巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并注意时态和单复数的正确使用。可以用更自然的表达方式描述喜欢巧克力的原因。

範例: Yes, I have loved eating chocolate since I was a child because my family also enjoys it. They often bought chocolates for me, and I especially like eating chocolate and drinking hot chocolate.

建議: 回答中有语法错误，句子衔接不够流畅。建议使用连接词使表达更连贯，并注意时态一致性。

範例: I usually eat chocolate four or five times a week, but I eat less in summer. However, in autumn and winter, I eat more because chocolate makes me feel warm and happy.

建議: 回答中时态混用，表达不够准确。建议注意时态一致，简洁表达，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: Yes, definitely. I ate a lot of chocolate when I was a kid, but I eat less now as an adult. I used to eat chocolate whenever I felt happy or sometimes when I was sad to cheer myself up.

建議: 回答结构混乱，表达重复且不够具体。建议先给出观点，再用具体例子支持，避免重复。

範例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious. Many snacks like biscuits and cakes are made with chocolate flavor, which makes it loved by many people.

建議: 回答语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议简化句子，正确使用形容词，并清楚表达喜好。

範例: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it is sweeter and smoother. I don't like dark chocolate much because it tastes bitter and a bit sour to me.

建議: 回答中表达不够自然，语法和用词有误。建议用更自然的表达方式说明送巧克力作为礼物的原因，并注意句子结构。

範例: Yes, I think chocolate is a great gift. I often give it to my close friends and family because it symbolizes sweetness and good wishes for their life and future, especially on occasions like Valentine's Day.

× I really like eating chocolates since I'm just a little girl because my families are all like chocolates when I was very young.

✓ I really like eating chocolate since I was just a little girl because my family all liked chocolate when I was very young.

families 应该用单数 family，因为指的是一个家庭。chocolates 应该用不可数名词 chocolate。like 应该用过去式 liked，因为描述过去的情况。

× They buy a lot of chocolates to me and I love eat chocolate and love drink hot chocolate as well.

✓ They bought a lot of chocolates for me and I love eating chocolate and love drinking hot chocolate as well.

buy 后面接人时用介词 for 而不是 to。love 后面动词要用动名词形式 eating 和 drinking。

× I always eat chocolates maybe four or five times a week, but in summer I eat less.

✓ I always eat chocolate maybe four or five times a week, but in summer I eat less.

chocolates 应该用不可数名词 chocolate。

× But in autumn and winter I eat a lot because eat chocolate made me feel warm and happy.

✓ But in autumn and winter I eat a lot because eating chocolate makes me feel warm and happy.

eat chocolate 应该用动名词 eating chocolate 作为原因状语。made 应该用一般现在时 makes，因为描述的是习惯性事实。

× Yes, definitely. I eat lots of chocolates when I was a kid, but when I grow up and being adults I eat less.

✓ Yes, definitely. I ate lots of chocolate when I was a kid, but when I grew up and became an adult I ate less.

描述过去的动作要用过去时 ate, grew up, became。being adults 结构错误，应改为 became an adult。

× When I was a kid I ate chocolates every time I feel happy and sometimes when I feel sad and down I also eat chocolates to cheer.

✓ When I was a kid I ate chocolate every time I felt happy and sometimes when I felt sad and down I also ate chocolate to cheer up.

chocolates 应用不可数名词 chocolate。feel 应该用过去时 felt。eat 应该用过去时 ate。

× Especially because chocolate is very delicious and lots of food made in chocolate flavour like biscuits and cake and lots of other snacks so that chocolate became popular and popular around the world.

✓ Especially because chocolate is very delicious and lots of food made with chocolate flavor like biscuits and cake and lots of other snacks, so chocolate became popular around the world.

made 后面接介词应为 with 而不是 in。

× I especially like milk chocolate because it's more sweet and I think black chocolate is a bit sour and bitter is not. Very much is not. I don't like it very much and milk chocolate is more smoothie and.

✓ I especially like milk chocolate because it's sweeter and I think dark chocolate is a bit sour and bitter. I don't like it very much and milk chocolate is smoother.

more sweet 应该用比较级 sweeter。bitter is not 和 Very much is not 句子不完整，应删除或合并。smoothie 应为形容词 smoother。

× Yes I think it's a good gift and I always send chocolate as gift to my close friends and family because I think chocolate means sweetie and is the best wish for others life and future and maybe in some Valentine days.

✓ Yes, I think it's a good gift and I always send chocolate as a gift to my close friends and family because I think chocolate means sweetness and is the best wish for others' life and future, maybe on some Valentine's Days.

send ... as gift 应加冠词 as a gift。sweetie 是名词，意思是“甜心”，应改为 sweetness 表示“甜味”。others life 应加所有格 others' life。Valentine days 应为 Valentine's Days。