机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答表达了主要观点，但句子结构较为简单，且有些表达不够自然，例如“bring cool for us”应改为“cool us down”。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并适当使用连接词使句子更流畅。

範例: My favourite machine at home is the air conditioner because it cools us down during the hot summer. Moreover, it can also function as a heater in winter, which makes it very useful all year round.

建議: 回答内容完整且表达了观点，但句子较长且缺少适当的连接词，导致表达略显冗长。建议分句表达，并使用连接词如“because”、“so”使逻辑更清晰。

範例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important. Without them, we would have to do all the housework ourselves, which is tiring and time-consuming. Therefore, these machines help us save time and effort.

建議: 回答中有语法和表达错误，如“more knowledge I don't know”不自然，且句子结构不够清晰。建议使用更准确的表达，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using machines because they provide useful information. For example, many people are unaware that air conditioners have energy-saving modes and timers.

建議: 回答表达了观点，但句子较长且重复使用“and”，影响流畅度。建议分句表达，并使用连接词如“which”或“so that”使句子更自然。

範例: Yes, I believe it is very important to read the instructions. They make the device easier to use and help us learn about many functions that we might not be familiar with.

× In my home I most love the air conditioners.

✓ In my home, I love the air conditioner the most.

这里的“air conditioners”应为单数形式“air conditioner”，因为通常指家中最喜欢的那一台空调。并且“most love”表达不自然，改为“love ... the most”更符合英语习惯。

× In such hot summer it can bring cool for us.

✓ In such a hot summer, it can bring coolness to us.

“such hot summer”缺少冠词“a”，应为“such a hot summer”。“bring cool for us”表达不准确，应该用“bring coolness to us”或“cool us down”。

× Also in winter it can act as a heater, so we love them.

✓ Also in winter, it can act as a heater, so we love it.

前文指的是单数空调，代词应为单数“it”，而不是复数“them”。

× Yes, of course, they are very essential to our daily lives because if we do not have these machines, we need to do this housework by ourselves, which is very tiring and time consuming, but with these machines we can free ourselves.

✓ Yes, of course, they are very essential to our daily lives because if we do not have these machines, we need to do this housework by ourselves, which is very tiring and time-consuming. But with these machines, we can free ourselves.

原句中“but”连接两个完整句子，应该用句号分开或用分号连接。

× Yes, I always read the instructions before using the machines because I think the instructions can give me more knowledge I don't know.

✓ Yes, I always read the instructions before using the machines because I think the instructions can give me knowledge that I don't have.

“more knowledge I don't know”表达不清晰，应改为“knowledge that I don't have”更准确。

× Such as air conditioners, many people don't know they have the mode of energy saving and time set so.

✓ For example, many people don't know that air conditioners have energy-saving modes and timer settings.

句子结构混乱，“Such as”不能单独成句，且“mode of energy saving and time set so”表达不准确，应改为“energy-saving modes and timer settings”。

× Yeah, of course it is very essential to read these instructions because it can make the device more convenient to use and we will know many functions they have and these functions may be not common for us.

✓ Yeah, of course it is very essential to read these instructions because they can make the device more convenient to use, and we will learn about many functions it has, which may not be common to us.

“it can make the device more convenient”中的“it”指代不明，应改为“they”指代“instructions”。“we will know many functions they have”中“they”指代不明，应改为“it”指代“device”。句子结构需调整使表达更清晰。