巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ должен быть более естественным и связным. Избегайте непонятных фраз и старайтесь использовать простые, но точные выражения. Например, опишите, почему вам нравится молочный шоколад, используя связные предложения.

範例: Yes, I really like eating chocolate, especially milk chocolate. I enjoy its rich, smooth, and creamy texture. Eating chocolate makes me feel happy and relaxed.

建議: Ответ должен быть более ясным и грамматически правильным. Используйте связные предложения и объясните свои причины более подробно и понятно.

範例: I don't eat chocolate very often because it has a lot of calories, and I try to stay healthy. Also, I don't like the taste of chocolate very much.

建議: Ответ должен быть более понятным и логичным. Используйте правильные времена и объясните свои привычки в детстве более подробно.

範例: When I was a kid, I didn't eat much chocolate because I didn't like the taste. However, I used to eat dark chocolate every Christmas.

建議: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и понятным. Объясните причины популярности шоколада, используя простые и логичные предложения.

範例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is often associated with love and special occasions. For example, people give chocolate to their partners on Valentine's Day to show their affection.

建議: Ответ должен быть более чётким и связным. Опишите свой любимый вкус шоколада и почему он вам нравится, используя простые предложения.

範例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is milk chocolate because it is smooth and creamy. Sometimes, I also enjoy dark chocolate as it has a rich taste.

建議: Ответ должен быть более понятным и логичным. Объясните своё мнение о шоколаде как подарке, используя правильные слова и структуру.

範例: I think chocolate is a good gift because it is a popular tradition, especially on Valentine's Day. However, some people may not like it or have allergies, so it's important to know the person's preferences.

× I love all kids of milk chocolate.

✓ I love all kinds of milk chocolate.

The word 'kids' is incorrect here; the correct plural form is 'kinds' when referring to types or varieties of something.

× Say a simple plea three people to eat.

✓ I simply plead with three people to eat.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. It seems the student intended to say they encourage or invite three people to eat, so the sentence was restructured for clarity.

× I love is a rich, smooth and creamy texture of chocolates.

✓ I love the rich, smooth, and creamy texture of chocolates.

The sentence had incorrect word order and missing articles. 'Is' is unnecessary, and 'the' is needed before the adjectives describing 'texture'.

× Not a mentation.

✓ Not a mention.

The phrase 'Not a mentation' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'Not a mention,' meaning 'no need to mention' or 'it's obvious.'

× I simply feel happier after eating chocolates and white flowers.

✓ I simply feel happier after eating chocolates and white flowers.

This sentence is grammatically correct but semantically odd because 'white flowers' are not typically eaten. However, no grammar correction is needed.

× I don't like to eat chocolate because chocolate is really in calories.

✓ I don't like to eat chocolate because chocolate is really high in calories.

The preposition 'in' is incomplete here; the phrase should be 'high in calories' to express the meaning correctly.

× And I really hate the test.

✓ And I really hate the taste.

The word 'test' is a typo or mishearing; the correct word is 'taste' when referring to flavor.

× I can't understand chocolate.

✓ I can't stand chocolate.

The phrase 'can't understand chocolate' is incorrect in this context; the student likely meant 'can't stand chocolate,' meaning they dislike it strongly.

× I hate sis test so I still done it.

✓ I hate its taste so I still don't eat it.

The phrase 'sis test' is incorrect; it should be 'its taste.' Also, 'still done it' is incorrect; 'still don't eat it' fits the intended meaning.

× It almost runs on gear.

✓ It almost runs out of gear.

The phrase is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo. Possibly intended to say 'It almost runs out of gear' or 'It almost runs out of here.' Without context, correction is speculative.

× But every Christmas I will eat chocolate.

✓ But every Christmas I eat chocolate.

For habitual actions, the simple present tense is preferred over 'will.' 'I eat chocolate every Christmas' is correct.

× I only ate dark chocolate.

✓ I only ate dark chocolate.

This sentence is correct as it refers to a past action.

× Of course, to collect it always associated with sporting love.

✓ Of course, chocolate is always associated with expressing love.

The original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect prepositions and word choices. 'To collect it' and 'sporting love' are incorrect; the correction clarifies the intended meaning.

× When it comes to Valentine's Day card, please will give Chocolate Tuesday partners to express their love answer.

✓ When it comes to Valentine's Day, people give chocolate to their partners to express their love.

The original sentence has multiple errors in pronouns and word choice. 'Please will give Chocolate Tuesday partners' is incorrect; corrected to 'people give chocolate to their partners.'

× Chocolate comes in a reality of ships and flowers.

✓ Chocolate comes in a variety of shapes and forms.

The phrase 'reality of ships and flowers' is incorrect; likely intended 'variety of shapes and forms.'

× And the soul.

✓ And the soul.

This fragment is incomplete and unclear; it should be connected to the previous sentence or clarified.

× Make chocolate hands down say uh so smooth and cream, which is such a 28.

✓ Milk chocolate is hands down so smooth and creamy, which is such a delight.

The original sentence contains many errors: 'Make' should be 'Milk,' 'cream' should be 'creamy,' and '28' is likely a mishearing of 'delight.'

× Occasionally I do consume some validation of lovers touches means they're quite refreshing to have, but not is good is milk chocolate.

✓ Occasionally I consume some variations of dark chocolate; they are quite refreshing to have, but nothing is as good as milk chocolate.

The original sentence is confusing and contains incorrect quantifiers and word choices. 'Validation of lovers touches' is incorrect; corrected to 'variations of dark chocolate.'

× I don't know how about his story, but it is a tradition that people give chocolate to their significant altered on Valentine's Day.

✓ I don't know about this story, but it is a tradition that people give chocolate to their significant others on Valentine's Day.

'How about his story' is incorrect; corrected to 'about this story.' 'Significant altered' is a mishearing of 'significant others.'

× Also then said I would say chocolate mind not to be a good gift.

✓ Also, I would say chocolate might not be a good gift.

The phrase 'then said I would say' is incorrect; corrected to 'I would say.' 'Mind not to be' is incorrect; corrected to 'might not be.'

× Choice A because many people have the D3 and then.

✓ Because many people have diabetes and then...

'D3' is likely a mishearing of 'diabetes.' The sentence is incomplete but corrected for clarity.