记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid repetition and redundancy in your answers. Also, aim to use more precise vocabulary and structure your response clearly with a topic sentence followed by supporting details. For example, instead of repeating 'I'm not good at memorizing things,' you could say, 'I struggle with memorising, particularly subjects like maths, so I use various methods to keep track of my tasks.'

範例: I'm not very good at memorising, especially when it comes to subjects like maths. Therefore, I rely on different methods, such as making lists or using apps, to ensure I don't forget important tasks.

建議: Focus on making your answer more concise and coherent by using linking words and avoiding unnecessary phrases. Also, try to provide a clear topic sentence followed by a specific example. For instance, start with 'Yes, I have forgotten important things before,' then give your example.

範例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For example, once I forgot my keys and had to return home to get them, which was quite frustrating.

建議: Try to improve grammatical accuracy and sentence clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, you could say, 'I need to remember many things daily because, as the only son, I help my mother by managing her business and buying groceries.'

範例: I need to remember many things every day because, as the only son, I assist my mother by managing her business and taking care of grocery shopping.

建議: Work on sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent. For example, say, 'I usually record important tasks in a list because I find it difficult to rely solely on my memory.'

範例: I usually write down important tasks in a list because I find it hard to remember everything just by using my memory.

× No, I'm definitely not good at memorizing things.

✓ No, I'm definitely not good at memorising things.

The verb 'memorising' should use the British English spelling with 's' instead of 'z' to be consistent with the rest of the transcript and British English conventions.

× That's why I always have to find different ways to record out my things so that the things that I have to do won't be missed out by myself.

✓ That's why I always have to find different ways to record my things so that the things I have to do won't be missed by me.

The phrase 'record out my things' is incorrect; 'record my things' is correct. Also, 'missed out by myself' is incorrect; it should be 'missed by me' because 'miss out' is not used in passive form here and 'by myself' implies alone rather than the agent of missing.

× And I'm not good at memorizing things, especially maths and.

✓ And I'm not good at memorising things, especially maths.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and' without completing the thought, which is a sentence structure error. Removing 'and' completes the sentence properly.

× Of course, and it's very normal for a person who is not good at memorizing things.

✓ Of course, it's very normal for a person who is not good at memorising things.

Starting a sentence with 'and' here is unnecessary and incorrect; removing 'and' improves sentence flow and correctness.

× And I can give out an example is that I forgot to bring my key and I have to go back home by myself to take it again, which is very annoying and I'm so clumsy.

✓ I can give an example: I forgot to bring my key and had to go back home by myself to get it again, which was very annoying and showed that I'm clumsy.

The original sentence has awkward structure and redundancy. 'Give out an example is that' is incorrect; it should be 'give an example:'. Also, tense consistency is needed ('had to' instead of 'have to'), and 'take it again' is better as 'get it again'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.

× I need to remember lots of things in my daily life because I'm the only son of my family and I have to take care of my mom's business as well as the groceries that she have to buy, so that I'm actually an assistant of my mom.

✓ I need to remember lots of things in my daily life because I'm the only son in my family and I have to take care of my mom's business as well as the groceries that she has to buy, so I'm actually an assistant to my mom.

The phrase 'she have to buy' is incorrect; it should be 'she has to buy' to agree with the singular subject 'she'. Also, 'only son of my family' is better as 'only son in my family'. 'Assistant of my mom' is better expressed as 'assistant to my mom'.

× I usually remember important things with at least that I can record them.

✓ I usually remember important things by at least recording them.

The phrase 'with at least that I can record them' is awkward and incorrect. Using 'by at least recording them' correctly expresses the method of remembering.

× What I have to do so that I won't merely remember things with my brain.

✓ I record what I have to do so that I won't merely remember things with my brain.

The original sentence is a fragment and lacks a main verb. Adding 'I record' at the beginning completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× Instead I will try to memorize it with the list as well.

✓ Instead, I will try to memorise it with a list as well.

A comma is needed after 'Instead' to separate the introductory adverb. Also, 'the list' is vague; 'a list' is more appropriate here.