巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly stating your opinion and giving a clear reason. Avoid redundancy and confusing phrases.

範例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it has a unique taste that makes me feel happy, even though it's not as sweet as candy.

建議: Your answer is understandable but could be improved by using more natural expressions and clearer sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: I don't eat chocolate very often because it is quite expensive, probably because it's difficult to produce.

建議: Your answer has several unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes. Try to respond directly with clear sentences and avoid unrelated words. Use linking words to explain your situation.

範例: Unfortunately, I didn't eat chocolate often as a child because my family couldn't afford it. I only had it on special occasions.

建議: Your answer has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to organise your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect reasons logically.

範例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it is seen as a symbol of wealth due to its cost. Besides, it tastes sweet and some people believe it has health benefits.

建議: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and fluent. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid awkward phrases.

範例: I prefer milk chocolate rather than dark chocolate because it has a smooth, milky flavour that is easy to eat and suitable for children.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid confusing phrases. Use linking words to explain your reasons.

範例: Yes, chocolate makes a great gift on many occasions, especially between couples, because it shows sincere feelings and affection.

× Chocolate is my favorite food in the university, although it's not that sweet as candy but has another taste that is written that can make me feel happy.

✓ Chocolate is my favourite food at university, although it's not as sweet as candy but has another taste that can make me feel happy.

The phrase 'not that sweet as candy' is incorrect; the correct comparative structure is 'not as sweet as candy'. Also, 'in the university' should be 'at university' to indicate the general place. The phrase 'that is written that' is unclear and unnecessary, so it was removed for clarity.

× Chocolate is my favorite food in the university, although it's not that sweet as candy but has another taste that is written that can make me feel happy.

✓ Chocolate is my favourite food at university, although it's not as sweet as candy but has another taste that can make me feel happy.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'the university'; the correct preposition is 'at' when referring to being a student or location in general.

× To be honest, I don't eat chocolate very often 'cause the price stopped me from that.

✓ To be honest, I don't eat chocolate very often because the price stops me from doing so.

The phrase 'stopped me from that' is incorrect. The modal verb 'stops me from doing so' correctly expresses the idea that the price prevents the action. Also, 'cause' is informal; 'because' is more appropriate in this context.

× Chocolate is kind of a really expensive thing as a food, maybe due to its hard to produce this food I guess.

✓ Chocolate is kind of a really expensive food, maybe because it is hard to produce, I guess.

The phrase 'a really expensive thing as a food' is awkward; 'a really expensive food' is clearer. Also, 'due to its hard to produce this food' is incorrect; it should be 'because it is hard to produce'.

× Unfortunately, I don't all he choked often when I was a child 'cause my family can't afford that.

✓ Unfortunately, I didn't eat chocolate often when I was a child because my family couldn't afford it.

The original sentence contains unclear and incorrect words ('don't all he choked'). The corrected sentence uses past tense 'didn't eat' and 'couldn't afford' to match the past time frame. Also, 'that' is replaced with 'it' to refer to chocolate.

× Journalism is kind of feast in my childhood.

✓ Chocolate was kind of a treat in my childhood.

The word 'Journalism' is incorrect here; likely intended 'chocolate'. 'Feast' is a noun meaning a large meal, but 'treat' is more appropriate to describe chocolate as a special food. Also, 'in my childhood' is correct.

× Only on special occasions I can have it.

✓ I could only have it on special occasions.

The sentence structure is awkward. Placing 'only' before 'have it' and using past tense 'could' fits the past context better. Also, 'on special occasions' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× I think the most important reason is a chocolate expensive which makes it a symbol to be real and rich.

✓ I think the most important reason is that chocolate is expensive, which makes it a symbol of being real and rich.

The phrase 'a chocolate expensive' is incorrect; it should be 'that chocolate is expensive'. Also, 'symbol to be real and rich' is incorrect; 'symbol of being real and rich' is correct.

× Apart from that, chocolate is sweet, is good to taste and to some people it's good for their health.

✓ Apart from that, chocolate is sweet, tastes good, and to some people, it's good for their health.

The phrase 'is good to taste' is incorrect; 'tastes good' is the correct expression. Also, commas are added for clarity.

× I prefer the milk chocolate, not like the black chocolate.

✓ I prefer milk chocolate, not like dark chocolate.

'The milk chocolate' and 'the black chocolate' are incorrect; 'milk chocolate' and 'dark chocolate' are the correct terms. 'Black chocolate' is not commonly used.

× It's not that hard to eat.

✓ It's not too bitter to eat.

'Hard to eat' is unclear; likely the student means 'bitter' or 'strong' taste. 'Not too bitter to eat' is a clearer expression for chocolate flavour.

× Eating it has a taste of milk which enriched flavor.

✓ Eating it has a milky taste which enriches the flavour.

'Has a taste of milk' is awkward; 'has a milky taste' is better. 'Enriched flavor' should be 'enriches the flavour' to match subject-verb agreement and correct form.

× It's good for kids.

✓ It is good for kids.

Contraction 'It's' is acceptable in speech, but for clarity and formality, 'It is' is preferred.

× Yes, of course chocolate is a great and special present on most occasions, especially between couples.

✓ Yes, of course, chocolate is a great and special present on most occasions, especially between couples.

A comma after 'of course' improves sentence clarity.

× It's it's fitness.

✓ It is fitting.

The phrase 'It's it's fitness' is incorrect and unclear. 'It is fitting' correctly expresses that chocolate is appropriate as a gift.

× Show the heartfelt sincerity from people to people.

✓ It shows heartfelt sincerity from one person to another.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb. The corrected sentence has proper subject-verb agreement and clearer expression.