机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to give a clear topic sentence and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide specific details about why you like the washing machine and dryer.

範例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because it saves me a lot of time and effort. For example, I can wash clothes quickly without using my hands, which is very convenient. Additionally, the dryer helps me dry clothes faster, especially during the rainy season.

建議: Your answer is relevant but has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'clean the pork properly'. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific about the benefits of these machines. Also, avoid informal expressions like '100%'.

範例: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save time and effort. For instance, while the washing machine cleans my clothes, I can prepare meals for my family. Similarly, sweeping machines help keep the floor clean efficiently, which is especially useful in busy households.

建議: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using better linking words and correcting some awkward phrases like 'using it in a long way'. Try to be more concise and precise in your explanation.

範例: Yes, I always read the instructions when I buy a new machine because it helps me understand how to use it properly. This way, I can avoid mistakes and ensure the machine works efficiently and safely.

建議: Your answer is good but can be improved by using linking words to connect your points and correcting minor grammatical errors. Also, try to use a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas more effectively.

範例: Definitely, reading the instructions is important because it informs us about the correct usage of the machine. Moreover, it helps prevent damage to the device and ensures our safety by highlighting potential hazards. Additionally, instructions explain the various functions the machine offers, allowing us to use it to its full potential.

× Since then we have uh, bought the washing machine.

✓ Since then, we have bought the washing machine.

The sentence is correct in tense but the use of 'uh' is unnecessary and informal in this context. Removing it improves clarity and formality.

× We would be able to wash clothes in them.

✓ We would be able to wash clothes in it.

The pronoun 'them' is plural but refers to a singular noun 'washing machine'. The correct singular pronoun 'it' should be used for agreement.

× We don't have to use our hands for washing them properly.

✓ We don't have to use our hands to wash them properly.

The phrase 'for washing' is less appropriate here; 'to wash' is the correct infinitive form after 'have to' for expressing purpose.

× Our machine can do all in one task.

✓ Our machine can do all-in-one tasks.

The phrase 'all in one task' is awkward; 'all-in-one tasks' correctly expresses multiple functions combined in one machine.

× 100% they are very important for us as by putting the clothes in the washing machine we would be able to focus on something important.

✓ They are 100% very important for us because by putting the clothes in the washing machine, we are able to focus on something important.

The use of 'would be able to' is incorrect here as the action is habitual or general; present tense 'are able to' fits better.

× As most of the time I put my clothes in the washing machine and do some kitchen task such as cooking for my for myself and for my family members.

✓ Most of the time, I put my clothes in the washing machine and do some kitchen tasks such as cooking for myself and my family members.

The phrase 'for my for myself' is redundant and incorrect; also 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to match the context.

× And if I talk about the sweeping machines, they will definitely help us to clean the pork properly.

✓ And if I talk about the sweeping machines, they will definitely help us to clean the floor properly.

The word 'pork' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is 'floor' which makes sense with sweeping machines.

× Whenever I buy a new machine or some gadget, I would definitely look for the instructions.

✓ Whenever I buy a new machine or some gadget, I definitely look for the instructions.

The use of 'would' is incorrect for habitual actions; simple present tense 'look' is appropriate here.

× By looking at them, we will be able to know the proper use instead of taking the risk of using it in a long way.

✓ By looking at them, we will be able to know the proper use instead of taking the risk of using it incorrectly.

The phrase 'in a long way' is unclear and incorrect; 'incorrectly' better conveys the intended meaning.

× I would definitely have to read the instruction on the instruction panel.

✓ I definitely have to read the instructions on the instruction panel.

The use of 'would' is unnecessary here; simple present 'have to' is correct for expressing obligation.

× Definitely yes. I think that by reading the instruction properly we will get the to know about the proper use of the machine.

✓ Definitely yes. I think that by reading the instructions properly, we will get to know about the proper use of the machine.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it refers to multiple guidelines; also 'get the to know' is incorrect, corrected to 'get to know'.

× That would also help us to reduce the risk of damaging the machine as well as ourselves.

✓ That also helps us reduce the risk of damaging the machine as well as ourselves.

The use of 'would' is unnecessary here; simple present 'helps' is appropriate to express general truth.

× By reading the instruction, we will be able to know about the safety hazard of the machine.

✓ By reading the instructions, we will be able to know about the safety hazards of the machine.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' and 'hazard' should be plural 'hazards' to correctly refer to multiple safety concerns.

× We will be able to know about the different function which these machines provide.

✓ We will be able to know about the different functions which these machines provide.

'Function' should be plural 'functions' to agree with 'different' and the plural subject 'machines'.