巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: คำตอบควรใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจนและถูกต้องทางไวยากรณ์ รวมถึงหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำซ้อน เช่น 'chocolates' ควรใช้คำเดียว และควรอธิบายความรู้สึกอย่างเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น เช่น การบอกว่ารสชาติหรือกลิ่นของช็อกโกแลตทำให้รู้สึกอย่างไร

範例: I enjoy eating chocolate because its rich, sweet flavor refreshes me and helps me concentrate better while working.

建議: ควรใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้องและลื่นไหล เช่น การใช้ tense ให้เหมาะสม และหลีกเลี่ยงคำที่ไม่ชัดเจนหรือผิด เช่น 'not as. Good ads before' ควรอธิบายความถี่อย่างชัดเจนและเรียบง่าย

範例: When I was 12, I used to eat chocolate about once a week, but now I only eat one bar per month.

建議: ควรใช้ประโยคที่ถูกต้องและลื่นไหล เช่น 'I don't think' ควรใช้ 'didn't' ในอดีต และหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำคำ เช่น 'dessert' ควรเชื่อมประโยคด้วยคำเชื่อมเพื่อความสมูธ

範例: No, chocolate wasn't my favorite dessert as a child; I preferred panna cotta. However, as I grew up, I found chocolate delicious and it became my go-to treat.

建議: ควรใช้คำและโครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'their uniqueness that is suitable for everyone's taste' และหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำซ้อน ควรอธิบายเหตุผลอย่างชัดเจนและมีความเชื่อมโยง

範例: I believe chocolate is popular worldwide because its unique flavor appeals to many people. Most enjoy the rich cocoa taste combined with sweetness, although some may prefer other sweets.

建議: ควรใช้ tense ให้ถูกต้อง เช่น 'I certainly like it' และ 'I eat it every day' รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล และหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำผิด เช่น 'has to bought' ควรเป็น 'had to buy'

範例: My favorite chocolate flavor is mint chocolate. Although some say it tastes like toothpaste, I really like it and eat it every day. When my mother visited the USA, she bought many mint chocolates for me because they are popular there.

建議: ควรใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้องและคำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม เช่น 'express your appreciation or sincerity to those persons' และหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำซ้อน เช่น 'popularized' ควรอธิบายเหตุผลให้ชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติ

範例: Yes, I think chocolate is a great gift to show appreciation or sincerity because it is widely loved and commonly given as a present in many countries.

× I like eating chocolates because every time I eat chocolates I can feel sense of coconuts in it and it's made me feel refreshed and the sweetness also enhance my ability to work.

✓ I like eating chocolate because every time I eat chocolate I can feel a sense of coconut in it and it makes me feel refreshed and the sweetness also enhances my ability to work.

The word 'chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring to the substance in general. 'Sense' needs the article 'a' before it. 'Coconuts' should be singular 'coconut' to match the sense. 'It's made me' should be 'it makes me' to use present tense. 'Enhance' should be 'enhances' to agree with singular subject 'sweetness'.

× In the past when I was 12 I usually eat it around one time per week, but however right now I'm not as. Good ads before so I only eat 1 bar per month.

✓ In the past when I was 12 I usually ate it around once per week, but right now I'm not as good as before so I only eat 1 bar per month.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match 'when I was 12'. 'One time' is better expressed as 'once'. 'But however' is redundant; use 'but' or 'however' alone. 'Good ads' is a typo and should be 'good as'.

× No, when I was a kid I I don't think chocolate is my favorite dessert instead of panna cotta is my favorite dessert. But when I'm grow up I find chocolate really delicious and it's become my first to go.

✓ No, when I was a kid I didn't think chocolate was my favorite dessert; instead panna cotta was my favorite dessert. But when I grew up I found chocolate really delicious and it became my first choice.

Use past tense 'didn't think' and 'was' to refer to past time. 'I'm grow up' should be 'I grew up'. 'Find' should be 'found' and 'it's become' should be 'it became' to maintain past tense. 'First to go' is incorrect; 'first choice' is appropriate.

× I think it's because of their uniqueness that suitable for everyone taste around the world. I think most people like cocoa taste and also like the sweetness of the chocolates. However, I think some might not like chocolates as much as other.

✓ I think it's because of its uniqueness that is suitable for everyone's taste around the world. I think most people like the cocoa taste and also like the sweetness of chocolate. However, I think some might not like chocolate as much as others.

Use 'its' to refer to 'chocolate' (singular). 'That suitable' needs 'that is suitable'. 'Everyone taste' should be 'everyone's taste'. 'Cocoa taste' needs 'the' article. 'Chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring generally. 'Other' should be 'others' to refer to people.

× My favorite flavour of chocolate is mint chocolate. Even though many people say that it tastes like toothpaste, I'm certainly like it and I ate it every day. When my mother went to USA, she has to bought a lot of chocolates for me since there's a lot of mint chocolate there.

✓ My favorite flavour of chocolate is mint chocolate. Even though many people say that it tastes like toothpaste, I certainly like it and I eat it every day. When my mother went to the USA, she had to buy a lot of chocolates for me since there is a lot of mint chocolate there.

'I'm certainly like it' should be 'I certainly like it'. 'Ate' should be 'eat' to indicate habitual action. 'Went to USA' needs the article 'the' before 'USA'. 'She has to bought' is incorrect; correct is 'she had to buy'. 'There's' is acceptable but 'there is' is clearer.

× Yes, I think it's such a great gift to express your appreciations or your sincerely for that persons because in many country popularized chocolate has been widely spread and popularized for gifts.

✓ Yes, I think it's such a great gift to express your appreciation or your sincerity for those persons because in many countries popularized chocolate has been widely spread and popularized as gifts.

'Appreciations' should be singular 'appreciation'. 'Sincerely' is an adverb; the noun 'sincerity' is correct here. 'That persons' should be 'those persons'. 'Country' should be plural 'countries'. 'Popularized chocolate has been widely spread and popularized for gifts' is awkward; 'popularized chocolate has been widely spread and popularized as gifts' is better.