机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally relevant but contains some language errors and unclear phrases, such as "The French can store many fresh food" and "fatigue Internet of the day." Try to use clearer and more natural expressions, and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise within 5 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: My favourite machine at home is the refrigerator because I love eating fresh food. It helps me store fruits, vegetables, meat, and seafood to keep them fresh longer. When I come home, I usually check the fridge first and pour myself a glass of apple juice to refresh after a long day.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but contains some awkward phrases like "play a fertile role" and "house's hygiene situation properly." Also, some sentences are a bit long and unclear. Try to use more natural vocabulary and linking words such as "because" or "therefore" to improve coherence and clarity.

範例: There is no doubt that both washing machines and sweeping machines are important at home because they help maintain cleanliness. For example, washing machines allow us to wear clean and fresh-smelling clothes every day. Moreover, sweeping machines keep the house hygienic and save us a lot of time and effort.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete, especially the last sentence. Also, some phrases like "As a growing up like me" are unnatural. Try to organize your ideas clearly with complete sentences and use linking words to connect points logically. Avoid incomplete thoughts and ensure your answer is concise and relevant.

範例: I usually do not read the instructions before using a machine because most machines have simple icons that are easy to understand. For example, with washing machines, even new models are easy to operate. Additionally, I often watch tutorial videos on YouTube to learn how to use new machines. However, if I encounter serious problems, I will read the manual or ask for help.

建議: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear but contains some awkward expressions like "check the roots on it." Try to use more natural phrases and linking words such as "because" or "however" to improve coherence. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

範例: I think it is usually not necessary to read the instructions because nowadays people can easily learn from online videos or ask AI assistants like ChatGPT. However, if the machine is completely new, it is better to quickly skim the manual to understand the basics. This way, we can use the machine safely and effectively.

× The French can store many fresh food such as fruits, vegetables, fresh meats and seafood.

✓ The fridge can store many fresh foods such as fruits, vegetables, fresh meats and seafood.

The word 'French' is incorrect here; it should be 'fridge' referring to the refrigerator. Also, 'food' is an uncountable noun, so 'foods' is used when referring to different types of food. The sentence should use 'fridge' and 'foods' to be grammatically correct.

× The first thing I come home after taking off my shoes is to check the fridge and give myself a glass of apple juice to wash away the fatigue Internet of the day.

✓ The first thing I do when I come home after taking off my shoes is to check the fridge and give myself a glass of apple juice to wash away the fatigue of the day.

The original sentence lacks a proper verb phrase after 'The first thing'. Adding 'do when I come home' clarifies the action. Also, 'fatigue Internet of the day' is incorrect; it should be 'fatigue of the day'. This correction improves sentence clarity and grammatical correctness.

× It's no doubt both washing machine and whipping machine play a fertile role at home for personal tidiness and living environment.

✓ There's no doubt both washing machines and sweeping machines play an important role at home for personal tidiness and the living environment.

'Washing machine' and 'whipping machine' should be plural as 'washing machines' and 'sweeping machines' to match 'both'. 'Whipping machine' is incorrect; it should be 'sweeping machine'. 'Fertile role' is incorrect; 'important role' is appropriate. Also, 'the living environment' needs the definite article 'the'.

× By using a washing machine, we can wear clean and soft clothes with good smell every day.

✓ By using a washing machine, we can wear clean and soft clothes that smell good every day.

The phrase 'with good smell' is awkward; 'that smell good' is the correct adjective clause. This improves the naturalness and grammatical correctness of the sentence.

× Plus, sweeping machine is crucial to help keep the house's hygiene situation properly.

✓ Plus, the sweeping machine is crucial to help keep the house's hygiene properly.

'Sweeping machine' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Hygiene situation' is unnatural; 'hygiene' alone suffices. 'Properly' should be placed at the end to modify the verb phrase correctly.

× Through using these two machines, people no longer need to do the housework in bare hands can save time.

✓ By using these two machines, people no longer need to do the housework with bare hands and can save time.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks conjunctions. Adding 'and' connects the two clauses properly. Also, 'in bare hands' should be 'with bare hands' to use the correct preposition.

× As a growing up like me, I seldom read those guidelines or handbooks to learn how to use it.

✓ As someone growing up like me, I seldom read those guidelines or handbooks to learn how to use them.

'As a growing up like me' is incorrect; 'As someone growing up like me' is correct. Also, 'use it' is incorrect because 'guidelines or handbooks' is plural, so 'use them' is appropriate.

× There are simple and easy to read icons and symbols on most of the machines.

✓ There are simple and easy-to-read icons and symbols on most of the machines.

'Easy to read' should be hyphenated as 'easy-to-read' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. This correction improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Take the washing machine as an example.

✓ Take the washing machine as an example.

This sentence is correct as is; no correction needed.

× Even if it's time to use a new model, most people find it easy to guess how it functions.

✓ Even if it's time to use a new model, most people find it easy to guess how it functions.

This sentence is correct as is; no correction needed.

× More importantly, people nowadays can watch videos on YouTube to learn instead of reading the instructions.

✓ More importantly, people nowadays can watch videos on YouTube to learn instead of reading the instructions.

This sentence is correct as is; no correction needed.

× However, if I really meet some troubles in the company.

✓ However, if I really encounter some troubles with the company.

The original sentence is a fragment lacking a main clause. Adding 'encounter some troubles with the company' completes the thought. 'Meet some troubles' is unnatural; 'encounter some troubles' is correct.

× In most cases, I don't think it's necessary to spend time on reading the instructions.

✓ In most cases, I don't think it's necessary to spend time reading the instructions.

The phrase 'spend time on reading' is incorrect; 'spend time reading' is the correct collocation.

× We can watch videos on YouTube, check the roots on it, or even ask for an answer from ChatGPT.

✓ We can watch videos on YouTube, check the routes on it, or even ask for an answer from ChatGPT.

'Roots' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'routes' meaning paths or ways. This correction clarifies the intended meaning.

× We don't literally need to read those handbooks anymore.

✓ We don't literally need to read those handbooks anymore.

This sentence is correct as is; no correction needed.

× Of course, sometimes when the machine is totally new to you or your family, it's better to skim and scan it.

✓ Of course, sometimes when the machine is totally new to you or your family, it's better to skim and scan the instructions.

The pronoun 'it' is vague here; specifying 'the instructions' clarifies the meaning and improves sentence clarity.