I liked delicious food when I was young because it made me feel happy in daily life, so I wanted to eat a lot of chocolate.

The question is about past habits, so past tense 'ate', 'liked', 'made', 'wanted' should be used. 'Many chocolates' is incorrect; 'a lot of chocolate' is better as 'chocolate' is uncountable here.

× so I want to eat many chocolates.

✓ so I want to eat a lot of chocolate.

'Many' is used with countable nouns, but 'chocolate' is uncountable here, so 'a lot of' is appropriate.

× There are several kinds of chocolates, such as white dark milk I like I I I like The best one is dark milk chocolate because it is the most delicious than other things, so I eat them.

✓ There are several kinds of chocolate, such as white, dark, and milk. I like the dark milk chocolate best because it is more delicious than the others, so I eat it.

'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun here. Missing commas between 'white, dark, and milk'. 'The most delicious than' is incorrect; use 'more delicious than'. 'Them' should be 'it' referring to singular chocolate.

× There are several kinds of chocolates, such as white dark milk I like I I I like The best one is dark milk chocolate because it is the most delicious than other things, so I eat them.

✓ There are several kinds of chocolate, such as white, dark, and milk. I like the dark milk chocolate best because it is more delicious than the others, so I eat it.

'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun. 'Them' is plural but refers to singular 'dark milk chocolate', so 'it' is correct.

× I ate them, uh, I feel more happy and satisfying and all stressed out, so I like.

✓ I ate it, uh, I feel happier and more satisfied and less stressed out, so I like it.

'Them' is plural but 'chocolate' is uncountable or singular here, so 'it' is correct.