巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly and using more precise vocabulary. For example, instead of saying "it gives me freshness and happiness," you could say "it refreshes me and makes me happy."

範例: Yes, I enjoy eating chocolate because it refreshes me and brings me happiness with its sweet taste.

建議: Your answer provides good information but can be improved by structuring it better and avoiding filler words like "uh." Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about why you like Dairy Milk.

範例: I eat chocolate every day, especially Dairy Milk, which is my favorite chocolate bar because it tastes delicious and gives me energy.

建議: Your answer has some grammatical errors and lacks coherence. Use past tense consistently and link your ideas clearly. Also, avoid filler words and be more specific about your hobby.

範例: Yes, I used to eat chocolate often as a kid. Collecting and buying different chocolates from the supermarket was my hobby.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Try to express your ideas more clearly and logically using linking words. Also, avoid vague phrases like "essential in all parts of the world that interacts."

範例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and brings happiness. Moreover, there are many varieties available in markets to suit different preferences.

建議: Your answer is a bit confusing and contains filler words. Be clear and concise by stating your favourite flavour and explaining why you like it, using linking words to connect your ideas.

範例: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it has a rich taste. Among them, I especially enjoy different types of Dairy Milk dark chocolates as they make me happy.

建議: Your answer conveys your idea but can be improved by correcting grammar and avoiding filler words. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and be more specific about why chocolates make good gifts.

範例: Giving chocolates as gifts is a great way to show love, kindness, and bring happiness. I often gift chocolates to my friends and relatives because they appreciate this thoughtful gesture.

× Yes, actually I eat chocolate.

✓ Yes, actually I ate chocolate.

The question is about past habits ('when you were a kid'), so the verb should be in the past tense to match the time frame.

× So I really purchases many chocolates.

✓ So I really purchased many chocolates.

The verb 'purchases' is incorrectly used with the subject 'I'. It should be 'purchased' to agree with the first person singular in past tense.

× Chocolates are essential in all parts of the world that interacts and especially attracts every people and gives a lot of happiness and it is very tasty to eat and there are many types of chocolates that is available in the markets.

✓ Chocolate is essential in all parts of the world that interact and especially attract every person and give a lot of happiness. It is very tasty to eat and there are many types of chocolate available in the markets.

'Chocolates' as a plural noun is better replaced by 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun here. 'Interacts' and 'attracts' should be plural to agree with 'all parts'. 'Every people' is incorrect; 'every person' is correct. 'Types of chocolates that is' should be 'types of chocolate that are' or 'types of chocolate available'.

× Greenville chocolates as a gift to some others, UH is the method of showing love, happiness and the kindness.

✓ Giving Greenville chocolates as a gift to others is a way of showing love, happiness, and kindness.

The original sentence lacks a proper verb and has awkward phrasing. 'Giving' is the correct gerund form to start the sentence. 'Some others' is better as 'others'. 'The method' is better as 'a way' in this context.