机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat clear but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like 'helpful to do my day-to-day work at home' and improve sentence structure. Also, use correct product names and singular/plural forms properly. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: My favourite machine at home is the Philips hair straightener, which I use daily. It has multiple heat settings that help me style my hair efficiently and safely.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and natural phrasing. Avoid awkward expressions like 'provide great functions of washing and sweeping home appliances.' Instead, explain the importance clearly and use linking words to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I think washing machines and vacuum cleaners are very important, especially for busy people. They save time by doing household chores quickly, allowing individuals to focus on work or studies.

建議: Your answer repeats ideas and contains unclear phrases like 'that is good and apartment.' Try to be more precise and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly and check grammar and vocabulary for accuracy.

範例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because it helps me understand how to operate it safely and avoid accidents.

建議: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing like 'so it is damage.' Use correct articles and prepositions, and link your ideas logically. Provide clear examples to support your point.

範例: Yes, reading instructions is important because it teaches us how to use machines safely and correctly. For instance, improper use can cause accidents or damage, so following guidelines helps prevent such problems.

× Here I would like to mention about a Phillips Fitness that I use everyday for straightening my hair.

✓ Here I would like to mention a Philips Fitness that I use every day for straightening my hair.

The preposition 'about' is unnecessary after 'mention'. Also, 'everyday' is an adjective meaning common or normal, but here the adverb 'every day' (two words) is correct to indicate frequency.

× It offers great functions of heating speeds that are helpful for straightening hairs.

✓ It offers great functions of heating speeds that are helpful for straightening hair.

The word 'hair' is generally uncountable when referring to the hair on one's head, so 'hairs' is incorrect in this context.

× They provide great functions of washing and sweeping home appliances that helps them to maintain their work and manage time efficiently.

✓ They provide great functions for washing and sweeping, helping people to maintain their work and manage time efficiently.

The phrase 'functions of washing and sweeping home appliances' is incorrect. It should be 'functions for washing and sweeping'. Also, 'helps them' should be 'helping people' for clarity and correctness.

× if a person has not any idea of using machine in a good way then it could lead to mishappening.

✓ if a person has no idea how to use a machine properly, then it could lead to mishaps.

The phrase 'has not any idea of using machine in a good way' is awkward and incorrect. It should be 'has no idea how to use a machine properly'. Also, 'mishappening' is not a correct noun; 'mishaps' is appropriate.

× Yes, I think it is important to read instructions because it helps us to know how to operate a machine in a safely and correctly way.

✓ Yes, I think it is important to read instructions because it helps us to know how to operate a machine safely and correctly.

The adverb 'safely' should not have the article 'a' before it. Also, 'correctly' is an adverb and should not be preceded by 'a'.

× For example, if someone does not know how to use a machine properly, it could cause a accident, so it is damage.

✓ For example, if someone does not know how to use a machine properly, it could cause an accident, so it is damaging.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound like 'accident'. Also, 'so it is damage' is incorrect; 'so it is damaging' or 'so it causes damage' is correct.

× Therefore, reading the instruction is very important to avoid any problems and ensure the machine works well.

✓ Therefore, reading the instructions is very important to avoid any problems and ensure the machine works well.

The noun 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' when referring to the guidelines provided with a machine.