巧克力— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时语法和用词不够准确，energy是不可数名词，不能用复数形式。建议用更自然的表达方式，并且避免重复。

範例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it gives me energy. I usually eat some before working out to help boost my stamina.

建議: 回答内容重复且表达不清晰，语法错误较多。建议简洁明了地回答问题，并用连接词使句子连贯。

範例: I don't eat chocolate very often, but I usually have some before working out because it gives me energy. Sometimes, if there are no other snacks, I eat half a chocolate bar.

建議: 时态使用错误，句子结构混乱，表达不清楚。建议注意时态一致性，简洁表达，并避免语法错误。

範例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid, but my parents didn't want me to eat too many sweets because they are bad for my teeth. Sometimes, I bought chocolate to eat before going to sleep.

建議: 表达不清晰，语法错误多，句子不连贯。建议用简单句表达观点，注意语法和词汇的准确性。

範例: Chocolate is a popular snack worldwide because many people enjoy its taste. In my opinion, Italian chocolate is especially famous. When I was 12, I traveled abroad and bought a lot of chocolate to bring back to China.

建議: 表达不自然，语法和词汇错误较多。建议用简单清晰的句子表达喜好，并说明原因。

範例: I prefer white chocolate because dark chocolate has a bitter taste. White chocolate contains milk, which gives it a nice smell and a milder sweetness.

建議: 句子结构不完整，表达不连贯。建议用连贯的句子表达观点，并提供具体理由。

範例: Yes, chocolate is a good gift choice because many brands package it in beautiful boxes. Also, chocolate can be stored for one or two years. If you give chocolate to someone from France, they will remember you.

× Yes, I like to eat a chocolate because I think the chocolate can make me more energies.

✓ Yes, I like to eat chocolate because I think chocolate can give me more energy.

这里“a chocolate”错误地使用了单数形式，巧克力通常不可数，且“energies”应为不可数名词“energy”。应去掉冠词并使用不可数形式。

× Before I workout, I will take some chocolate.

✓ Before I work out, I will take some chocolate.

“workout”作为名词使用时正确，但这里应使用动词短语“work out”，动词和副词分开。

× Actually, I don't like this sweet things.

✓ Actually, I don't like these sweet things.

“this”用于单数名词，“things”是复数，需用复数指示代词“these”。

× But when I come before the workout I will take some chocolate becauses the chocolate can make me more energy.

✓ But when I come before the workout, I will take some chocolate because chocolate can give me more energy.

“come before the workout”表达不自然，建议保留原意但调整句子结构；“becauses”拼写错误，应为“because”；“make me more energy”应改为“give me more energy”。

× Sometimes if we don't have some snacks but only half the chocolate I will take some.

✓ Sometimes if we don't have any snacks but only half the chocolate, I will take some.

“some snacks”在否定句中应使用“any”；“half the chocolate”前应加逗号分隔。

× Yes, I often eat a chocolate when I was a kid because my parents don't want me to eat more sweet things because it's bad to teeth.

✓ Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because my parents didn't want me to eat too many sweet things because it's bad for my teeth.

描述过去习惯应使用过去时“ate”；“a chocolate”应去掉冠词；“don't want”应改为过去时“didn't want”；“more sweet things”应改为“too many sweet things”；“bad to teeth”应为“bad for my teeth”。

× But sometimes I've you buy some chocolate to take it before I sleep.

✓ But sometimes I've bought some chocolate to eat before I sleep.

“I've you buy”结构错误，应为“I've bought”；“take it before I sleep”表达不自然，改为“eat before I sleep”。

× Chocolate is a famous snacks in the world.

✓ Chocolate is a famous snack in the world.

“snacks”复数与冠词“a”不匹配，应改为单数“snack”。

× And in my opinions, I think the Itali chocolate is more famous.

✓ And in my opinion, I think Italian chocolate is more famous.

“opinions”应为单数“opinion”；“Itali”拼写错误，应为“Italian”；“the Italian chocolate”中“the”可省略。

× In my 12 years old I'm going to a board and buy lots of chocolate to back to China.

✓ When I was 12 years old, I went abroad and bought lots of chocolate to take back to China.

“In my 12 years old”表达错误，应为“When I was 12 years old”；“I'm going to a board”应为过去时“I went abroad”；“buy”应为过去时“bought”；“to back to China”应为“to take back to China”。

× I prefer like the white chocolate becaused the black chocolate is more. Bad feeling.

✓ I prefer white chocolate because dark chocolate has a worse taste.

“prefer like”重复表达，应只用“prefer”；“becaused”拼写错误，应为“because”；“black chocolate is more. Bad feeling”表达不清，应改为“dark chocolate has a worse taste”。

× Then I will take some white chocolate because it includes the milk is smells good and a less than sweet sweet.

✓ Then I will take some white chocolate because it contains milk, smells good, and is less sweet.

“includes the milk is smells good”结构混乱，应改为“contains milk, smells good”；“a less than sweet sweet”表达错误，应为“is less sweet”。

× Yes, chocolate is a good choice to become a gift.

✓ Yes, chocolate is a good choice as a gift.

“to become a gift”表达不自然，应改为“as a gift”。

× Because some brand after chocolate has the beautiful gift box and the chocolate can keep one or two years so.

✓ Because some brands of chocolate have beautiful gift boxes and the chocolate can be kept for one or two years.

“brand after chocolate”表达错误，应为“brands of chocolate”；“has”应为复数“have”；“keep one or two years”应为“be kept for one or two years”；“so”多余。

× If the France take the chocolate sweet, they will remember you.

✓ If the French take the chocolate as a gift, they will remember you.

“the France”应为“the French”；“chocolate sweet”表达错误，应为“chocolate as a gift”。