记忆— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to improve your fluency and accuracy by correcting minor errors and using more natural expressions. For example, say "I find it hard to remember long lists and complex information" instead of "I fight it hard to remember long list an also complex information." Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

範例: I don't consider myself good at memorising things. For example, I often forget where I put my keys or phone. Additionally, I find it hard to remember long lists and complex information.

建議: Focus on sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly, such as "because" and "so". Also, be careful with word choice and grammar, for example, say "my parents' 30th wedding anniversary" and "I regretted it and apologised."

範例: I have forgotten many things before, but I remember once forgetting my parents' 30th wedding anniversary because of my heavy workload, so I regretted it and apologised for my mistake.

建議: Your answer lacks clarity and contains unclear words like "taesan" and "afellay." Make sure to use correct vocabulary and complete your sentences. Use linking words like "for example" and "because" to explain why these things are important. Keep your answer concise and coherent.

範例: Every day, I need to remember many important things, but the most crucial is my work schedule. For example, I have to meet deadlines because missing them could cause problems. Therefore, I keep track of my tasks carefully.

建議: Your answer is clear and relevant. To improve, try to vary your vocabulary and sentence structures slightly. For instance, instead of "take advantage of my phone," you could say "use my phone" or "rely on my phone." Also, avoid repeating "important things" too often.

範例: I usually rely on my phone to help me remember tasks. For example, I set alarms or reminders for things I need to complete during the day or week, which helps me stay organised and ensures I don't forget anything essential.

× I fight it hard to remember long list an also complex information.

✓ I find it hard to remember long lists and also complex information.

The word 'fight' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'find'. Also, 'long list' should be plural 'long lists' to match the context. 'An' is a typo and should be 'and'. This correction improves subject-verb agreement and corrects plural usage.

× I have forgotten many things before but I do remember I once forgot my parents 30 weddings anniversary because of my heavy work load so that I regret it and apologize for my mistakes.

✓ I have forgotten many things before, but I do remember I once forgot my parents' 30th wedding anniversary because of my heavy workload, so I regretted it and apologised for my mistakes.

The phrase 'parents 30 weddings anniversary' should be 'parents' 30th wedding anniversary' to show possession and correct ordinal number usage. 'Work load' should be one word 'workload'. 'Regret it' and 'apologize' should be in past tense 'regretted' and 'apologised' to maintain tense consistency.

× Every day I need to remember many important things, but the most crucial is my work schedule.

✓ Every day I need to remember many important things, but the most crucial one is my work schedule.

The phrase 'the most crucial is my work schedule' is missing a noun after 'crucial'. Adding 'one' clarifies the subject and improves sentence structure.

× I don't want to forget my taesan.

✓ I don't want to forget my tasks.

The word 'taesan' appears to be a typo or incorrect word. Replacing it with 'tasks' fits the context of remembering work-related items.

× Also I have to meet the deadline, so I had to keep track of my task afellay for instance.

✓ Also, I have to meet the deadline, so I have to keep track of my tasks carefully, for instance.

The phrase 'had to' should be 'have to' to maintain present tense consistency. 'Task' should be plural 'tasks' to match 'keep track of'. 'Afellay' is a typo and should be 'carefully'.

× For instance, if I missed the deadline it could create a problem. So.

✓ For instance, if I miss the deadline, it could create a problem.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'So.' which is incomplete. Also, 'missed' should be 'miss' to maintain present tense in a conditional sentence. The corrected sentence is complete and grammatically correct.