记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“memory things”应为“at memorising things”，“on my phones”应为“on my phone”。建议注意语法准确性和用词自然，同时避免冗余表达。

範例: I'm not very good at memorising things, so I usually rely on notes and reminders to keep track of important tasks. For example, I often set alarms on my phone to avoid forgetting appointments or deadlines. This method helps me a lot because my memory is quite poor when it comes to details.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，如“it's really terrible for me after that”表达不自然，且最后一句话不完整且重复。建议提高句子完整性和逻辑连贯性，避免重复。

範例: Yes, I once forgot my best friend's birthday, which made me feel terrible. I apologized sincerely and tried to make it up to them. Since then, I have been very careful to mark important dates on my calendar and set reminders.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和重复用词，如“you know”多次出现，且句子结构不够清晰。建议简化表达，注意主谓一致，并使用连接词使句子更流畅。

範例: I need to remember social and family commitments because they are important. For example, birthdays and anniversaries help me maintain strong relationships with my loved ones, so I always make sure to check in with them.

建議: 回答中“technology is dispensable”表达错误，应为“indispensable”。另外，句子结构重复，且“help me to remind me”冗余。建议注意词汇准确性和句子简洁性。

範例: Technology is indispensable in my life. I rely on setting reminders and alarms on my smartphone, and I use apps to keep track of important tasks. I also use a voice assistant to help me remember things.

× Well, I'm not very good at memory things, so I usually rely heavily on notes and reminders to keep track of important tasks.

✓ Well, I'm not very good at memorising things, so I usually rely heavily on notes and reminders to keep track of important tasks.

这里'memory things'用法不正确，应该用动名词'memorising things'表示记忆的动作。'memory'是名词，不能直接修饰'things'。

× For example, I often set alarms on my phones to make sure I don't forget appointment or deadlines.

✓ For example, I often set alarms on my phone to make sure I don't forget appointments or deadlines.

'phones'应为单数形式'my phone'，因为通常指一个手机。'appointment'应为复数'appointments'，与'deadlines'保持一致。

× This method helped me a lot because my memory is quite poor when it comes to remembering details.

✓ This method helps me a lot because my memory is quite poor when it comes to remembering details.

句子描述的是现在的情况，应该用一般现在时'helps'而不是过去时'helped'。

× Well, I have forgotten my best friend's birthday, so it's really terrible for me after that.

✓ Well, I forgot my best friend's birthday, so it was really terrible for me after that.

这里描述过去发生的事情，应该用一般过去时'forgot'和'was'，而不是现在完成时和现在时。

× And and after that I said every clock and every calendar.

✓ And after that, I checked every clock and every calendar.

句中重复使用'And'且' I said every clock and every calendar'表达不清，应改为'I checked every clock and every calendar'表示查看时间和日期。

× For me, I need to remember social and family commitments is really necessary for me because you know, for example, you know, some birthdays and anniversaries is really necessary for family and friends and I always check in with loved ones and these help me maintain strong relationships.

✓ For me, remembering social and family commitments is really necessary because, for example, some birthdays and anniversaries are really important for family and friends, and I always check in with loved ones. These help me maintain strong relationships.

'commitments is'应为'should be'或'commitments are'，这里用动名词'remembering'作主语更合适。'birthdays and anniversaries is'应为'are'，主谓一致。句子过长，适当断句更清晰。

× Well in my life technology is dispensable.

✓ Well, in my life, technology is indispensable.

'dispensable'意思是可有可无，语境应为'不可或缺'，应使用'indispensable'。

× I always rely on setting reminders on my smartphones and also I set alarms and use some apps to help me to track off important things.

✓ I always rely on setting reminders on my smartphone, and I also set alarms and use some apps to help me track important things.

'smartphones'应为单数'my smartphone'，'help me to track off'中'track off'不正确，应为'track'。

× Also I use Voice Assistant to help me to remind me.

✓ Also, I use Voice Assistant to help remind me.

'help me to remind me'重复使用' me'，应简化为'help remind me'。