巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ, bạn nên dùng "reduces" thay vì "reduce" và "I often eat" thay vì "I often eating". Ngoài ra, tránh lặp lại ý giống nhau như "makes me more relaxed" và "boost my mood" mà nên kết hợp chúng một cách mạch lạc hơn.

範例: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it helps me relax and reduces my stress. I usually eat chocolate twice a week after a long day at school, which always lifts my mood and makes me feel very happy.

建議: Bạn cần chú ý thì động từ cho phù hợp và tránh lặp từ không cần thiết. Ví dụ, "I ate" nên là "I eat" để phù hợp với thì hiện tại. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, tránh lặp lại ý giống nhau như "put my mood" và "make me feel over the moon" mà nên dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

範例: I usually eat chocolate twice a day because I feel very tired after school. Eating chocolate helps me relax and improves my mood, so it's a simple way for me to unwind and feel happier.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn có nội dung tốt nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ "when I was a high school" nên là "when I was in high school" và "my father often buy" nên là "my father often bought". Ngoài ra, bạn nên dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn thay vì dùng dấu phẩy nối hai câu độc lập.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a kid, my mother often took me to the supermarket to buy chocolate. Also, when I was in high school, my father often bought chocolate as a gift for me.

建議: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ, "it's not only bring" nên là "it not only brings" và "is offer" nên là "also offers". Ngoài ra, tránh dùng từ không chính xác như "numerous nutrition" mà nên dùng "nutrients" hoặc "nutritional benefits". Hãy dùng liên từ hợp lý để câu mạch lạc.

範例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it not only has a delicious taste but also offers many nutritional benefits. Moreover, it helps people relax and feel happier.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ "It's make me" nên là "It makes me" và "more happier" là sai vì "happier" đã là so sánh hơn. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, tránh lặp lại ý và dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

範例: My favorite flavor is dark chocolate because it has a slightly bitter taste and helps boost my energy after a long day at school. However, I would also like to try white chocolate since it is very sweet and can make people feel happier.

建議: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ "I think is it good" nên là "I think it is good" và "my parent and my friend also gives" nên là "my parents and friends also give". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn bằng cách dùng liên từ hợp lý.

範例: Definitely, I think chocolate is a good gift because it is small and affordable. For example, on my birthday, my parents and friends often give me chocolate as a present, which I really enjoy.

× I often eating chocolate twice a week after a long day at school because it's made me over the moon and boost my mood.

✓ I often eat chocolate twice a week after a long day at school because it makes me over the moon and boosts my mood.

The verb 'eating' is incorrectly used after 'often'; it should be the base form 'eat' to match the present simple tense. Also, 'it's made' should be 'it makes' to maintain present tense consistency, and 'boost' should be 'boosts' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× Then I ate chocolate to put my mood and it's make me feel over the moon and I think eating chocolate is a simple way for me to unwind and feel happier.

✓ Then I eat chocolate to lift my mood and it makes me feel over the moon, and I think eating chocolate is a simple way for me to unwind and feel happier.

The past tense 'ate' is inconsistent with the present context; it should be 'eat'. The phrase 'put my mood' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'lift my mood'. 'It's make' should be 'it makes' to agree with the singular subject and present tense.

× And when I was a high school, my father often buy chocolate for me as a gift.

✓ And when I was in high school, my father often bought chocolate for me as a gift.

The phrase 'was a high school' is incorrect; it should be 'was in high school'. The verb 'buy' should be in past tense 'bought' to agree with 'often' in past context.

× The main reason that I think chocolate is popular around the world because it's not only bring a delicious taste but also is offer numerous nutrition for people and I moreover, I think it's the help people unwind and feel happier.

✓ The main reason I think chocolate is popular around the world is because it not only brings a delicious taste but also offers numerous nutrients for people. Moreover, I think it helps people unwind and feel happier.

The sentence has incorrect conjunction and structure. 'Not only bring' should be 'not only brings' to agree with singular subject. 'Is offer' should be 'offers'. 'I moreover' is incorrect; 'Moreover' should start a new sentence. 'It's the help' should be 'it helps'. Also, 'nutrition' should be plural 'nutrients' in this context.

× It's make me boost my energy after a long day at school.

✓ It makes me boost my energy after a long day at school.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it' in present tense.

× It's make people more happier.

✓ It makes people happier.

'It's make' should be 'it makes' to agree with singular subject. 'More happier' is incorrect; 'happier' is the comparative form and does not need 'more'.

× Definitely, I think is it good to use chocolate as a gift to others because I think chocolate is small and affordable.

✓ Definitely, I think it is good to use chocolate as a gift for others because chocolate is small and affordable.

The sentence has incorrect word order 'is it good'; it should be 'it is good'. Also, 'gift to others' is better expressed as 'gift for others'. Repetition of 'I think' is unnecessary.

× For example, when when it's my birthday, my parent and my friend also gives me a chocolate as a gift and I very enjoy it.

✓ For example, when it's my birthday, my parents and my friends also give me chocolate as a gift, and I really enjoy it.

'Parent' and 'friend' should be plural 'parents' and 'friends' to match context. 'Gives' should be 'give' to agree with plural subject. 'A chocolate' is incorrect; 'chocolate' is uncountable here. 'I very enjoy it' is incorrect; 'I really enjoy it' is correct.