记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中时态使用不准确，且表达不够自然。建议使用现在时态描述习惯，并简化表达，使语言更流畅自然。

範例: I am not very good at memorising things. For example, I often forget phone numbers shortly after hearing them, which can be quite frustrating.

建議: 回答内容混乱且语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议简化句子结构，明确表达忘记重要物品的经历，并避免无意义的短语。

範例: Yes, I have forgotten important things before. For instance, I lost my phone and several earphones because I was careless and had a bad memory.

建議: 回答中有重复和语法错误，且部分词汇使用不当。建议避免重复，使用准确词汇，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: In my daily life, I need to remember important things like my electronic devices, such as my iPad and phone, so I can stay connected with my close friends and family. Also, I must remember my homework to submit it on time.

建議: 表达不够清晰，语法错误较多。建议使用更自然的表达方式，说明具体的记忆方法，并注意语法准确。

範例: I usually remind myself repeatedly to remember important things. For example, I make notes or set alarms to avoid forgetting them.

× Well, personally speaking, I had poor memory.

✓ Well, personally speaking, I have poor memory.

这里使用过去时态“had”不符合语境，因为学生是在描述自己当前的记忆状况，应该使用现在完成时或一般现在时。建议使用“have”表示现在的状态。

× I often forgot the phone numbers shortly after hearing them and I felt that that's not in my good side.

✓ I often forget phone numbers shortly after hearing them and I feel that that's not my strong point.

句中“forgot”和“felt”使用了过去时，但描述的是经常发生的事情，应使用一般现在时“forget”和“feel”。另外，“that's not in my good side”表达不自然，改为“that's not my strong point”更合适。

× Wow, I think I usually forgot the crucial things like the phone.

✓ Wow, I think I usually forget crucial things like my phone.

“usually”表示习惯性动作，应使用一般现在时“forget”而非过去时“forgot”。

× The here phone for example I lost around 10 earphone.

✓ For example, I lost around 10 earphones.

句子结构混乱，“The here phone”无意义，应去掉；“earphone”应使用复数“earphones”。

× The reason is because I just had a bad memories and it turned out to be I need to spend I need to cross my arm and a leg to.

✓ The reason is that I just have bad memory and it turns out that I need to spend, I need to cross my arm and a leg to.

“had”应改为现在时“have”，因为描述的是一般情况；“memories”应为不可数名词“memory”；“turned out to be”应改为“turns out that”以符合现在时态。

× I need to cross my arm and a leg to.

✓ I need to cross my arms and legs to.

习语应为“cross my arms and legs”，且“arm”和“leg”应使用复数形式。

× Wow. I think there's some important things.

✓ Wow. I think there are some important things.

“things”是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“are”而非“is”。

× so that I can stay connected with my clonesy friends and my family and also my homework.

✓ so that I can stay connected with my close friends, my family, and also my homework.

“clonesy”拼写错误，应为“close”。

× That's also one of the crucial things that I need to carry with.

✓ That's also one of the crucial things that I need to carry with me.

“carry with”后应加反身代词“me”以完成短语。

× Otherwise I cannot hand it on on time.

✓ Otherwise, I cannot hand it in on time.

动词短语应为“hand in”，表示提交；“on on”重复，应去掉一个。

× Well, I think one key thing is keep reminding myself by my heart to tell me so that I can remember.

✓ Well, I think one key thing is to keep reminding myself by heart to remember.

“is keep”结构错误，应为“is to keep”；“by my heart to tell me”表达不自然，改为“by heart”更简洁；“to tell me”多余。

× Otherwise it will be very easy to lost anything, even the important things.

✓ Otherwise, it will be very easy to lose anything, even important things.

“to lost”应为不定式“to lose”；“the important things”中“the”可省略。