机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'without controlling', say 'without manual control'. Also, explain what 'recognition' means in this context for clarity.

範例: My favorite machine at home is a new robot vacuum cleaner. I think it's a great invention because it can clean my home automatically without manual control, and it also has sensors that help it recognize obstacles.

建議: Improve sentence structure and grammar for clarity. Use linking words like 'especially' and 'because' properly. Also, be more specific about why these machines are important in daily life.

範例: Yes, I think both washing machines and sweeping machines are very important in daily life, especially washing machines. For example, when I have heavy clothes to clean, the washing machine helps a lot because I don't always have enough energy or time to wash them by hand.

建議: Avoid repetition and improve grammar. Use linking words like 'however' to contrast ideas. Make your answer more concise and natural.

範例: It depends on the situation. If I am familiar with a machine, like a washing machine, I usually don't read the instructions. However, if I have to use a new machine that I have no experience with, I will read the instructions carefully.

建議: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'also' correctly. Be more specific about how instructions help with usage and safety.

範例: Yes, I think it is important to read instructions. For complex machines, instructions help me understand how to use them properly, and for dangerous machines, they are essential to ensure my safety.

× My favorite machine, my home, is a new labeled robot vacuum cleaner.

✓ My favorite machine at home is a newly labeled robot vacuum cleaner.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'my home' here. The correct preposition to indicate location related to 'home' is 'at'. Also, 'new labeled' should be 'newly labeled' to correctly use the adverb form modifying the past participle 'labeled'.

× it can clean my home automatically without controlling

✓ it can clean my home automatically without being controlled

The phrase 'without controlling' is incorrect because 'controlling' is an active verb form. The correct passive form 'without being controlled' should be used to indicate the machine operates without external control.

× it also has some recognition.

✓ it also has some recognition features.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'features' clarifies the meaning. 'Recognition' alone is a noun that needs a qualifier to specify what kind of recognition is meant.

× especially washing machine.

✓ especially washing machines.

The phrase refers to washing machines in general, so the plural form 'washing machines' is appropriate here.

× If you have some heavy clothes need to clean, the washing machine will help you a lot since you don't always have too much energy or time to deal with.

✓ If you have some heavy clothes that need to be cleaned, the washing machine will help you a lot since you don't always have enough energy or time to deal with them.

The original sentence lacks a relative pronoun 'that' and the passive form 'need to be cleaned' is required. Also, 'too much energy' should be 'enough energy' for correct meaning, and 'deal with' needs an object 'them' referring to clothes.

× If I'm very familiar with this machine, I don't read the instructions such as a washing machine.

✓ If I'm very familiar with a machine, such as a washing machine, I don't read the instructions.

The phrase 'such as a washing machine' should be placed immediately after 'machine' to clarify the example. Also, 'this machine' is vague; 'a machine' is more appropriate in this context.

× But if I I have to deal with or use a newly bought machine that I couldn't have any experience about it, I will read.

✓ But if I have to deal with or use a newly bought machine that I have no experience with, I will read the instructions.

The sentence has repetition 'I I' and awkward phrasing 'couldn't have any experience about it'. The correct form is 'have no experience with'. Also, 'instructions' should be added for clarity.

× For some complex machines, the instruction helps me a lot because it can uh, answer my questions about the usage and uh uh, for some dangerous machines, the instruction also means a lot because it guide my safety.

✓ For some complex machines, the instructions help me a lot because they can answer my questions about usage, and for some dangerous machines, the instructions also mean a lot because they guide my safety.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it refers to multiple guidelines. The pronouns 'it' should be 'they' to agree with plural 'instructions'. Also, 'guide my safety' is awkward; it means 'help keep me safe' but is acceptable here.