机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且混淆了洗碗机和洗衣机。建议明确区分机器名称，简洁表达原因，并避免重复和冗余。

範例: My favourite machine at home is the dishwasher because washing dishes by hand is time-consuming and makes my hands greasy. The dishwasher helps me save time and keeps my hands clean.

建議: 回答中有较多语气词和重复，表达不流畅。建议减少填充词，使用连贯的句子，并具体说明机器的重要性。

範例: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are important because they save time and effort. They also protect our hands from harsh chemicals and make household chores easier.

建議: 回答表达较为清晰，但有语法错误和重复。建议注意语法准确性，避免重复，并用连贯的句子表达观点。

範例: Sometimes I read the instructions if the machine has many buttons because it can be confusing. However, if there are only a few buttons with pictures, I usually try to guess how to use it.

建議: 回答中存在词汇错误（injections应为instructions），语法错误和表达不清晰。建议注意词汇准确性，避免语法错误，并用具体例子支持观点。

範例: Yes, it is important to read the instructions, especially for dangerous machines like microwaves. For example, if you put an egg in the microwave without proper instructions, it might explode.

× I really like the dishwasher because every time when I wash the dishes I find it's really time consuming and it's very greasy and make and it dirty my hands.

✓ I really like the dishwasher because every time when I wash the dishes I find it's really time-consuming and very greasy and it makes my hands dirty.

这里“time consuming”应为复合形容词“time-consuming”，且“make and it dirty my hands”结构错误，应改为“it makes my hands dirty”，动词需要第三人称单数形式。

× But with the washing machine it can help me deal with the troubles.

✓ But the washing machine can help me deal with these troubles.

“with the washing machine it can help me”结构不自然，应去掉“with”，直接说“the washing machine can help me”。“the troubles”前应加指示代词“these”更明确。

× people prefer to use a washing machine or sweeping machine because in, with this, uh, mechanic help, they can make their hands free

✓ people prefer to use a washing machine or sweeping machine because with this mechanical help, they can free their hands

“in, with this, uh, mechanic help”中“in”多余且“mechanic”应为形容词“mechanical”，且“make their hands free”应改为“free their hands”，表达更自然。

× And uh, uh, uh, the chemical, the chemical liquid cannot hurt our hands.

✓ And the chemical liquid cannot hurt our hands.

重复使用“the chemical”不必要，应简化为“the chemical liquid”。

× I will try to read the introductions because it's too hard to understand, but when they're only just several buttons and there are some pictures on the buttons, I will just guess it's it's functioning.

✓ I will try to read the instructions because they're too hard to understand, but when there are only just several buttons and some pictures on them, I will just guess their function.

“introductions”应为“instructions”；“they're only just several buttons”语序错误，应为“there are only just several buttons”；“it's it's functioning”表达不正确，应为“their function”。

× Yes, sometimes it's crucial to read the injections, especially when you're using the using some dangerous machines such as the microwave.

✓ Yes, sometimes it's crucial to read the instructions, especially when you're using some dangerous machines such as the microwave.

“injections”应为“instructions”，且“using the using”重复，应删去一个“using”。

× If you didn't rate the instructions and put a egg into it, it will have a explore.

✓ If you don't read the instructions and put an egg into it, it will explode.

“didn't rate”应为“don't read”，因为是假设现在或将来的情况；“a egg”应为“an egg”；“have a explore”错误，应为“explode”。