巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and coherent by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. For example, instead of saying "it tastes, gives me pleasure," say "it tastes delicious and gives me pleasure." Also, avoid unnecessary words like "actually" at the end.

範例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and gives me pleasure. I'm especially fond of Kit Kat bars.

建議: Improve your answer by using correct grammar and linking words to make it more coherent. For example, use "when my friends come to visit me" and link ideas with "and" or "so."

範例: I often eat chocolate when I have money to buy it, and sometimes I share chocolate with my friends when they come to visit me.

建議: Use past tense consistently and improve sentence clarity. Avoid fragmented sentences and explain your ideas clearly. For example, say "I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because I have always loved it. My favorite was Kit Kat."

範例: Definitely, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because I have always loved it. My favorite chocolate was Kit Kat.

建議: Make your answer clearer and more logical by using correct vocabulary and linking words. For example, say "because of its rich flavor and sweet aroma. Also, there are various types of chocolate, such as sweet and salty, which satisfy different tastes."

範例: I think chocolate is popular around the world because of its rich flavor and sweet aroma. Also, there are various types of chocolate, such as sweet and salty, which satisfy different tastes.

建議: Clarify your answer by specifying the type of chocolate you like, such as dark chocolate, and avoid confusing sentences. Use linking words to compare flavors.

範例: My favorite flavor is dark chocolate because it tastes richer and different from other types like vanilla, milk, mango, or orange.

建議: Make your answer more natural by avoiding repetition and improving sentence structure. For example, say "I think chocolate is a unique and popular gift for occasions like birthdays, weddings, and special ceremonies."

範例: Definitely, I think chocolate is a unique and popular gift for occasions like birthdays, weddings, and special ceremonies.

× Yes, I like eating chocolate because it's very delicious, it tastes, gives me pleasure and I'm a Kit Kat lover actually.

✓ Yes, I like eating chocolate because it's very delicious, it tastes good, gives me pleasure and I'm actually a Kit Kat lover.

The original sentence has a misplaced comma and lacks the word 'good' after 'tastes' to complete the phrase. Adding 'good' clarifies the meaning and improves sentence flow.

× I often eat chocolate when I have money to buy it and sometimes I eat chocolate when my friend come to me and then we eat chocolate together.

✓ I often eat chocolate when I have money to buy it and sometimes I eat chocolate when my friend comes to me and then we eat chocolate together.

The subject 'my friend' is singular, so the verb should be 'comes' instead of 'come' to agree in number.

× Definitely, I often eat chocolate when I was a kid because from my childhood I always loved chocolate and my parents always persist. Me The favorite chocolate Kit Kat actually.

✓ Definitely, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because from my childhood I always loved chocolate and my parents always insisted. Kit Kat was my favorite chocolate actually.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match 'when I was a kid'. 'Persist' should be 'insisted' to correctly express past action. The sentence about favorite chocolate is incomplete and needs restructuring.

× I think chocolate is popular around the world because of its rich flavor and sweet smell actually. And there are various type of chocolates, sweet, salt and that's why the various types of taste need.

✓ I think chocolate is popular around the world because of its rich flavor and sweet smell actually. And there are various types of chocolates, sweet, salty, and that's why various tastes are needed.

'Type' should be plural 'types' to match 'various'. 'Salt' should be 'salty' as an adjective. The last part is unclear and corrected to express the idea properly.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is chocolate. I really like the chocolate flavor actually it's looked like dark and it tastes really different than other chocolates. Vanilla, milk, mango, orange and others. So I think chocolate flavor is really best.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is chocolate. I really like the chocolate flavor actually; it looks dark and tastes really different from other chocolates like vanilla, milk, mango, orange, and others. So I think chocolate flavor is really the best.

'Looked' should be 'looks' to match present tense. 'Different than' should be 'different from'. Added punctuation and connected sentences for clarity.

× Definitely, I think it's the best and unique, unique gift to others and nowadays everybody try to give chocolate for any occasions like birthday, wedding and the special ceremony if anyone have. So I think it's the best option for anyone.

✓ Definitely, I think it's the best and unique gift to others and nowadays everybody tries to give chocolate for any occasion like birthdays, weddings, and special ceremonies if anyone has them. So I think it's the best option for anyone.

'Try' should be 'tries' to agree with 'everybody'. 'Occasions' should be plural with appropriate articles. 'Anyone have' should be 'anyone has' to agree in number.