巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons using linking words. For example, instead of repeating 'resist', say 'I can't resist eating chocolates because they provide energy and improve my mood.'

範例: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it gives me a quick boost of energy and helps improve my mood when I'm feeling down.

建議: Be careful with sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, say 'I don't eat chocolate daily because it can cause cavities; however, I prefer to have it once a week.'

範例: I don't eat chocolate every day because it can cause cavities; however, I usually enjoy it once a week as a treat.

建議: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid awkward phrasing. Use linking words to explain your answer. For example, 'I didn't eat much chocolate as a kid because my mother often refused to give it to me, although sometimes she allowed it.'

範例: I didn't eat chocolate often when I was a child because my mother usually said no, but occasionally she would let me have some.

建議: Use precise vocabulary and avoid contradictory phrases like 'not popular but common.' Start with a clear topic sentence and support it with examples using linking words. For example, 'Chocolate is popular worldwide because it brings joy and can improve someone's mood.'

範例: Chocolate is popular around the world because it brings happiness; for instance, giving chocolate to someone having a bad day can cheer them up.

建議: Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use linking words to organize your answer. For example, 'My favorite chocolate is simple milk chocolate; however, I also enjoy varieties like Twix and Toblerone occasionally.'

範例: My favorite chocolate is milk chocolate, but I also like other types such as Twix and Toblerone from time to time.

建議: Make your answer more natural by using clear reasons and linking words. For example, 'Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift because it is a delicious treat and many people enjoy it as a dessert.'

範例: Yes, chocolate is a good gift because it is a tasty treat that most people appreciate.

× I can't resist resist myself from eating chocolates and I guess everyone does likes it as well because it is a source of energy and it also helps to keep your mood good.

✓ I can't resist myself from eating chocolates and I guess everyone likes it as well because it is a source of energy and it also helps to keep your mood good.

The phrase 'does likes' is incorrect because 'does' already carries the third person singular form, so the main verb should be in base form 'like'. Also, 'resist resist' is a repetition error; only one 'resist' is needed.

× my mother used to refuse from chocolates to given by her

✓ my mother used to refuse chocolates given by her

The verb 'refuse' does not require the preposition 'from' in this context. Also, 'to given' is incorrect; the correct form is 'given' as a past participle modifying 'chocolates'.

× she accepts my things and say yes.

✓ she accepts my requests and says yes.

The phrase 'accepts my things' is unclear and ungrammatical; 'requests' is more appropriate. Also, 'say' should be 'says' to agree with the third person singular subject 'she'.

× I think it's not popular but the common around the world because it is a source of joy and happiness.

✓ I think it's not popular but common around the world because it is a source of joy and happiness.

The use of 'the common' is incorrect here; 'common' should be used without 'the' as it is an adjective describing popularity.

× you can give them a chocolate and they will become happy.

✓ you can give them chocolate and they will become happy.

When referring to chocolate in general, the uncountable noun 'chocolate' is used without an article 'a'.

× I like the simple milk chocolate right?

✓ I like simple milk chocolate, right?

The article 'the' is unnecessary before 'simple milk chocolate' when speaking generally. Also, a comma before 'right?' improves clarity.

× sometimes I prefer to eat different type of flares like if I talk about my likings I like Twix chocolate.

✓ sometimes I prefer to eat different types of flavors; if I talk about my preferences, I like Twix chocolate.

'type' should be plural 'types' to agree with 'different'. 'flares' is a misspelling of 'flavors'. 'likings' is incorrect; 'preferences' is appropriate.

× Definitely yes, because it is a kind of treat to someone as well as it is the best dessert to have it.

✓ Definitely yes, because it is a kind of treat for someone as well as the best dessert to have.

The preposition 'to' should be 'for' when referring to giving a treat. Also, 'to have it' is redundant; 'to have' suffices.