记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá đầy đủ nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng từ vựng phong phú hơn và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và ngắn gọn hơn trong 3-4 câu.

範例: No, I'm not very good at memorizing because I have a short-term memory. However, I make an effort to remember important details like my phone number and personal information. To help with this, I sometimes use apps that improve memory retention.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và nên dùng các liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, nên mở rộng thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn để câu trả lời sinh động.

範例: Yes, I once forgot my personal ID when I was in secondary school. Because of that, I wasn't allowed to enter the exam room on time, which made me very anxious. Since then, I always double-check my belongings before leaving.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng nên chia câu thành các phần rõ ràng hơn và sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc. Ngoài ra, bạn có thể thêm ví dụ cụ thể để làm câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

範例: In daily life, it's important for me to remember my phone number and personal details, as well as those of my parents. This helps me quickly confirm information or handle emergencies, which makes me feel secure and comfortable.

建議: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ cho chính xác hơn. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc. Ngoài ra, nên dùng từ vựng phù hợp và câu trả lời ngắn gọn hơn.

範例: First, I immediately write down important information in my phone or notebook. Then, I review it regularly to help me remember. When I need the information, I simply check my notes.

× I have a short term memory which makes me quite challenging to remember something in a long time.

✓ I have short-term memory which makes it quite challenging for me to remember things for a long time.

The phrase 'short term memory' should be hyphenated as 'short-term memory' because it is a compound adjective. Also, 'makes me quite challenging' is incorrect; it should be 'makes it quite challenging for me' to correctly express the difficulty experienced by the speaker. 'Something' should be pluralized to 'things' to refer generally to multiple items, and 'in a long time' should be 'for a long time' to indicate duration.

× I once forgot my personal identification to an important thing when I was a secondary school student.

✓ I once forgot my personal identification for an important event when I was a secondary school student.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used here; 'forgot my personal identification for' is the correct phrase when referring to forgetting an item needed for an event. Also, 'an important thing' is vague and unnatural; 'an important event' or 'an important occasion' is more appropriate.

× At the time I wasn't allowed to enter the room on time so it made me very anxious.

✓ At the time, I wasn't allowed to enter the room on time, so it made me very anxious.

This sentence is mostly correct but needs commas for clarity and correct sentence structure. Adding commas after 'At the time' and before 'so' improves readability and separates clauses properly.

× I promise with myself I will double check my belongings before.

✓ I promised myself I would double-check my belongings beforehand.

The phrase 'promise with myself' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'promised myself.' Also, 'will double check' should be in past tense 'would double-check' to maintain consistency with the past context. 'Before' should be replaced with 'beforehand' for natural usage.

× It is very crucial to remember my phone number and personal detail, as well as those of my parents, so I try to remember them, especially in the situation I need to confirm some information quickly or handle emergencies, I feel very secure and comfortable.

✓ It is very crucial to remember my phone number and personal details, as well as those of my parents, so I try to remember them, especially in situations where I need to confirm some information quickly or handle emergencies. I feel very secure and comfortable.

'Personal detail' should be pluralized to 'personal details' because it refers to multiple pieces of information. 'In the situation' should be 'in situations' to generalize the context. The original sentence is a run-on; splitting into two sentences improves clarity.

× First, actually, I will chalk down them immediately into my phone or notebook, and next time I try to recall those information by watching repeatedly.

✓ First, actually, I will write them down immediately in my phone or notebook, and next time I try to recall that information by reviewing it repeatedly.

'Chalk down them' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'write them down.' 'Those information' is incorrect because 'information' is uncountable and should be preceded by 'that' instead of 'those.' 'Watching repeatedly' is unnatural; 'reviewing it repeatedly' is more appropriate.

× Yes, and at the time when I need it, I always open them and check.

✓ Yes, and when I need it, I always open it and check.

The pronoun 'them' is incorrect because it refers to plural, but 'it' should be used to refer to singular 'information' or 'note.' Also, 'at the time when' is wordy; 'when' suffices.