机器— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is a bit long and slightly unclear. Try to be more concise and directly answer the question first, then add specific reasons. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'because', use 'so' or 'therefore'.

範例: My favourite machine at home is the shaker. I use it once or twice daily to make energy drinks, which help me feel more powerful and active throughout the day.

建議: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'Washington pins'. Try to use correct vocabulary and structure your answer with clear linking words. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and be more specific.

範例: Yes, washing machines and sweeping machines are very important at home. They save time and help maintain cleanliness, which is essential for good hygiene.

建議: Your answer is good but can be improved by using better linking words and avoiding repetition. Also, try to use more natural phrases like 'operate the machine more easily' instead of 'in more easy way'.

範例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a new machine. This helps me operate it more easily and learn useful tips and precautions.

建議: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise. Use linking words like 'not only... but also' correctly and avoid repeating words.

範例: Yes, reading instructions is very important before using machines. Not only does it teach people how to use them properly, but it also informs them about necessary precautions.

× Well as I am a business person so I usually make a lot of products by using shaker because I always drink shaker once or twice in a day because that give me a more energy and I feel more powerful after drinking a shake.

✓ Well, as I am a business person, I usually make a lot of products by using a shaker because I always drink a shake once or twice a day as it gives me more energy and I feel more powerful after drinking a shake.

The sentence has issues with article usage before 'shaker' and subject-verb agreement with 'that give me'. 'Shaker' should be preceded by 'a' as it is a singular countable noun. Also, 'that give me' should be 'that gives me' to agree with the singular subject 'that'. Additionally, 'in a day' should be 'a day' for correct expression.

× I think the shaker is one of my premium favorite thing in my home.

✓ I think the shaker is one of my premium favorite things in my home.

The phrase 'one of my premium favorite thing' is incorrect because 'one of' should be followed by a plural noun. Therefore, 'thing' should be 'things' to match the plural form.

× Yes, sure Washington pins are and sweeping machines are very important in a home because with the help of washing machines one can easily save their time and wash their clothes.

✓ Yes, sure washing machines and sweeping machines are very important in a home because with the help of washing machines one can easily save time and wash clothes.

The original sentence has a typo 'Washington pins' instead of 'washing machines'. Also, 'their time' and 'their clothes' are better expressed as 'time' and 'clothes' in general statements. The plural noun 'washing machines' is correctly used here.

× Because tidiness is very important in everyone house.

✓ Tidiness is very important in everyone's house.

Starting a sentence with 'Because' without completing the thought leads to a sentence fragment. Also, 'everyone house' should be 'everyone's house' to show possession.

× With the help of cleanness people can become more hygienic and I think so it's impossible with the help of the washing machine.

✓ With the help of cleanliness, people can become more hygienic, and I think it is impossible without the help of the washing machine.

'Cleanness' is better replaced with 'cleanliness'. The phrase 'I think so it's impossible' is unclear; it should be 'I think it is impossible'. Also, the meaning suggests that cleanliness is impossible without the washing machine, so 'without' is more appropriate than 'with'.

× Yes, definitely. Whenever I use a new machine, I always check its instructions because with the help of proper precautions and instructions, 1 can easily operate the machine in more easy way.

✓ Yes, definitely. Whenever I use a new machine, I always check its instructions because with the help of proper precautions and instructions, I can easily operate the machine in an easier way.

The pronoun '1' is a typo and should be 'I'. Also, 'in more easy way' is incorrect; the comparative form 'in an easier way' is appropriate here.

× And I think so also one can easily learn about the tips and tricks regarding that machine.

✓ And I also think one can easily learn about the tips and tricks regarding that machine.

The phrase 'I think so also' is awkward. It should be 'I also think' for correct word order and clarity.

× Yes, as I mentioned, reading the instructions is very crucial in before using the machines because with the help of reading the instructions, it's not only train people how to use that machine but it's also help to regarding the precautions which which people need to do before using the machine.

✓ Yes, as I mentioned, reading the instructions is very crucial before using the machines because with the help of reading the instructions, it not only trains people how to use that machine but also helps regarding the precautions which people need to take before using the machine.

The phrase 'in before using' is incorrect; 'before using' is sufficient. 'It's not only train' should be 'it not only trains' to agree with the singular subject. 'It's also help to regarding' is incorrect; it should be 'also helps regarding'. The repeated 'which' is a typo. 'People need to do' should be 'people need to take' for correct collocation with 'precautions'.