机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇表达观点。

範例: My favourite machine at home is the television because it helps me stay updated with important news and events around the world in real time.

建議: 回答中表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱，建议使用更简洁明了的句子，并且避免语法错误。

範例: Absolutely. Washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they save time and do household chores efficiently. However, sometimes they may use too much water, which can be wasteful.

建議: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅，建议简化表达，突出重点，避免重复。

範例: Yes, I always read the instructions carefully before using a machine because it helps me understand how to operate it safely and efficiently.

建議: 回答较为完整，但句子结构略显单一，建议使用更多连接词使表达更连贯自然。

範例: Of course, reading instructions is important because they teach us how to use machines safely and correctly. By following them, we can avoid mistakes and save time, ensuring the best performance.

× Among plenty of machines in my home, I my favorite one is television.

✓ Among plenty of machines in my home, my favorite one is the television.

这里缺少冠词“the”，电视是特指家里的那台电视，应该用定冠词。

× I can keep track on what happens on the world and what's necessary news I can get it from through TV on time.

✓ I can keep track of what happens in the world and get necessary news from TV on time.

短语是“keep track of”，而不是“keep track on”；“happens in the world”表示发生在世界上；“get news from TV”是正确表达。

× I think one of the most important reason is that I can keep track on what happens on the world and what's necessary news I can get it from through TV on time.

✓ I think one of the most important reasons is that I can keep track of what happens in the world and get necessary news from TV on time.

“one of the most important reasons”中“reasons”应为复数，因为是“one of”结构。

× I can get it from through TV on time.

✓ I can get it through TV on time.

“get it from through”重复使用介词，应去掉“from”。

× I think these two things are more than important for a family because that is that will not only play a very important role in saving time, but it can also do the simple things very well.

✓ I think these two things are very important for a family because they will not only play a very important role in saving time, but can also do simple things very well.

“that is that”不合适，应改为“they”；“these two things”指代复数，代词应为“they”。

× But maybe sometimes they are waste of money on the water.

✓ But sometimes they are a waste of money on water.

“waste of money”前应加冠词“a”；“on the water”应为“on water”，表示用水方面的浪费。

× I think it's compelling to read the instructions carefully and clearly before I use that machine.

✓ I think it's important to read the instructions carefully and clearly before I use that machine.

“compelling”用法不当，表达重要性应使用“important”。

× That can help me to to get the key factors of the machine using and then I can use the machine effectively and efficiently.

✓ That can help me to get the key points of using the machine, and then I can use the machine effectively and efficiently.

“key factors of the machine using”表达不准确，应为“key points of using the machine”。

× Yes, the instructions always only do best for me, only to benefit for me I should keep.

✓ Yes, the instructions always do their best for me and benefit me, so I should follow them.

原句结构混乱，代词使用不当，应明确指代“instructions”，并调整句子结构使其通顺。

× Of course, the instructions told us how to use the machine carefully and safely.

✓ Of course, the instructions tell us how to use the machine carefully and safely.

根据上下文，说明是一般事实，时态应为一般现在时，动词应为“tell”。

× After reading the instruction, we can achieve the key factors of the machine using and we can avoid mistakes and save time when using the machine.

✓ After reading the instructions, we can understand the key points of using the machine and avoid mistakes and save time when using it.

“instruction”应为复数“instructions”；“achieve the key factors”表达不当，应为“understand the key points”；“machine using”应改为“using the machine”。

× Therefore, reading instruction is essential to get the best.

✓ Therefore, reading instructions is essential to get the best.

“instruction”应为复数形式“instructions”，表示说明书。