巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答表达了观点，但语法和用词不准确，影响了表达的清晰度。建议注意时态和词汇的正确使用，例如“I'm lose weight”应为“I am trying to lose weight”，并且避免冗余。

範例: To be honest, I don't really enjoy eating chocolate because I am trying to lose weight, and chocolate has a lot of calories. Also, it is very sweet, which I don't like.

建議: 回答内容较为简单，语法和表达有误。建议使用连词使句子更连贯，如“unless my friend shares some with me, I won't eat it”。同时，注意动词时态和搭配。

範例: I eat chocolate maybe once or twice a year. I don't usually buy it, but if my friends share some with me, I will try it.

建議: 回答中时态混用，表达不够准确。建议统一使用过去时态，并简化句子结构，使表达更自然。

範例: As far as I remember, I often ate chocolate when I was a child because I liked sweet things that made me happy.

建議: 表达不清晰，存在语法错误和用词不当。建议使用更准确的表达，如“make people feel happy”代替“let him bend in over the moon”，并注意主谓一致。

範例: From my perspective, many people enjoy chocolate because it makes them feel happy and they like its taste.

建議: 表达不流畅，词汇使用不当。建议避免重复词汇，使用正确的比较级形式，如“fresher”，并且句子结构应更完整。

範例: Actually, I don't know much about chocolate flavors, but I recently tried one with fruit in it, and I think it tastes fresher than regular chocolate.

建議: 句子结构不完整，表达不准确。建议使用完整句子并注意词汇搭配，如“chocolate is not a lasting gift”。

範例: I don't think chocolate is the best gift because we don't know if the person likes it, and chocolate is not a lasting gift.

× To be honest I don't really enjoy eating chocolate because I'm lose weight so it's the color calories is so high for me and it's so sweet that's not taste good.

✓ To be honest, I don't really enjoy eating chocolate because I'm losing weight, so the calories are too high for me and it's so sweet that it doesn't taste good.

句中使用了错误的动词形式“lose”，应使用现在进行时“losing”来表达正在进行的动作；此外，“calories is”主谓不一致，应改为“calories are”。

× To be honest I don't really enjoy eating chocolate because I'm lose weight so it's the color calories is so high for me and it's so sweet that's not taste good.

✓ To be honest, I don't really enjoy eating chocolate because I'm losing weight, so the calories are too high for me and it's so sweet that it doesn't taste good.

“calories”是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“are”，而不是单数“is”。

× Maybe one or two times a year. I don't like to eat chocolate unless my friend shares me a little so I will try it but I don't ever buy them.

✓ Maybe once or twice a year. I don't like to eat chocolate unless my friend shares a little with me, so I will try it but I never buy it.

“shares me a little”中“shares”后应接宾语“a little”并用介词“with me”表示分享对象；“them”指代不明确，应改为单数“it”指代“chocolate”。

× As far as I remember, I often eat chocolate when I was a child because I like to eat some sweet things that makes me happy and when I was a child I also like the sugar.

✓ As far as I remember, I often ate chocolate when I was a child because I liked to eat sweet things that made me happy, and when I was a child I also liked sugar.

描述过去的习惯动作应使用过去时态，如“ate”、“liked”、“made”；“makes”应改为过去式“made”。

× As far as I remember, I often eat chocolate when I was a child because I like to eat some sweet things that makes me happy and when I was a child I also like the sugar.

✓ As far as I remember, I often ate chocolate when I was a child because I liked to eat sweet things that made me happy, and when I was a child I also liked sugar.

“that makes me happy”中“makes”应与先行词“things”保持一致，使用复数形式“make”，但因句子改为过去时，故用“made”。

× From my perspective, some people think eating chocolate will let him bend in over the moon and it makes me makes them happy. Umm and also they like the taste of the chocolate.

✓ From my perspective, some people think eating chocolate will make them be over the moon and it makes them happy. Also, they like the taste of chocolate.

“let him bend in over the moon”表达错误，应改为“make them be over the moon”表示使他们非常高兴；“it makes me makes them happy”重复且错误，应为“it makes them happy”。

× In fact, I don't know much about it, but I just ate one chocolate that with umm, fruit fruit in it. I think it's more fresher than the regional chocolate.

✓ In fact, I don't know much about it, but I just ate a chocolate with fruit in it. I think it's fresher than the regional chocolate.

“more fresher”是错误的比较级表达，形容词“fresh”直接加“er”即可，不需要“more”；“that with umm, fruit fruit in it”结构不正确，应改为“with fruit in it”。

× In fact, I don't know much about it, but I just ate one chocolate that with umm, fruit fruit in it. I think it's more fresher than the regional chocolate.

✓ In fact, I don't know much about it, but I just ate a chocolate with fruit in it. I think it's fresher than the regional chocolate.

“that with fruit in it”中“that”多余，应直接用“with fruit in it”表示包含水果。

× I don't think use chocolate as gift is better than others because we don't know whether if he or she like it and the chocolate also can't collect permanent.

✓ I don't think using chocolate as a gift is better than others because we don't know whether he or she likes it, and chocolate also can't be kept permanently.

“use chocolate as gift”应改为动名词短语“using chocolate as a gift”；“whether if”重复，应去掉“if”；“he or she like”主谓不一致，应为“likes”；“can't collect permanent”表达错误，应改为“can't be kept permanently”。

× I don't think use chocolate as gift is better than others because we don't know whether if he or she like it and the chocolate also can't collect permanent.

✓ I don't think using chocolate as a gift is better than others because we don't know whether he or she likes it, and chocolate also can't be kept permanently.

“as gift”缺少冠词，应为“as a gift”；“the chocolate”前冠词可省略，因泛指巧克力。