巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct.

範例: I don't like eating chocolate because it contains a lot of fat and sugar. In my area, the chocolate available is often of low quality, which makes it less enjoyable for me.

建議: Your answer is somewhat understandable but lacks clarity and structure. Try to answer directly, then add a specific example with linking words to make your response coherent.

範例: I don't eat chocolate very often. In fact, the last time I ate some was last year when a friend offered me some at the community centre, and I couldn't refuse.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons clearly.

範例: I didn't eat chocolate often as a child because I was trying to avoid too much fat and sugar for health reasons. Also, the chocolate available in my country was usually of poor quality, so I didn't enjoy it.

建議: Your answer is unclear and difficult to understand. Try to express your ideas clearly by stating a reason and explaining it with examples or feelings, using linking words.

範例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it is often given as a gift to show love and care. People enjoy receiving chocolate as a symbol of affection.

建議: Your answer has a good personal touch but is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Try to clearly state your favourite flavour and explain why, using linking words and correct sentence structure.

範例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is vanilla because it reminds me of my grandmother. Whenever I eat vanilla chocolate, it brings back happy memories with her.

建議: Your answer is relevant but contains some unclear phrases and grammar mistakes. Try to organise your ideas clearly with linking words and correct grammar.

範例: Yes, I think giving chocolate as a gift is a good way to show appreciation and love, especially on special occasions like Valentine's Day or Christmas. It helps express your feelings to family or loved ones.

× Unlike its chocolate becauses they chocolate.

✓ Unlike its chocolate because it contains fat.

The original sentence misuses pronouns 'its' and 'they' which causes confusion. 'Its' should refer to chocolate as a singular noun, and 'they' is incorrect here. The sentence also contains a misspelling 'becauses'. Correct pronoun use and spelling improve clarity.

× Is this a lot of fat?

✓ Does it have a lot of fat?

The original sentence uses 'Is this a lot of fat?' which is incorrect because 'fat' is uncountable and requires 'does it have' to ask about quantity. Using 'does it have' is the correct way to inquire about the amount of fat.

× And also, yeah, in my area, the chocolate.

✓ Also, in my area, the chocolate is very rich.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb, making it unclear. Adding a verb and completing the thought improves sentence structure and clarity.

× The percentage is very high and very beaten.

✓ The percentage of cocoa is very high and very bitter.

The word 'beaten' is incorrectly used; likely the intended word is 'bitter' to describe taste. Also, 'percentage' needs clarification, so specifying 'percentage of cocoa' makes the sentence clearer.

× I don't like it's a chocolate.

✓ I don't like chocolate.

The phrase 'it's a chocolate' is incorrect; 'chocolate' is an uncountable noun here and does not need 'a'. Removing 'it's a' corrects the sentence.

× Not so often and I still remember like last time I eat chocolate it was last year and which actually is from my friend.

✓ Not so often, and I still remember the last time I ate chocolate; it was last year and it was actually from my friend.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match the past time reference. Also, sentence structure is improved by adding punctuation and clarifying the sentence.

× My friends vending at the CC offered me the chocolate and I didn't I didn't know how to say no so I just. Handed.

✓ My friend vending at the CC offered me the chocolate, and I didn't know how to say no, so I just accepted it.

'Friends' should be singular 'friend' to match the context. The sentence is fragmented and unclear; completing the thought with 'accepted it' clarifies the meaning.

× Not really, in my opinion. The chocolate contest a lot of fat and sugar which I'm trying to avoid based on the health healthy reason.

✓ Not really, in my opinion. Chocolate contains a lot of fat and sugar, which I'm trying to avoid for health reasons.

'Contest' is a misspelling of 'contains'. 'Based on the health healthy reason' is incorrect; 'for health reasons' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× I also in my area, in my country, the chocolate available is very beaten.

✓ Also, in my area, in my country, the available chocolate is very bitter.

'Beaten' is incorrectly used; the intended adjective is likely 'bitter' to describe taste. Sentence structure is improved by repositioning words.

× Uh, I think chocolates popular around the world is because these are.

✓ Uh, I think chocolate is popular around the world because of several reasons.

'Chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' as a general noun. The sentence is incomplete and unclear; completing it improves clarity.

× I speak about you with behind the chocolate issues love at a care about the someone you receive the chocolate from.

✓ I think it's because chocolate is associated with love and care from the person you receive it from.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Rewriting it with proper sentence structure and vocabulary clarifies the intended meaning.

× I'm at my favorite flavor when it comes to chocolate is vanilla chocolate.

✓ My favorite flavor when it comes to chocolate is vanilla chocolate.

'I'm at' is incorrect here; the sentence should start with 'My favorite flavor' to be grammatically correct.

× It's because vanilla flavor is my first flavor in my heart in my whole life and wishes.

✓ It's because vanilla flavor has been my favourite throughout my life.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. Simplifying and correcting the phrase improves clarity and grammar.

× Are you safe from my grandmother? Whenever I Italy with Bonilla chocolate, it's reminding me my grandmother.

✓ I am safe from my grandmother? Whenever I eat vanilla chocolate, it reminds me of my grandmother.

The original sentence is confusing and contains errors like 'Italy' instead of 'eat' and 'Bonilla' instead of 'vanilla'. Correcting these and restructuring the sentence improves meaning.

× Yeah, I think it's a good way to show you appreciation and also love cancel about someone especially in the special days like Valentine's Day or Christmas.

✓ Yeah, I think it's a good way to show your appreciation and love for someone, especially on special days like Valentine's Day or Christmas.

'You appreciation' should be 'your appreciation'. 'Love cancel about someone' is incorrect; 'love for someone' is correct. 'In the special days' should be 'on special days'.

× Give it to family or lovers is a good way to express your. Emotion.

✓ Giving it to family or loved ones is a good way to express your emotions.

The original sentence is fragmented and incomplete. Changing 'Give' to 'Giving' and completing the sentence improves grammar and clarity.