巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to give a clear and complete answer with correct grammar and avoid redundancy. Use simple and natural sentences to express your opinion clearly.

範例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and delicious. However, sometimes I avoid it if it is too sweet for me.

建議: Provide a clear and complete answer with proper sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and avoid incomplete sentences.

範例: I usually eat chocolate when I travel long distances. I buy some chocolates and keep them in my car, so I can enjoy them during the journey, which makes traveling easier.

建議: Focus on giving a clear and coherent answer. Use simple sentences and avoid confusing phrases. Mention specific details to support your answer.

範例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid. My brother used to bring me Kit Kat, which was my favorite chocolate.

建議: Use appropriate vocabulary and clear sentence structure. Explain your ideas with specific reasons and avoid unclear words like 'urgent'.

範例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and many people, including children and adults, enjoy eating it.

建議: Make sure your answer is relevant and clear. Use correct vocabulary and avoid confusing words. Clearly state your favorite chocolate flavor.

範例: My favorite chocolate is Cadbury milk chocolate. I have liked it since I was a kid.

建議: Give a clear opinion and support it with reasons. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid unclear phrases.

範例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it makes people happy. Giving chocolate shows kindness and is suitable for many occasions.

× Yeah, I like to eat the chocolate, but sometimes I don't like to eat because of the too much sweet.

✓ Yeah, I like to eat chocolate, but sometimes I don't like to eat because of too much sweetness.

The phrase 'the too much sweet' is incorrect. 'Too much' should be followed by an uncountable noun, so 'sweet' should be changed to 'sweetness'. Also, the definite article 'the' is unnecessary here.

× So that's why I don't like whenever I feel this, I feel like.

✓ So that's why I don't like it whenever I feel this way.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity. 'I feel like' is incomplete without an object or complement. Adding 'it' and 'this way' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× Mostly when I travel long traveling to one city to another city I buy too much chocolate and put in my car and the way sometime I eat my journey is easy to travel because of.

✓ Mostly when I travel long distances from one city to another, I buy a lot of chocolate and put it in my car, and sometimes I eat it because it makes my journey easier.

The original sentence has multiple issues: 'too much chocolate' is acceptable but 'put in my car and the way sometime I eat my journey is easy to travel because of' is unclear and ungrammatical. 'A lot of chocolate' is more natural. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, when I was a kid my mind chocolate which one is a special special lady book I like and my brother bring for me the very little time Kit Kat which one I like.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, I liked a special chocolate called 'Ladybook', and my brother brought me a small Kit Kat, which I also liked.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. It lacks proper sentence structure and verb forms. The correction clarifies the meaning, uses past tense verbs, and structures the sentence properly.

× Actually, chocolate is very delicious and very urgent to people and mostly even kids and younger and older people.

✓ Actually, chocolate is very delicious and very popular among people, including kids, young people, and older people.

The word 'urgent' is incorrectly used; the intended meaning is likely 'popular'. Also, 'younger and older people' is better expressed as 'young people and older people' for clarity.

× Ayesha, I already discussed before with you my favorite chocolate is a cat and and this is my favorite chicken. I was kid so now I'm like the Cadbury meal.

✓ Ayesha, I already discussed with you before that my favorite chocolate is Kit Kat, and this was my favorite chocolate when I was a kid. Now I like Cadbury Dairy Milk.

The original sentence has incorrect pronouns and words: 'a cat' should be 'Kit Kat', 'chicken' is incorrect, and 'Cadbury meal' should be 'Cadbury Dairy Milk'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct word usage.

× Oh, why not different you choose, this is actually one day we should give the chocolate as a gift, and they will feel very happy to eat chocolate, and they also eat slightly chocolate.

✓ Oh, why not? You can choose differently. Actually, we should give chocolate as a gift sometimes, and they will feel very happy to receive it, and they also eat a little chocolate.

The original sentence misuses modal verbs and has unclear phrasing. 'Why not different you choose' is incorrect; 'You can choose differently' is correct. 'One day' is changed to 'sometimes' for naturalness. 'Slightly chocolate' is incorrect; 'a little chocolate' is appropriate.