机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答中有语法错误和重复表达，影响了语言的自然流畅。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用正确的时态和单复数形式。

範例: My favorite machine at home is the cleaning robot because it can automatically clean and mop the entire room. It makes the floor very clean and saves me a lot of time.

建議: 回答中存在重复词汇和语法错误，句子不完整。建议使用完整句子表达观点，并避免重复。

範例: Yes, I think both washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save time for busy people after work.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不够清晰。建议使用完整句子，明确表达观点，并避免重复。

範例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because they contain important rules and details. Designers include these notes carefully to help customers use the machine safely.

建議: 回答不完整且有语法错误，表达不清晰。建议完整表达观点，使用连贯的句子，并避免重复。

範例: Yes, I believe reading the instructions is important because manufacturers provide important information and precautions to ensure safe and proper use of the machine.

× Cleaning robot machine is my favorite machine in my home because also cleaning robot it can automatic automatically clean the whole room and wipe the floor.

✓ The cleaning robot is my favorite machine in my home because it can automatically clean the whole room and wipe the floor.

这里“Cleaning robot machine”应改为“The cleaning robot”，因为“cleaning robot”是单数名词，前面需要加定冠词“the”。另外，“automatic automatically”重复，且应使用副词“automatically”修饰动词。

× Very clear, very clean and it definitely save many times for me.

✓ It is very clear, very clean, and it definitely saves me a lot of time.

句子缺少主语和谓语，应补充完整。动词“save”应使用第三人称单数形式“saves”，因为主语是“it”。“many times”表达不准确，应改为“a lot of time”表示节省大量时间。

× Yes, I think these two machines are all important because it save save time for for a. Busy man after work.

✓ Yes, I think these two machines are all important because they save time for a busy man after work.

“it”应改为“they”，因为指代复数“two machines”，动词“save”应使用复数形式。句中重复词“save save”和“for for”应删除。

× Yes, I think read the instruction before using a machine.

✓ Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions before using a machine.

句子缺少主语和谓语，结构不完整。应补充“it is important to”使句子完整且符合表达习惯。

× Yes, I think read the instruction before using a machine.

✓ Yes, I think reading the instructions before using a machine is important.

“instruction”应使用复数形式“instructions”，因为通常说明书包含多条指示。

× There are many rules and and specific details when you when you're using the machine.

✓ There are many rules and specific details when you are using the machine.

句中重复“and”和“when you”应删除多余部分，使句子通顺。

× The designer will this this notes in the instruction carefully and as a customer.

✓ The designer will put these notes in the instructions carefully, and as a customer, I should read them.

“this this notes”应改为“these notes”，指代复数。句子缺少谓语“put”，且后半句不完整，应补充主语和谓语使句子完整。

× Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions as the mention I mentioned above.

✓ Yes, I think it is important to read the instructions as I mentioned above.

“as the mention I mentioned above”结构错误，应改为“as I mentioned above”，去掉多余的“the mention”。

× I think that the manufacturer always states the important things and precautions in the instructions and the customers is we have a.

✓ I think that the manufacturer always states the important things and precautions in the instructions, and as customers, we should follow them.

句子末尾不完整，“the customers is we have a”无意义，应改为完整表达“as customers, we should follow them”。