机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，且信息有些混乱。建议简化句子结构，避免语法错误，并且更清晰地表达手机的重要性。

範例: My favourite machine at home is my mobile phone because I use it almost all the time to search for information and watch videos. It also helps me monitor my health, so it is very important to me.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和重复，且连接词使用不够自然。建议注意时态一致，避免重复，并使用更自然的连接词。

範例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save a lot of my time. Although my parents worry about the power consumption, I believe these machines are essential for daily life.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子，避免重复，并且更准确地表达阅读说明书的重要性。

範例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine to understand how it works. If I don't, I feel nervous because I worry about breaking it.

建議: 回答过于简短，缺乏具体内容和支持细节。建议扩展回答，说明为什么阅读说明书很重要。

範例: Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions because it helps me use the machine correctly and avoid any damage.

× Surely it's my mobile phone 'cause I almost use it anytime to search for some informations or watch some videos and you will to supervise my health, so it is really important for me.

✓ Surely it's my mobile phone 'cause I almost use it anytime to search for some information or watch some videos and you will supervise my health, so it is really important for me.

“informations”是不可数名词，不能加复数形式，应使用“information”。另外，“you will to supervise”中“to”多余，应去掉。

× Sure, they are the most important machines in my home 'cause it really save, they really save a lot of my time.

✓ Sure, they are the most important machines in my home 'cause they really save a lot of my time.

句中“it really save”主语与谓语不一致，应改为“they really save”。

× You know, my parents don't like them because it wastes a lot of power, but I think it's essential.

✓ You know, my parents don't like them because they waste a lot of power, but I think it's essential.

“it wastes”中的“it”指代不明确，应改为“they”指代复数的“machines”。

× Sure, I think I must read the instruction to know how to how to make the machine go on.

✓ Sure, I think I must read the instructions to know how to make the machine work.

“instruction”应使用复数形式“instructions”，表示说明书。重复“how to”应去掉一个。

× And if I don't raise the instruction I will feel kind of nervous or uneasy I because I will always worry about it broken.

✓ And if I don't read the instructions I will feel kind of nervous or uneasy because I will always worry about it breaking.

“raise the instruction”错误，应为“read the instructions”。“it broken”应改为“it breaking”，表示担心机器坏掉。