巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more concise and clear by avoiding redundancy and correcting grammar. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I enjoy eating chocolate, but recently I've cut back because I'm watching my calorie intake to maintain my weight.

建議: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using linking words and more natural phrasing. Also, avoid repeating the same idea and correct minor grammatical mistakes.

範例: I used to eat chocolate every day since my office always has some on the shelf, but lately, I've reduced my consumption because of the high calorie content.

建議: Your answer provides good content but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use past tense consistently and link your ideas more smoothly. Also, avoid vague expressions like 'at 1 stage'.

範例: When I was a kid, I loved eating chocolate almost every day. However, as I grew older, I realized that eating too much caused health problems, and I became obese at one point, so I worked hard to control my diet.

建議: Your answer has good ideas but could be more organized and natural. Use linking words to connect your points and avoid repeating 'sweet' unnecessarily. Also, clarify your ideas for better coherence.

範例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and comforting, which appeals to children and adults alike. Additionally, it's easy to produce since the ingredients are readily available.

建議: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, avoid negative phrases like 'depressed feeling' and replace them with more positive descriptions.

範例: I don't know much about chocolate flavors, but I used to prefer very sweet chocolates. Nowadays, I enjoy dark chocolate because its slight bitterness feels more satisfying and less heavy.

建議: Your answer is clear but could be improved by correcting grammar and making the sentences more concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid redundancy.

範例: Yes, I believe giving chocolate as a gift is a great idea, especially for families with children, since kids love chocolate and related treats.

× I like eating chocolates but recently I have reduced chocolate intake mainly because I keep count of calories and I am maintaining my body calories and also I feel chocolate gives more calories and make your piece.

✓ I like eating chocolate but recently I have reduced my chocolate intake mainly because I keep count of calories and I am maintaining my body calories and also I feel chocolate gives more calories and makes you gain weight.

The word 'chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring to the substance in general. Also, 'make your piece' is incorrect; it should be 'makes you gain weight' to convey the intended meaning. Singular and plural forms must match the context.

× I recently have reduced chocolate intake. I used to eat every day and my office also has a lot of chocolates which is kept in the shelf.

✓ I recently have reduced my chocolate intake. I used to eat it every day and my office also has a lot of chocolates which are kept on the shelf.

'Chocolate intake' needs a possessive pronoun 'my' to specify whose intake. 'Chocolates' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, the preposition 'on' is correct for 'on the shelf' (see next correction).

× my office also has a lot of chocolates which is kept in the shelf.

✓ my office also has a lot of chocolates which are kept on the shelf.

The correct preposition for placing items on a shelf is 'on', not 'in'. Also, 'chocolates' is plural, so the verb should be 'are'.

× But I am not eating much of chocolates because it has a lot of calories.

✓ But I am not eating many chocolates because they have a lot of calories.

'Much' is used with uncountable nouns; 'many' is used with countable plural nouns like 'chocolates'. Also, 'it' should be 'they' to agree with the plural noun 'chocolates'.

× When I was a kid I used to love chocolates.

✓ When I was a kid I used to love chocolate.

'Chocolate' as a general food substance is uncountable and should be singular here. 'Chocolates' refers to individual pieces, but the general liking is better expressed with the uncountable form.

× I mostly used to eat every day.

✓ I mostly used to eat it every day.

The verb 'eat' requires an object; here, 'it' refers to chocolate. Without the object, the sentence is incomplete.

× But as I grew older I know the ill effects of eating too much of chocolate and I at 1 stage I had become very obese and after that I took time to control that.

✓ But as I grew older I knew the ill effects of eating too much chocolate and at one stage I had become very obese and after that I took time to control it.

The verb 'know' should be in past tense 'knew' to match the past context. 'At 1 stage' should be 'at one stage' for clarity. 'Control that' is better as 'control it' referring to obesity.

× Chocolates are sweeter and as a kid everybody loves chocolate which is sweet and it really gives a relaxation and also chocolate is easy to make and the ingredients are easy to get.

✓ Chocolate is sweet and as a kid everybody loves chocolate which really gives relaxation. Also, chocolate is easy to make and the ingredients are easy to get.

'Chocolates are sweeter' is vague; better to say 'Chocolate is sweet'. 'Gives a relaxation' should be 'gives relaxation' without 'a'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.

× I do not know much about chocolate flavors, but before I used to eat chocolates which was very sweet.

✓ I do not know much about chocolate flavours, but before I used to eat chocolate which was very sweet.

'Chocolate flavors' is acceptable, but 'chocolate' as uncountable is better here. 'Chocolates which was' is incorrect; 'chocolate which was' is correct as 'chocolate' is singular.

× Nowadays I'm liking dark chocolates which has a touch of bitter in it that doesn't gives a depressed feeling after eating.

✓ Nowadays I like dark chocolate which has a touch of bitterness in it and doesn't give a depressed feeling after eating.

'I'm liking' is incorrect; 'I like' is the correct present simple tense. 'Dark chocolates' should be 'dark chocolate' as uncountable. 'Has a touch of bitter' should be 'has a touch of bitterness'. 'Doesn't gives' should be 'doesn't give' because 'does' requires base verb form.

× Yes, I think gifting chocolate to others is a very good thing and the families who has kids would be a great idea to give them chocolates.

✓ Yes, I think gifting chocolate to others is a very good thing and families who have kids would find it a great idea to give them chocolates.

'Families who has' is incorrect; 'families who have' is correct for plural subject-verb agreement. The sentence is rephrased for clarity.

× Especially the kids loves chocolate and anything which related to chocolate.

✓ Especially the kids love chocolate and anything which is related to chocolate.

'Kids loves' is incorrect; 'kids love' is correct for plural subject-verb agreement. 'Which related' should be 'which is related' to form a correct relative clause.