巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more structured and clear. Start with a direct response, then explain your feelings with correct grammar and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I really like eating chocolate because it is my favourite treat. Whenever I don't eat chocolate, I feel anxious and distracted. Therefore, I often think about chocolate and want to eat it to feel better.

建議: Provide a clear frequency and organise your answer logically. Mention specific types of chocolate you like and how often you eat them, using linking words to connect your points.

範例: I usually eat chocolate once a day, especially Dairy Milk and Oreo chocolates. I also enjoy other Cadbury products like Silk and Gems because they taste delicious.

建議: Make your answer clearer by using correct grammar and sentence structure. Explain your childhood situation with specific reasons and avoid unrelated information.

範例: No, I did not often eat chocolate when I was a kid because my family had a low income. Chocolate was expensive, so we could not afford to buy it regularly.

建議: Answer directly and clearly. Explain why chocolate is popular with specific reasons and avoid filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

範例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it makes people feel happy and relaxed. Many people eat chocolate when they feel sad or anxious, as it helps improve their mood.

建議: Give a clear answer with correct grammar and organise your points logically. Mention your favourite flavours and how much you eat, using linking words for coherence.

範例: My favourite chocolate flavours are Dairy Milk, Oreo, and Fruit and Nut. I usually eat two or three chocolates in a day because I really enjoy them.

建議: Provide a clear and concise answer. Explain why chocolate is a good gift with specific reasons and avoid repetition. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

範例: Yes, chocolate is a good gift because it is affordable and easy to buy. Even if you have a small budget, you can buy a chocolate for around ₹100 and give it to someone as a thoughtful present.

× And when I don't eat chocolate, I feel so anxiety and my mind is my mine is stopped working and I always still thought about chocolate.

✓ And when I don't eat chocolate, I feel so anxious and my mind, my mind stops working and I always think about chocolate.

The word 'anxiety' is a noun, but here an adjective 'anxious' is needed to describe the feeling. Also, 'my mind is stopped working' is incorrect; the correct form is 'my mind stops working' to indicate present tense action. 'I always still thought' mixes tenses; 'I always think' is correct for present habitual action.

× I like Dairy Milk chocolate and one chocolate I always eat in a day and I like Oreo chops and dynamic Oreo silk Oreo Even I I like all dynamic product like Cadbury products I like and.

✓ I like Dairy Milk chocolate and I always eat one chocolate a day. I like Oreo Choc and Dairy Milk Silk Oreo. I like all Dairy Milk products like Cadbury products.

The sentence has plural and singular confusion. 'One chocolate I always eat in a day' should be 'I always eat one chocolate a day'. 'Oreo chops' is likely 'Oreo Choc' and 'dynamic Oreo silk Oreo' should be 'Dairy Milk Silk Oreo'. 'All dynamic product' should be 'all Dairy Milk products' to match plural form.

× No when I was kid I live in so I don't know didn't eat chocolate and nobody take bring me because we are from equal background.

✓ No, when I was a kid I lived there so I didn't eat chocolate and nobody brought me any because we are from an equal background.

'I was kid' needs an article: 'a kid'. 'I live' should be past tense 'I lived'. 'Didn't eat' is correct but 'nobody take bring me' is incorrect; it should be 'nobody brought me'. 'Equal background' needs an article 'an equal background'.

× Chocolate is very expensive so it's hard for us buy a vegetables.

✓ Chocolate is very expensive so it's hard for us to buy vegetables.

The phrase 'hard for us buy a vegetables' is incorrect. It should be 'hard for us to buy vegetables'. Also, 'a vegetables' is incorrect; 'vegetables' is plural and does not need 'a'.

× Because chocolate is the key of a happiness when someone feels sad and when someone feel anxiety, uh, they eat chocolate for relax and, uh, obviously I like chocolate.

✓ Because chocolate is the key to happiness when someone feels sad and when someone feels anxiety, they eat chocolate to relax. Obviously, I like chocolate.

'Key of a happiness' should be 'key to happiness'. 'Someone feel anxiety' should be 'someone feels anxiety' to agree with singular subject. 'Eat chocolate for relax' should be 'eat chocolate to relax'.

× Oh chocolate flavour my chocolate. My favorite chocolate is Dairy Milk, Oreo and fruit and nut.

✓ Oh, chocolate flavour. My favorite chocolates are Dairy Milk, Oreo, and Fruit and Nut.

'My favorite chocolate is' should be plural 'My favorite chocolates are' because multiple chocolates are listed. Also, 'fruit and nut' is a product name and should be capitalized as 'Fruit and Nut'.

× I like and I eat 2 chocolates Almo two or three I can eat in one day so I like candy milk.

✓ I like and I eat two chocolates. Almost two or three I can eat in one day, so I like Dairy Milk.

'2 chocolates Almo two or three' is unclear and should be 'I eat two chocolates. Almost two or three I can eat in one day'. 'Candy milk' is likely 'Dairy Milk'.

× Yeah, it's a good for a gift gift for others because when, when, when you can't go market and bring something.

✓ Yeah, it's good as a gift for others because when you can't go to the market and bring something.

'Good for a gift gift' is redundant and incorrect; 'good as a gift' is correct. 'Go market' should be 'go to the market'.

× You can gift a chocolate if you have, you don't have a lot of money, you can give the chocolate.

✓ You can gift chocolate if you don't have a lot of money; you can give chocolate.

'If you have, you don't have a lot of money' is contradictory and confusing. It should be 'if you don't have a lot of money'. Also, 'a chocolate' is incorrect; 'chocolate' is uncountable here.