记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. For example, focus on whether you are good at memorising and provide specific examples with linking words.

範例: Yes, I find it difficult to memorise things like phone numbers and names. Therefore, I often write them down in my diary to help me remember.

建議: Your answer provides relevant content but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use past tense correctly and link your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid unnecessary repetition and clarify details for coherence.

範例: Yes, I once forgot my mobile phone about a month ago. I was shopping for groceries and placed my phone on the counter while paying. Because of the crowd, I accidentally left without it.

建議: Your answer is somewhat off-topic and repetitive. The question asks what you need to remember daily, but you talk about how you improve memory. Try to answer directly with specific examples and use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: In my daily life, I need to remember tasks like appointments and deadlines. To help with this, I write them down in my diary and use reminder apps.

建議: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas and correct grammar for better naturalness. Avoid redundancy and provide a clear topic sentence.

範例: I remember important things by using reminder and calendar apps. Additionally, I write important dates in my diary, which helps me recall them easily.

× Yes, I'm going to remember all the things and I easily can't remember the mobile number and name of person and in the daily life and I take some of my diary to remind me all the.

✓ Yes, I try to remember all things, but I easily forget the mobile number and the name of a person in daily life, so I use my diary to remind me of everything.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'and' repeatedly, causing confusion and poor sentence structure. Using appropriate conjunctions and punctuation improves clarity and flow.

× It was happened a one month ago when I go for the shopping for the grocery and when I paying my bill and I placed my mobile phone on Contour and due to the crowd I forgot to pick it.

✓ It happened one month ago when I went shopping for groceries. While I was paying my bill, I placed my mobile phone on the counter, and due to the crowd, I forgot to pick it up.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'was happened' instead of 'happened' and mixes tenses ('go' instead of 'went', 'paying' without auxiliary). Correct past tense forms and proper verb tenses are necessary for clarity.

× I placed my mobile phone on Contour and due to the crowd I forgot to pick it.

✓ I placed my mobile phone on the counter, and due to the crowd, I forgot to pick it up.

The word 'Contour' is a misspelling of 'counter', which is a noun referring to a surface. Also, 'pick it' should be 'pick it up' to correctly express the action.

× I do something to do make my memory sharp.

✓ I do some things to make my memory sharp.

The phrase 'do something to do make' is incorrect. The correct form is 'do some things to make' to express the intended meaning.

× I play some games which help me helps me to enhance my memory and I also love to write down on my diary for the daily task.

✓ I play some games which help me to enhance my memory, and I also love to write in my diary for daily tasks.

The phrase 'help me helps me' is redundant; only 'help me' is correct. Also, 'write down on my diary' should be 'write in my diary' as 'write in' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× I also love to write down on my diary for the daily task.

✓ I also love to write in my diary for daily tasks.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'in' when referring to writing inside a diary or notebook.

× I use two ways to remember the important things.

✓ I use two methods to remember important things.

While 'ways' is not incorrect, 'methods' is more appropriate in this context. Also, 'the important things' can be simplified to 'important things' for naturalness.

× Firstly I use the reminder and calendar apps and on the other side I also use the diary and I write it down my important days date on my diary and I have a habit I can easily remember them with.

✓ Firstly, I use reminder and calendar apps. On the other hand, I also use a diary where I write down the dates of important days. I have a habit of easily remembering them.

The phrase 'on the other side' is incorrect; 'on the other hand' is the correct expression. Also, 'write it down my important days date on my diary' is awkward and incorrect; it should be 'write down the dates of important days in my diary'. The last part is rephrased for clarity and correctness.