机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy like "various types of smoothies" and "things that are really hard". Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: My favorite machine at home is the juicer because I use it frequently to make smoothies and to crush hard ingredients for my recipes.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Try to organize your ideas with clear topic sentences and supporting details. Use linking words to improve coherence. Also, avoid grammatical errors and incomplete sentences.

範例: Yes, washing and sweeping machines are very important nowadays because people are often busy with work and family. For example, a working mother with children can save a lot of time by using these machines to help with household chores.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but could be clearer and more concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

範例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine. For instance, when I bought a washing machine, I initially struggled to use it properly, so reading the manual helped me understand how to operate it.

建議: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to explain your reasoning.

範例: Yes, I believe reading instructions is important because it helps prevent accidents or mistakes when using a machine.

× Well, my favorite machine is a juicer as I often use it to make various types of smoothies and sometimes to crush the things that are really hard in order to make my dishes.

✓ Well, my favorite machine is a juicer as I often use it to make various types of smoothies and sometimes to crush things that are really hard in order to make my dishes.

The phrase 'the things' is incorrect here because it refers to things in a general sense, so the definite article 'the' should be omitted. Using 'things' without 'the' is appropriate when speaking generally.

× Yes, they are very important in present time as the person is very busy with so many jobs like for instance a woman is having a job also and she has children also so she has to take care of all of them.

✓ Yes, they are very important at present time as a person is very busy with so many jobs; for instance, a woman has a job and she also has children, so she has to take care of all of them.

The phrase 'in present time' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at present time'. Also, 'a woman is having a job' is incorrect because 'have' is a stative verb and should be in simple present tense 'has'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× So if in this case if the this lady has machines like washing machines and sleeping machine then.

✓ So if in this case this lady has machines like washing machines and sweeping machines, then...

The phrase 'sleeping machine' is incorrect; the correct term is 'sweeping machine'. Also, 'the this lady' is redundant; only 'this lady' is needed. The sentence is incomplete but corrected as per the given fragment.

× Certainly it is very essential thing to use any machine before and I remember the time when I bought a washing machine, I was not able to use it properly, but I had some idea.

✓ Certainly, it is very essential to use any machine properly, and I remember the time when I bought a washing machine; I was not able to use it properly, but I had some idea.

The phrase 'very essential thing to use any machine before' is awkward and incorrect. The preposition 'before' is misplaced. It should be 'very essential to use any machine properly'. Also, adding commas improves readability.

× But I prefer to read the instructions before.

✓ But I prefer to read the instructions beforehand.

The word 'before' is incorrectly used as an adverb here. The correct adverb is 'beforehand' to indicate reading instructions prior to use.

× Yes, in my opinion instructions are very important so that there can be a mishappening that can be occur in the future if you will not read the instructions properly.

✓ Yes, in my opinion, instructions are very important so that mishaps do not occur in the future if you do not read the instructions properly.

The word 'a mishappening' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'mishap' without an article. Also, 'can be occur' is incorrect; it should be 'do not occur'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.