巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by avoiding filler words and redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: Yes, I really like chocolate because I love sweets. Moreover, it makes me feel happier and gives me more energy.

建議: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to explain your habits clearly and provide specific reasons.

範例: I eat chocolate almost every day, although I know it's not healthy. However, I find it gives me energy, especially when I'm tired.

建議: Make your answer complete and avoid filler words. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide clear, specific information.

範例: Yes, I have been a chocolate fan since childhood. I remember eating chocolate almost every day when I was a kid.

建議: Provide more detailed and coherent reasons using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear expressions.

範例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and provides energy. Additionally, it comes in many flavors, which makes it enjoyable for everyone.

建議: Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Replace 'sore' with the correct adjective and use linking words to compare your preferences.

範例: My favorite flavor of chocolate is milky because it is very sweet, which I enjoy. I also like white chocolate, but my least favorite is dark chocolate because it tastes bitter.

建議: Make your answer more formal and structured. Use linking words to explain your opinion clearly and avoid casual expressions.

範例: I think chocolate makes a great gift because I always appreciate receiving it, especially when it comes in beautiful packaging. Therefore, it is a good choice for people who love chocolate.

× Yes, I really do like it's chocolate because it's, I really love sweets and uh, it helps me to be more happier and gives me more energy.

✓ Yes, I really do like chocolate because I really love sweets, and it helps me to be happier and gives me more energy.

The pronoun 'it's' is incorrectly used instead of 'chocolate'. Also, 'more happier' is incorrect because 'happier' is already a comparative form; 'more' is unnecessary. The sentence should use 'chocolate' directly and 'happier' without 'more'.

× Unfortunately I eat really really many chocolate.

✓ Unfortunately, I eat a lot of chocolate.

The phrase 'many chocolate' is incorrect because 'chocolate' is an uncountable noun here. Instead, use 'a lot of' to quantify uncountable nouns. Also, 'really really' is informal and redundant; one 'really' or 'a lot of' suffices.

× I guess I will try not to eat but it gives energy and when I'm tired I always eat sweet.

✓ I guess I will try not to eat it, but it gives energy, and when I'm tired, I always eat sweets.

The sentence lacks the object 'it' after 'not to eat'. Also, 'eat sweet' is incorrect; 'sweets' (plural noun) should be used. Commas are added for clarity.

× Yes, I'm chocolate fan from childhood so I as I remember I ate chocolate almost every day when I was a child and uh.

✓ Yes, I'm a chocolate fan from childhood, so as I remember, I ate chocolate almost every day when I was a child.

The article 'a' is missing before 'chocolate fan'. The phrase 'I as I remember' is incorrect; it should be 'as I remember'. Commas improve sentence clarity.

× First of all, it's tasty. Second of all, it gives energy. Any taste and fun?

✓ First of all, it's tasty. Second of all, it gives energy. It has many tastes and is fun.

The phrase 'Any taste and fun?' is incomplete and unclear. It should be rephrased to a complete sentence to express the idea clearly.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is Milky. It's so sweet and I love sweet flavor. Also I like white chocolate and at least favorite is dark chocolate because it's so sore.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is milky. It's so sweet, and I love sweet flavors. Also, I like white chocolate, and my least favorite is dark chocolate because it's so bitter.

'Milky' should be lowercase unless a brand name. 'Sweet flavor' should be plural 'sweet flavors' for generalization. 'At least favorite' is incorrect; it should be 'my least favorite'. 'Sore' is incorrect to describe taste; 'bitter' is appropriate.

× Why not? I always love when someone gives me chocolate as a gift, especially when it's in beautiful package. So I think it's really good when someone loves chocolate.

✓ Why not? I always love it when someone gives me chocolate as a gift, especially when it's in a beautiful package. So I think it's really good when someone loves chocolate.

The phrase 'love when' needs the pronoun 'it' after 'love'. 'In beautiful package' is missing the article 'a' before 'beautiful package'.