巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases, which affect clarity. Try to use simple and correct sentences, and avoid redundancy. For example, say "No, I don't like eating chocolate because it contains a lot of sugar, which is unhealthy. Since I am watching my diet, I avoid chocolates."

範例: No, I don't like eating chocolate because it contains a lot of sugar, which is unhealthy. Since I am watching my diet, I avoid chocolates.

建議: Your answer is understandable but can be more natural and coherent. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct sentence structures. For example, "I don't eat chocolate often. However, I enjoy it on special occasions like my relatives' or friends' birthdays."

範例: I don't eat chocolate often. However, I enjoy it on special occasions like my relatives' or friends' birthdays.

建議: Your answer has some grammar and coherence issues. Try to combine sentences smoothly and clarify ideas. For example, "Yes, I used to eat chocolate frequently as a child. Once, my dentist told me I had cavities because of it, which caused me pain."

範例: Yes, I used to eat chocolate frequently as a child. Once, my dentist told me I had cavities because of it, which caused me pain.

建議: Your answer is unclear and has many grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words. For example, "I think chocolate is popular worldwide because many children like sweets due to their taste. This could be the main reason for its popularity."

範例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because many children like sweets due to their taste. This could be the main reason for its popularity.

建議: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases. Try to give a direct answer with simple sentences. For example, "Chocolate is not my favorite, so I don't know much about flavors. But I usually prefer milk chocolate."

範例: Chocolate is not my favorite, so I don't know much about flavors. But I usually prefer milk chocolate.

建議: Your answer has grammar and clarity issues. Try to express your opinion clearly and use linking words. For example, "Yes, I think chocolates make good gifts because many people love them. Giving chocolates can be rewarding if the recipient enjoys sweets."

範例: Yes, I think chocolates make good gifts because many people love them. Giving chocolates can be rewarding if the recipient enjoys sweets.

× No, I don't like eating chocolate is as they continue a lot of sugars.

✓ No, I don't like eating chocolate because it contains a lot of sugar.

The pronoun 'they' is incorrectly used to refer to 'chocolate', which is singular. Also, 'continue' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'contains'. Use 'it' for singular nouns and the correct verb form.

× And also our unhealthy died so I don't want to follow such unhealthy practices.

✓ And also, it is unhealthy, so I don't want to follow such unhealthy practices.

The phrase 'our unhealthy died' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'it is unhealthy' to describe chocolate. The sentence needs a proper subject and verb to be grammatically correct.

× As I am getting my dividi, I don't prefer eating chocolates.

✓ As I am gaining weight, I don't prefer eating chocolates.

The phrase 'getting my dividi' is unclear and likely a mispronunciation or incorrect phrase. It should be 'gaining weight' to make sense in context.

× No, I don't eat chocolate much.

✓ No, I don't eat much chocolate.

The quantifier 'much' should be placed before the noun 'chocolate' to be grammatically correct.

× Sometimes it depends on occasion or like if I have my relatives birthday on my friend's birthday.

✓ Sometimes it depends on the occasion, like if it is my relative's or my friend's birthday.

The sentence lacks articles and proper possessive forms. 'Relatives birthday' should be 'relative's birthday', and 'on my friend's birthday' needs to be connected properly.

× I love eating chocolates in such occasions only.

✓ I love eating chocolates only on such occasions.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; 'on' is the correct preposition to use with 'occasions'. Also, the placement of 'only' is better before 'on such occasions'.

× And one once I had the appointment with my dentist.

✓ And once I had an appointment with my dentist.

The phrase 'one once' is redundant; use 'once'. Also, 'the appointment' should be 'an appointment' as it is the first mention.

× Who said I have some cavities in my teeth and was giving some trouble?

✓ He said I had some cavities in my teeth that were causing some trouble.

The sentence is a fragment starting with 'Who'. It should be connected to the previous sentence and use past tense consistently.

× I think chocolates are more demanded in the world because of it.

✓ I think chocolates are more in demand in the world because of it.

The phrase 'more demanded' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'more in demand'. Also, 'it' is vague; contextually, it refers to taste.

× As every child prefer. Eating some sweets.

✓ As every child prefers eating sweets.

The verb 'prefer' should be in third person singular 'prefers' to agree with 'every child'. Also, the sentence should be combined properly.

× Because of their test.

✓ Because of their taste.

The word 'test' is a typo or incorrect word; it should be 'taste'.

× So that may be the reason why it is more popular.

✓ So that may be the reason why it is more popular.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× Eating chocolate is not a top of my T.

✓ Eating chocolate is not a top priority for me.

The phrase 'top of my T' is unclear and incorrect. The correct expression is 'top priority for me'.

× So I don't really have a good ideas on the flavors of chocolate.

✓ So I don't really have good ideas about the flavors of chocolate.

'A good ideas' is incorrect; 'ideas' is plural and should not have 'a'. Also, 'on' should be 'about' when talking about ideas.

× I usually prefer like milk chocolates much so my breasts activities or milk chocolate.

✓ I usually prefer milk chocolates, especially milk chocolate.

The phrase 'so my breasts activities' is unclear and incorrect. It should be removed. Also, 'prefer like' is incorrect; just 'prefer' is sufficient.

× Yes, I think chocolates are. As a gift will be motivated to gift for others because of their days.

✓ Yes, I think chocolates as a gift can motivate people to give gifts to others on special days.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs to be restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Everybody loves to eat chocolates and gifting chocolate become more rewarding if the persons love eating them.

✓ Everybody loves to eat chocolates, and gifting chocolate becomes more rewarding if the person loves eating it.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'gifting chocolate become' should be 'becomes'. Also, 'persons' should be 'person' and pronoun 'them' should be 'it' referring to chocolate.