巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and expresses your feelings well, but it could be more natural and grammatically correct. Try to use present tense consistently and avoid redundancy. Also, add a linking phrase to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and always makes me feel happy. In fact, whenever I eat chocolate, I feel a warm and comforting sensation in my heart.

建議: Your answer is brief and repetitive. To improve, provide more specific details and use linking words to explain why you eat chocolate often. Avoid vague words like "wonderful" and "perfect" without explanation.

範例: I eat chocolate almost every day because I enjoy its rich flavor and it helps me relax after a long day. Moreover, having a small piece daily feels like a nice treat.

建議: Your answer has some unclear and incorrect phrases like "open society and theories of disease." Try to use clear and relevant reasons. Also, avoid repeating the same idea and use linking words to connect sentences logically.

範例: When I was a child, I rarely ate chocolate because my mother believed it was unhealthy. She worried that eating too much chocolate could cause health problems, so she limited how often I could have it.

建議: Your answer is good but could be improved by correcting grammar and using linking words for coherence. Also, avoid informal words like "Yeah" in formal speaking tests.

範例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and creamy. Additionally, it often makes people feel happy and comforted. For example, when someone has a stressful day, eating a small piece of chocolate can help boost their mood.

建議: Your answer has unclear phrases like "original bigness of chocolate." Try to use precise vocabulary and correct grammar. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: My favorite flavor of chocolate is mint chocolate because the refreshing taste of mint blends well with the rich flavor of chocolate. Especially in the hot summer, eating a small piece feels very refreshing and enjoyable.

建議: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating ideas and use linking words to improve flow. Also, clarify pronouns to avoid confusion.

範例: I think giving chocolate as a gift is a great idea. For instance, on Valentine's Day, I enjoy receiving chocolate from my partner because we can share it while chatting, which helps strengthen our relationship.

× I think it's sweet and it made me happy.

✓ I think it's sweet and it makes me happy.

The sentence mixes present tense ('I think') with past tense ('it made'). Since the speaker is expressing a general feeling, the present tense 'makes' is appropriate to maintain consistency.

× Eating too much chocolate could lead to open society and theories of disease.

✓ Eating too much chocolate could lead to obesity and theories of disease.

The phrase 'open society' is incorrect in this context; likely a mishearing or mistranslation. The intended word is probably 'obesity', which is a health condition related to eating too much chocolate. This correction clarifies the meaning.

× Especially when people having a stressful day, they can eat a small piece of chocolate, it can boost their moods.

✓ Especially when people are having a stressful day, they can eat a small piece of chocolate; it can boost their moods.

The phrase 'people having' lacks the auxiliary verb 'are' to form the present continuous tense. Adding 'are' corrects the verb form. Also, the comma splice is corrected by replacing the comma with a semicolon.

× I like the food tasted mixed with the original bigness of chocolate.

✓ I like the food taste mixed with the original richness of chocolate.

The phrase 'food tasted' is incorrect; 'food taste' or 'flavor' is appropriate. 'Original bigness' is not a correct collocation; 'original richness' better describes the chocolate's flavor intensity.

× I like to eat such a small piece in the hot summer, I will feel extremely refreshing and comfortable.

✓ I like to eat a small piece in the hot summer because I feel extremely refreshed and comfortable.

The original sentence is a comma splice combining two independent clauses incorrectly. Also, 'refreshing' should be 'refreshed' to describe the speaker's feeling. The correction uses 'because' to connect the clauses properly.

× which can enhance their relationship and we can also feel the deliciousness of chocolate together.

✓ which can enhance our relationship and we can also enjoy the deliciousness of chocolate together.

The pronoun 'their' is incorrect because the speaker is referring to their own relationship. Changing 'their' to 'our' corrects the pronoun reference. Also, 'feel the deliciousness' is better expressed as 'enjoy the deliciousness'.