机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 다소 중복되고 문장이 자연스럽지 않습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하며, 불필요한 반복을 줄이고 문법적 오류를 수정하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: My favorite machine at home is a massage bed. It cost me around $10,000, but it feels heavenly when I lie down and use it.

建議: 답변이 주제에 맞게 잘 구성되어 있으나, 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 문장 구조를 개선하고 연결어를 활용해 더 자연스럽게 말하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are important because they save a lot of time. In the past, washing clothes and cleaning the house was very difficult and time-consuming.

建議: 답변이 불완전하고 문장이 중단되어 있습니다. 문장을 완성하고 명확한 이유를 제시하며, 자연스러운 표현을 사용하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: I usually read the instructions before using a machine. For example, when I recently bought a blender, I read the manual carefully to avoid any mistakes.

建議: 답변이 논리적이지만, 'wreckage' 같은 단어 선택이 부적절하며, 문장 연결이 다소 어색합니다. 더 적절한 어휘를 사용하고 문장 연결을 자연스럽게 하는 연습이 필요합니다.

範例: Yes, I think reading instructions is important for several reasons. Firstly, it helps prevent damage to the machine. Secondly, it ensures you use the machine correctly and efficiently.

× My favorite machine in my home will be probably a massage bed.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is probably a massage bed.

'Will be' is used for future tense, but the sentence talks about a current favorite machine, so present tense 'is' should be used.

× This massage bed cost me probably $10,000 to buy it.

✓ This massage bed probably cost me $10,000 to buy it.

The adverb 'probably' should be placed before the verb 'cost' for correct word order; also, 'cost' is correct in past tense here.

× It is It feels like a heaven when you lie down and start massaging and.

✓ It feels like heaven when you lie down and start massaging.

The sentence has repetition and an incomplete ending; removing redundancy and completing the sentence improves clarity.

× I believe washing machine and sweeping machines are important for several reasons.

✓ I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are important for several reasons.

Both 'washing machine' and 'sweeping machines' should be plural to match the context of general importance.

× The reason why washing machines is important is it saves your time to wash your clothes.

✓ The reason why washing machines are important is that they save your time to wash your clothes.

'Washing machines' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' and pronouns should be plural 'they' to agree in number.

× Back then it was very hard to wash your clothes and clean your house.

✓ Back then, it was very hard to wash your clothes and clean your house.

The sentence is correct; only a comma is added after 'Back then' for clarity.

× I mostly read instructions before I use a machine.

✓ I mostly read instructions before I use a machine.

The sentence is correct; 'read' is present tense and matches 'use'.

× For example, I recently bought a blender and I read instruction before I start using the machine because I didn't want to want to.

✓ For example, I recently bought a blender and I read the instructions before I started using the machine because I didn't want to make a mistake.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'; 'start' should be past tense 'started' to match past action; the phrase 'didn't want to want to' is incorrect and replaced with 'didn't want to make a mistake' for clarity.

× Yes, I do think it is important to read the instructions for several reasons.

✓ Yes, I do think it is important to read the instructions for several reasons.

The sentence is correct as it is.

× First, it is important to read to avoid any wreckage.

✓ First, it is important to read the instructions to avoid any damage.

'Wreckage' is not appropriate for machines; 'damage' is the correct term. Also, 'read' should be followed by the object 'the instructions' for clarity.

× If you're not aware of how to use the machine, you might break the machine eventually.

✓ If you're not aware of how to use the machine, you might eventually break it.

The sentence is mostly correct; 'eventually' is better placed before 'break' and 'the machine' can be replaced with pronoun 'it' for naturalness.

× Second, it is systematic.

✓ Second, it is systematic.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear; it should be expanded for clarity, but as per instructions, only grammar issues are corrected.