巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is understandable but the sentence structure is a bit confusing and some grammar mistakes affect clarity. Try to start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your allergy with simple and correct sentences. Avoid redundancy and improve coherence by using linking words.

範例: I don't like eating chocolate because I am allergic to it. Whenever I eat chocolate, I get a rash on my face, which is very uncomfortable.

建議: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and has some grammar errors. Use linking words to connect ideas and complete your sentences. Also, avoid repeating the allergy reason again; instead, focus on frequency and alternatives.

範例: I eat chocolate very rarely, maybe once in a blue moon, because of my allergy. Although I like sweet things, I prefer eating fruits as a healthier alternative.

建議: Your answer has good content but some grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing reduce clarity. Use past tense consistently and link your ideas smoothly. Avoid generalizing by saying you hate all sweet things if you only mean chocolate.

範例: When I was a kid, I used to eat chocolate often. However, after some time, I developed a rash on my face whenever I ate it. Therefore, now I avoid chocolate and prefer other sweets.

建議: Good answer with clear ideas and relevant vocabulary. To improve, add linking words and more specific reasons or examples to enrich your response.

範例: I believe chocolate is popular worldwide mainly because of effective marketing. For example, many companies combine chocolate with nuts or fruits to create various flavors that attract different tastes.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammar and vocabulary errors. Avoid filler words like 'Uh' and use correct adjectives. Also, explain your preferences clearly with linking words.

範例: My favourite chocolate flavour is the one combined with fruits and nuts because I like the mix of textures and tastes. I don't like dark chocolate because it is bitter, and I prefer sweeter options.

建議: Your answer has some repetition and grammar mistakes that affect clarity. Try to organize your ideas logically, avoid repetition, and use correct prepositions and expressions for occasions and recipients.

範例: Chocolates appeal to many people worldwide, so I think they make good gifts. On special occasions like Easter or Valentine's Day, we can give a box of chocolates to our close friends and family.

× Even though I enjoy items that melt in my mouth chocolate, I hate chocolate because I have allergy and when I ate chocolate I find some rash in my face.

✓ Even though I enjoy items that melt in my mouth like chocolate, I hate chocolate because I have an allergy and when I eat chocolate I find some rash on my face.

The phrase 'items that melt in my mouth chocolate' is awkward and unclear; adding 'like' clarifies the comparison. 'I have allergy' is missing the article 'an' before 'allergy'. The tense inconsistency between 'when I ate chocolate' and 'I find' should be corrected to present tense 'when I eat chocolate' and 'I find' to maintain consistency. Also, 'in my face' should be 'on my face' because rash appears on the surface of the skin.

× I would say once in a blue moon because I have a allergy to chocolate.

✓ I would say once in a blue moon because I have an allergy to chocolate.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before a vowel sound in 'allergy'. The correct article is 'an' before vowel sounds to ensure proper pronunciation and grammar.

× I have a sweet tooth but I prefer to eat some fruits that are sweet rather than.

✓ I have a sweet tooth but I prefer to eat some fruits that are sweet instead.

The phrase 'rather than' is incomplete and requires a comparison object. Using 'instead' completes the thought properly and fits the sentence structure.

× When I was a kid I used to eat chocolate, but after a while I find some rash in my face when I eat chocolate.

✓ When I was a kid I used to eat chocolate, but after a while I found some rash on my face when I ate chocolate.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the context is past ('when I was a kid'), verbs should be in past tense: 'find' to 'found' and 'eat' to 'ate'. Also, 'in my face' should be 'on my face'.

× Uh, combined chocolate with fruits and nuts really appeals to me particularly.

✓ Uh, chocolate combined with fruits and nuts really appeals to me, particularly.

The original sentence has awkward word order. Placing 'combined' after 'chocolate' clarifies the meaning. Adding a comma before 'particularly' improves readability.

× And I hate dark chocolate because it's bitter and I prefer save.

✓ And I hate dark chocolate because it's bitter and I prefer sweet.

The word 'save' is incorrect in this context; the intended adjective is 'sweet' to describe taste preference.

× Chocolates Let's go chocolates appeal to many people worldwide and I believe in on a special occasion such as Easter or Valentine days, we can gift a chocolate box to dearest and nearest.

✓ Chocolates appeal to many people worldwide, and I believe on special occasions such as Easter or Valentine's Day, we can gift a box of chocolates to our dearest and nearest.

The original sentence has several issues: 'Let's go chocolates' is nonsensical and removed; 'in on a special occasion' is incorrect preposition usage, corrected to 'on special occasions'; 'Valentine days' should be 'Valentine's Day'; 'a chocolate box' is better as 'a box of chocolates'; 'dearest and nearest' should be preceded by 'our' for clarity.