巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid repeating the same idea about sweetness twice and try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I enjoy eating chocolate, especially dark chocolate, because it isn't too sweet. However, I don't eat it very often due to its sweetness.

建議: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and redundancy. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence.

範例: I don't eat chocolate very often, maybe twice a month, usually on special occasions like birthday parties. I prefer dark chocolate because it's less sweet.

建議: There are several grammar errors and unclear phrases. Try to use past tense consistently and organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words for clarity.

範例: When I was a kid, I didn't eat chocolate often. However, my father would give me dark chocolate on special occasions like birthday parties because it wasn't too sweet.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and provide specific reasons with examples, using linking words to connect your points logically.

範例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because many people enjoy it as a favourite dessert. For example, some prefer brands like Cadbury or Dairy Milk, while others like dark chocolate for its less sweet taste. Additionally, chocolate is used in various cuisines, which adds to its popularity.

建議: Your answer is a bit long and confusing with some grammar mistakes. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details, avoiding redundancy and incomplete sentences.

範例: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it's not too sweet. However, on special occasions like birthday parties, I also enjoy sweeter chocolates like Dairy Milk.

建議: Your answer is well-structured and clear with good vocabulary. To improve further, try to use more varied linking words and avoid minor errors like 'tasties' instead of 'tastes'.

範例: I believe chocolate is an excellent gift because it's widely enjoyed. For instance, some people prefer rich dark chocolate, while others like creamy milk chocolate, so it caters to different tastes. Moreover, chocolate is often linked to celebrations, making it a thoughtful and versatile present.

× Yes, I like eat chocolate, but not very often.

✓ Yes, I like eating chocolate, but not very often.

The verb 'like' is followed by the gerund form '-ing' when expressing enjoyment of an activity. Therefore, 'like eat' should be corrected to 'like eating'. This is a common structure in English to indicate preference or habit.

× I like to eat chocolate on occasions and in the twice in a month.

✓ I like to eat chocolate on occasions and twice a month.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used before 'the twice in a month'. The correct expression is 'twice a month' without 'in' or 'the'. Prepositions must be chosen carefully to match common English expressions.

× I eat chocolate like on birthday parties.

✓ I eat chocolate on birthday parties.

The word 'like' is incorrectly used here. To indicate examples, 'like' is used without 'on'. Since 'on birthday parties' is a time expression, 'on' is correct and 'like' should be removed.

× When I was kid I do not often eat chocolate,

✓ When I was a kid I did not often eat chocolate,

The noun 'kid' requires an article 'a' when singular. Also, the verb tense should be past ('did not') to match 'When I was a kid'. This corrects both article usage and tense consistency.

× I do not often eat chocolate, but when my father gave me chocolates on some occasions like on birthday parties, I eat chocolate and it give he give me a dark chocolate because it is not sweet.

✓ I did not often eat chocolate, but when my father gave me chocolates on some occasions like birthday parties, I ate chocolate and he gave me dark chocolate because it was not sweet.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. Since the context is past, verbs should be in past tense: 'did not eat', 'ate', 'gave'. Also, 'it give he give me' is ungrammatical and corrected to 'he gave me'. The article 'a' before 'dark chocolate' is unnecessary here.

× it is only a one of the favorite dessert for every people

✓ it is only one of the favourite desserts for everyone

'One' should not be preceded by 'a' in this context. 'Dessert' should be plural 'desserts' because it refers to one among many. 'Every people' is incorrect; 'everyone' is the correct singular pronoun. Also, 'favourite' is the Australian spelling.

× and some of the people like many other chocolates like calpari, Dairy Milk.

✓ and some people like many other chocolates like Calpari, Dairy Milk.

'Some of the people' is better as 'some people' for general statements. Brand names like 'Calpari' should be capitalised. This correction improves naturalness and proper noun usage.

× But some of the peoples most of the people like dark chocolate because it is not too very sweet

✓ But most people like dark chocolate because it is not very sweet

'Peoples' is incorrect here; 'people' is the plural of 'person'. 'Most of the people' is better simplified to 'most people'. Also, 'too very sweet' is redundant; 'very sweet' suffices.

× and it used in every cuisines like in.

✓ and it is used in many cuisines.

The sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. Adding 'is' forms the passive voice correctly. 'Every cuisines' is incorrect; 'many cuisines' is more natural. The phrase 'like in' is incomplete and removed.

× I remember that I do not eat chocolate very often, but sometimes I like to eat dark chocolate because it is not very sweet and I like to eat Dairy Milk and calorie chocolates on some occasions like on birthday party, because on that time I feel very comfortable to eat chocolates which are very sweet. But.

✓ I remember that I do not eat chocolate very often, but sometimes I like to eat dark chocolate because it is not very sweet. I also like to eat Dairy Milk and Calorie chocolates on some occasions like birthday parties because at those times I feel comfortable eating chocolates which are very sweet.

The original sentence is run-on and contains errors: 'calorie' should be capitalised if a brand, 'on birthday party' should be 'on birthday parties', 'on that time' should be 'at those times', and 'feel very comfortable to eat' should be 'feel comfortable eating'. The sentence is split for clarity.

× so it can suit different tasties.

✓ so it can suit different tastes.

'Tasties' is not a correct plural noun. The correct plural of 'taste' is 'tastes'. This correction improves word choice and meaning.