巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: คำตอบของคุณควรใช้คำที่ถูกต้องและชัดเจน เช่น คำว่า 'Durban' น่าจะเป็นคำผิด ควรใช้คำว่า 'helpful' หรือ 'good' แทน และควรตอบตรงคำถามโดยเริ่มด้วยประโยคหลักที่ชัดเจน เช่น 'Yes, I like eating chocolate because it helps improve my mood.'

範例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it helps improve my mood, especially when I feel angry or stressed.

建議: ควรใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้องและชัดเจน เช่น 'It depends on what I am doing.' และควรใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมประโยค เช่น 'For example' ควรอธิบายให้ชัดเจนขึ้น และหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำซ้อน

範例: I usually eat chocolate twice a day, but it depends on my activities. For example, if I am studying, I might eat more chocolate to stay focused.

建議: ควรใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'It depended on how much my parents could give me.' และตอบตรงคำถามโดยเริ่มด้วยประโยคหลัก เช่น 'When I was a kid, I ate chocolate once or twice a week.'

範例: When I was a kid, I ate chocolate once or twice a week, depending on how much my parents gave me and what I could buy.

建議: คำตอบไม่ชัดเจนและมีคำผิด ควรใช้คำที่เหมาะสมและอธิบายเหตุผลอย่างชัดเจน เช่น 'Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes good and many people enjoy sweet desserts.'

範例: Chocolate is popular around the world because it tastes delicious and many people enjoy sweet desserts, making it a favorite treat everywhere.

建議: ควรใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจนและถูกต้อง เช่น 'My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it is common and easy to buy.' และหลีกเลี่ยงประโยคที่ไม่สมเหตุสมผล เช่น 'milk chocolate can make slim'

範例: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it is common and easy to buy, and I enjoy its sweet and creamy taste.

建議: คำตอบควรชัดเจนและมีโครงสร้างที่ดี เช่น 'Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because many people like it.' และหลีกเลี่ยงประโยคที่ไม่สมบูรณ์หรือไม่ชัดเจน

範例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because many people enjoy it, and it is popular in many countries, including Asia.

× Yeah, substantially.

✓ Yeah, absolutely.

The word 'substantially' is an adverb meaning 'to a great extent' and is not appropriate here. The correct adverb to express strong agreement is 'absolutely'.

× it's very Durban to boost my feeling, especially when I feel angry.

✓ it's very good to boost my feeling, especially when I feel angry.

'Durban' is a proper noun (a city name) and is incorrectly used as an adjective here. The intended meaning is likely 'good' or 'helpful'.

× Well, normally and maybe twice a day, maybe more times a day.

✓ Well, normally maybe twice a day, maybe more times a day.

The conjunction 'and' is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence flow. Removing it improves clarity.

× It's depend on what would I do.

✓ It depends on what I would do.

The subject 'It' requires the verb 'depends' in third person singular form. Also, the word order in the subordinate clause should be 'what I would do'.

× if I'm studying today, maybe I will eat tomorrow in that case.

✓ if I'm studying today, maybe I will eat then in that case.

The phrase 'eat tomorrow' is awkward here; 'eat then' better fits the conditional context referring to the time of studying.

× No, it's depend on how much my parents can give me and I can buy that.

✓ No, it depends on how much my parents can give me and what I can buy.

'It' requires 'depends' in third person singular. Also, 'and I can buy that' is awkward; 'and what I can buy' is clearer.

× But as far as I know, I think because many foreigners like dessert and chocolate is plain all over the world, I think the ways to plan is the best choice.

✓ But as far as I know, I think many foreigners like dessert and chocolate is popular all over the world; I think the way to plan is the best choice.

'Plain' is incorrect here; the intended word is likely 'popular'. Also, 'ways to plan' is unclear; possibly 'way to plan' or 'way to play' is intended, but context is unclear.

× Well, I like the milk chocolate. It's very normally and I can buy that especially I don't like the milk, it's liquid milk, but the milk chocolate can make slim so.

✓ Well, I like milk chocolate. It's very normal and I can buy it easily, especially since I don't like milk, the liquid kind, but milk chocolate can make me slim.

'Very normally' is incorrect; 'very normal' or 'common' is better. 'Make slim so' is unclear; likely intended 'make me slim'. Also, 'the milk chocolate' should be 'milk chocolate' without 'the'.

× especially fellow is the one of the chocolate and you know, travel to Asia.

✓ especially 'Ferrero Rocher' is one of the chocolates, and you know, when traveling to Asia,

'Fellow' is incorrect; likely the brand 'Ferrero Rocher' is meant. Also, sentence structure is incomplete and unclear; needs clarification.